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[Chadder]

this is my comic if you would like to check it out

Jaak | Tapas

[ratscout]

Well, here's Inheritance. I will read yours tonight!

Inheritance | Tapas

[Fuzzyman818]

If you ever need a good laugh, you can always check out my weekly Sunday strip.

Capture the Flag | Tapas

[gegallas]

Hey Everyone: I just started posting my series The Poet and the Flea to Tapas and was hoping you'd check it out! It's a macabre historical fiction about the 18th-century poet-painter William Blake and the bloody-thirsty creature known as The Ghost of a Flea. The first 5 pages are now available to read and I'll be posting a new page every Wednesday. Thank you so much! https://tapas.io/series/ThePoetandtheFlea/info

[anmitsuu]

Yes!! Of course, just subscribed now!

[anmitsuu]

Sorry I didn't get to you sooner!
This is another one of those novels with a completely different format (which I applaud you for trying). I totally get needing to stand out but this occasionally at times can risk in people not wanting to read your novel. I think people dislike what's unfamiliar to them - but in the same sense if you are able to find your target audience, that's great!

I feel like overall, you tend to over-explain in your chapters. Since what you're aiming for is short and concise chapters, the over explaining feels too casual. If you do too much overexplaning it will feel like you're spoon feeding to the audience. And while this is good at times, it can be a deterrent from people getting through your novel. For example you write "now we see a boy called Leo", when you can just write "a boy named Leo." It just flows better.

[anmitsuu]

Chapter 1: The dialogue here flows very well and isn't stiff. For example, when Mother speaks it's different from how Isiah speaks, being true to her character. I really like how you did that- it makes the characters seem more real. I can tell that you spent a lot of thought into world building here, so it's really great that you put so many fine details! My only suggestion (which, you don't need to head) is that it feels rather long for a introduction chapter. I feel like there's a lot of explaining, and not a lot of showing. This generally would be a turn off for new readers. Show, don't tell!
Chapter 2: Rina's attitude is definitely someone who has royal blood. I love how she remains polite but you reveal her true intentions through words and inner dialogue. It's very clear that she doesn't do things out of the goodness of her heart but rather feels obligated to do something. I think that is a very good and interesting character you have!
Chapter 3: Again, Rina is such a dynamic character. You can feel that she's longing for something (freedom, perhaps?) But is bound by her duties. I would highly recommend you to play into this more.

[youu2sef]

First I wanna thank you for your words, I really appreciate it, and Yeah, I write a novel with different style, and I took that style from my main language " Arabic ", this novel was first written in an arabic style ( which is almost like that one ) then when I found out about tapas I translated it into English, but in my mind my novel is a comic in the same time because I really wanted to make a comic from it in the first time, but I have zero skills in drawing, so in every chapter I want the reader to know what's going on like if it's really a comic scene ( holding the cup, hitting someone or something, showing what the character is doing while he speaks... ), and specially in action scenes ( you can find one in the episodes of unexpected training ), and finally the length which I limit in about 500 word because too much writings make the person bored, or sometimes I can break that number if it is an important episode .

And Thank you again , I'll make my best to correct anything should be corrected

[MattRAuthor]

Thank you for the feedback! I'll definitely take it into account next time I do an edit

[Panpan]

Currently 32C but with humidty, the 'real feel' is 41

Fox Fire | Tapas

[gh0stcr33p]

here’s my fantasy/adventure comic Mirror Monster if you want to read it

Mirror Monster | Tapas

also if it isn’t too much to ask if you get around to reviewing it, I’d prefer having only the newer content reviewed since the first few chapters are several years old

[paintedbynick]

Just subbed! Your novel looks really cool. Hope you like my comic:

Genre: Comedy

Summary: A collection of 4 panel long, gag based comics!

Merry Mondays

Merry Mondays | Tapas

[impossiblesoul]

I suppose I could throw my mess into the mix.

Conquering Planet Earth | Tapas

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[malikhill247]

Hope you like what you see.

Celestials V Hunters | Tapas

[mikeampao1]

Much appreciated if you check mine

Conqueror | Tapas

[anmitsuu]

I'm going to comment on your novel, BUT I have to say that the art style for your comic is just amazing. It really looks like something I could read out of a DC comic book!! Captain Lily is a QT too.
Prologue: You start off by saying the Academy, but does it have a name? If so, I would recommend that you put the name there as well! Also, you should explain what HPA stands for. I understand that this novel is a followup to your comic, but if someone stumbles upon your novel before your comic they could potentially be confused. The first few seconds make an important impression on what makes a reader engage with your material. I definitely feel that this novel is catered towards your readers from your comics, so I feel that you should explain things more thoroughly. I know you have a link to the comic down below in your author's notes but... Just things to think about.
Chapter 1: Ok yassss, dialogue flowing really well. I feel as though comic book writers rely a lot on dialogue to keep the flow of things, and you do that really well. To the extent that the lack of exposition through writing is perfectly fine because everything feels very familiar and well explained!
Chapter 2: You have a perfect balance of comedy and action. I feel like at times comedic dialogue can get tacky or feel like it's overcompensating for something. This definitely feels the opposite, and is very natural.

[LWriter]

art off by saying the Academy, but does it have a name? If so, I would recommend that you put the name there as well! Also, you should explain what HPA stands for. I understand that this novel is a followup to your comic, but if someone stumbles upon your novel before your comic they could potentially be confused. The first few seconds make an important impression on what makes a reader engage with your material. I definitely feel that this novel is catered towards your readers from your comics, so I feel that you should explain things more thoroughly. I know you have a link to the comic down below in your author's notes but... Just things to think about. Chapter 1: Ok yassss, dialogue flowing really well. I feel as though comic book writers rely a lot on dialogue to keep the flow of things, and you do that really well. To the extent that the lack of exposition through writing is perfectly fine because everything feels very familiar and well explained!Chapter 2: You have a perfect balance of comedy and action. I feel like at times comedic dialogue can get tacky or feel like it's overcompensating for something. This definitely feels the

Thank you! That's really kind of you! I'm glad you liked the novel so far ^^ I do tend to write prose in a very character driven way, focusing more on dialogue and inner perspective than describing things around them, which used to bother me, but I've kind of accepted as my style and people do seem to like it lol

[anmitsuu]

Hi Jen! I've gotten around to reviewing your novel so thank you for being patient with me! You are very sweet. I hope you will subscribe to my novel and enjoy it!
Chapter 1: I can tell by the first sentence that you have the same problem as I do. I often find myself writing in passive writing rather than active. There isn't necessarily anything wrong with with this (in fact it's honestly just a matter of writing style), but active writing tends to be more impactful and less confusing. For example you've written "was kneeling in the dirt carelessly" but since this is something that is taking place in the present it should be "is kneeling I the dirt carelessly". Another example of this could be when you talk about the woman smiling at him, it should be "when she smiles at him." this is totally a problem that I have myself, so honestly don't worry about it too much. Just keep an eye out for that sort of thing!
Chapter 2: Throughout the entirety of the chapters that I have read, it's very clear that your strong suit in writing is in descriptions of surroundings. I think that amazing because often times writing lacks the explanation of environment. You are able to do this really well and I can feel where the character is, like I am right beside them.
Chapter 3: Faine has an interesting dynamic because he feels guilty for killing something, but has to do it anyway for the sake of survival. I hope that this is something that you will mirror in the future, like if he has to ever kill a person/ thing for his or someone else's survival.

Btw I hope your wrist is better.

[anmitsuu]

Hello, I have decided to read Devil's Triangle!
Prologue: Very eye-catching prologue, we love to see it. This is written in a way that is engaging and I love how you've gone and decided to talk about ripples in time. Like the butterfly effect, right? I think that's a very good analogy. I also love that you've written it as the main character speaking to us, the reader. It familiarizes us with them and enables us to feel connected in a small way.
Chapter 1: I love the way you've decided to represent social media. This is often a trope that feels really overdone and is often very unpleasing to the eye as a reader, and can get cluttered. You've done it in a way that it's clear what I am reading and it's purpose. Personally I think it's a shame that your chapters are rather short. I can tell that you excel with descriptions (judging by the way you speak about the way the city looks at night) so as I reader I would want more. But I completely understand the appeal for people who want short stories that they can scroll through.
Chapter 2: Since Thomas has inner dialogue of "Normal is the new boring" I would recommend you to italicize that. That's just a personal preference though, so there's no need for you to take that advice! I love the way this chapter is completely foreshadowing what's going to happen in the future. It's very ironic!