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Hi! As much as I would love to review some of the older content, I would have absolutely no idea what's going on because your comic is rather long. :(( I'm sorry. I can however comment on some of the art style in your new comic! But none of the actual content content , ya know? Starting off there's…
Ew humidity. Lol. BTW how did you get so many subscribers in such a short amount of time! I'm jealous, tell me your secrets T^T Prologue: A very simple and effective way to capture your audience's attention. I often find that people who launch straight into the action tend to over do / over explain…
I like the simplicity of your comic. It takes a simple premise and expands it to the extent that you've managed to completely surround your comic off this game. It's really creative and easy to follow, despite having no dialogue. I definitely feel like there's an old fashioned feel to this comic, li…
Ok first off, wow you've gone and written a lot for this novel. I can already tell off the bat that there's a lot of time and effort that you put in to cultivating it, and I applaud you for that. You've done a great job so far, so here are some thoughts that I have for the first couple of chapters. …
I love how long your chapters are and how much thought you put into the characters. I also love that you included little descriptions about who they are towards the end of your chapter, I feel like that's a nice personal touch that makes them feel more real. Why does Gromley totally look like the he…
It is very hard to get views as a novel writer on this site, lol. But you've just started, so there is no need to panic! I look forward to seeing you grow as a writer. Thank you for the subscribe btw, I hope you enjoy my novel. Chapter 1: Some of the words here flow rather awkwardly. When you wri…
The line work in some of your earlier chapters can be a bit distracting and cluttered for people to figure out what is going on. I totally get needing to shade- but some lines are too much and make it hard to see what exactly is going on without squinting. You occasionally forget to put question ma…
There are a grammar errors within the chapters that I have read that interrupt the flow of your dialogue or explanations. They do not distract enough for me to forget what is going on. However, I would highly recommend you go through these just to try and change them. I often find that people tend …
Monkey Moo, lol. Idk why that's as funny as it is. The character straight off the bat is pretty relatable, I think it's funny that he's looking for his name on the internet as that's totally something I do when I come up with character names. I love that you included the explanation/synopsis of you…
Hey, thanks for the sub! I just subbed to yours as well. I love the character introduction sequence to her family and her life before everything that is going on. I think you've done a good job in recreating those memories and making us alongside the main character feel nostalgic, and look back on …
Just starting out, I feel that your "Meet the characters" page should come first. I'm not sure whether you can change the organization of chapters on Tapas but it feels very out of nowhere, I would much prefer for the introduction to come first rather than two pages in. It just feels like a little b…
I've gone and read Blade Quest! Chapter 1: There's a lot of different questions that are left unanswered for this chapter. Some are for the sake of ambiguity I am assuming ( for exampled the monster that they are being chased by, or the heist that they are performing) but others I feel can be explai…
First off thank you for the spam of likes on my novel! Much appreciated T^T Chapter 1: OK wOW the illustrations here, and on your cover are absolutely gorgeous I am in love. A very well written fight scene straight off the bat is a perfect example of a good writer. I often feel like battle scenes la…
Yes, I see that you have subbed! Thank you for your comment, lolol! Chapter 1: I feel as though you tend to over explain some of your writing. It tends to fluctuate, but it feels awkward when you keep reiterating that the "cloaked stranger" is speaking to "the boy". It's pretty clear who is saying…
Hey, no worries! But I hope you well read it when you have time :)! I love that you have experimented with different angles as you do action scenes. You are able to move from scene to scene very fluidly and this allows for me to feel more interested in your comic. I can especially appreciate that i…
Yes thank you! I will totally do that lol. I'm having a popsicle as I type! (Not really, it's more like me making a mess) Chapter 1: Elijah and Matteo's relationship is so cute. I love the way you've decided to go and write this, it already has a lot of unanswered questions that will make the reade…
I can tell that over the course of however long you have been doing comics that your art style has gotten better and less messy. Although the content/ humor that you use is something that I'm not super familiar with, I can totally see the appeal for your respective audience! There are some minor is…
Please do when you have time! Also lolol love that you're on Line Webtoon as well. I would totally do that if I was a comic artist. I personally feel as though the colored speech bubbles and colored text are a little too much aesthetic wise. It can be kind of distracting from your art, and I believ…
Hello, I have decided to read Devil's Triangle! Prologue: Very eye-catching prologue, we love to see it. This is written in a way that is engaging and I love how you've gone and decided to talk about ripples in time. Like the butterfly effect, right? I think that's a very good analogy. I also love t…
Hi Jen! I've gotten around to reviewing your novel so thank you for being patient with me! You are very sweet. I hope you will subscribe to my novel and enjoy it! Chapter 1: I can tell by the first sentence that you have the same problem as I do. I often find myself writing in passive writing rath…
I'm going to comment on your novel, BUT I have to say that the art style for your comic is just amazing. It really looks like something I could read out of a DC comic book!! Captain Lily is a QT too. Prologue: You start off by saying the Academy, but does it have a name? If so, I would recommend th…
Chapter 1: The dialogue here flows very well and isn't stiff. For example, when Mother speaks it's different from how Isiah speaks, being true to her character. I really like how you did that- it makes the characters seem more real. I can tell that you spent a lot of thought into world building here…
Sorry I didn't get to you sooner! This is another one of those novels with a completely different format (which I applaud you for trying). I totally get needing to stand out but this occasionally at times can risk in people not wanting to read your novel. I think people dislike what's unfamiliar to…
Yes!! Of course, just subscribed now!
Hey everyone! I've been at this for quite a while and will be taking a break. I really love reading all of your novels and stories so I will resume tommorow! Thank you for this opportunity of growth! Everyone who's reading this please feel free to continue to leave your stories/comics! I will revi…
Ok I see you with that Manga style way of reading -- I love it! Just as a suggestion, I think you should put a censor on your work. Since it's pretty gory/violent I think that Tapas might have a problem with you not doing so. For the younger kids, ya know? Man is your artwork incredibly. It's super…
Hey, thank you for the sub! I just subbed to yours as well! For the prologue, I think you have written a lot. It's a big read, and I feel like sometimes people might be deterred from finishing through the chapter and/or might skim through it because of how many words are on one page. My suggestion …
I've gone ahead and decided to read Words. I love comics that make the reader think a little bit! I love the formatting of these one panels. Have you come up with these yourself? It's something that's incredibly universal and can be relatable to any reader. Great job! I think that it's very insightf…
I've gone ahead and decided to read Papillon! I think what you're doing with these novels is really bold and unique approach. I think it would be cute for you to include subtle Easter eggs among both of them with small characters being in each story (does that make sense? the heat is frying my brai…
I've went ahead and read Tales of Seeing Beeing since it's newer and I'm better at critiquing novels :)) Chapter 1: The flow of this chapter feels a little choppy and unfamiliar. The dialogue being separated from the people who are speaking (if that makes sense) is something that I feel you should c…