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I love how long your chapters are and how much thought you put into the characters. I also love that you included little descriptions about who they are towards the end of your chapter, I feel like that's a nice personal touch that makes them feel more real. Why does Gromley totally look like the heartless from Kingdom of Hearts, you feel me? I love it lolol I'm so here 4 this old man. I love you've gone and played with lighting. Especially during action scenes, everything feels really dynamic and well thought out. At times feel dark but this totally plays with the ambience, and feel for where the comic is taking place. Great job!

Ok first off, wow you've gone and written a lot for this novel. I can already tell off the bat that there's a lot of time and effort that you put in to cultivating it, and I applaud you for that. You've done a great job so far, so here are some thoughts that I have for the first couple of chapters. And thanks for checking out my novel! I hope you like it.
Chapter 1: Eory already feels like a really interesting and well written character. The realness of his imagination alongside your talented writing is really great. Eory's internal conflict as well is something that will be great to see how he resolves/ betters himself as a whole.
Chapter 2: Wow, I can totally feel for Eory as a reader. You really feel bad for his predicament and can tell how it's effecting him as a whole. Is it fair for him to be locked up? It's hard to say as of now, but you can tell that the stories of Pollyanna has helped aid his experience in being less painful.
Chapter 3: Eory and Kori have a really interesting dynamic as well. You can feel his pain and suffering, especially with her harshness. But at the same time he cannot help but love her. I feel like this is something that he will deal with in the future: especially for someone who has been locked up for so long. When you are deprived of human contact for so long, won't that make it easier to trust, and easier to love people?

Thank you very much! ^^ I'm really glad to hear that you like the characters. :smile: Also thanks on the feedback of the content of the chapters. I'll try to make each chapter more full of content & dialogue ^^

Oh my gosh! Thank you so much for reading it and for your very kind feedback! I'm glad you can tell the amount of time I've put into it (I really do try so hard! XD) and that I could convey what I wanted to convey with the story. Thanks so much again for taking the time to read it!

I really loved your story, as well!

I like the simplicity of your comic. It takes a simple premise and expands it to the extent that you've managed to completely surround your comic off this game. It's really creative and easy to follow, despite having no dialogue. I definitely feel like there's an old fashioned feel to this comic, like when your characters lift a sign to point out that he's looking through the barrel of a canon. I really enjoy this style of back and forth, and can totally see why people like it!

Ew humidity. Lol. BTW how did you get so many subscribers in such a short amount of time! I'm jealous, tell me your secrets T^T
Prologue: A very simple and effective way to capture your audience's attention. I often find that people who launch straight into the action tend to over do / over explain but you did a great job with the ambiguity.
Chapter 1: Your chapters are short but make for an easy read with the organization. I love the little kitty and it's descriptions but I would recommend you to explain what a soot sprite is, or at least just say 'like soot' when describing the cat. I love the Ghibli reference but I'm not sure everyone would understand what that is when reading it. You say that he feels "pure fear" but do not divulge into what this pure fear is. I would love for you to describe this sensation of fear since you're very good with descriptions. What does it make him feel, not being able to move his body? Certainly scared but does he feel like he's going to die? A shadowy figure on top him is something that he would be fearful of, but does it make his breath hitch? What does he think? Maybe he isn't scared because he goes through it so much , etc etc.
Chapter 2: You should describe how long the trip from Bluff to Stewart island is. This kid is nosy af, what does he look like? I think it's funny that you included his inner dialogue, lmao. I was going to ask why he was telling the kid so much.

Hi! As much as I would love to review some of the older content, I would have absolutely no idea what's going on because your comic is rather long. :(( I'm sorry. I can however comment on some of the art style in your new comic! But none of the actual content content , ya know?
Starting off there's some Steven universe vibes for sure. Not that I've actually watched that show but it totally looks like the art style (with your own individual quirks) It also reminds me of Gravity Falls, lolol. However as you go on with your comic you've seemed to find your own style. It feels more unique and less like you're mirroring something (whether this is intentional or unintentional, I cannot tell). You've done a really good job with improving the lighting in some of your older comics to now. At times it feels unnecessary and awkward, but I can see very clearly what the main purpose of the lighting is, and what to focus on while looking at some of your newer chapters. I also love the change in font that you've made, this time it's way more clear and easier to read. I think you've done a great job here, and within the years that you've been on tapas you've definitely grown. You should be really proud of yourself.

Thank you for the feedback, glad you enjoyed it and it gave a good impression to you :smiley:

Here, it's been raining very heavy
If you find time to read my fantasy novel, Daystar, please do. Hope you enjoy it.
Stay safe!

This should help tickle you funny bone

Here are my comics, hope you like them.

Name: Gamers Guff

Genre: Comedy

Summary: Meet Dave and Ryan, two brothers who are as polar opposite as you can imagine. But the one thing they both have in common, they both love video games. However, in their case, they don't just play the games, they literally go inside the games themselves. This results in a variety adventures(or misadventures) with these guys. Enter the marvellous and insane worlds of Gamers Guff!!!

Why should you read it?
It's simply good for a laugh


Best Example


https://tapas.io/episode/1775200

Name: Online Hassle

Genre: Comedy

Summary: Welcome to the city of Newsfeed, a world populated with citizens who all resemble various mobile phones. They are all tasked with the most tedious and menial job you can imagine.

Why should you read it?
It's simply good for a laugh


Best Examples


https://tapas.io/episode/1839596

Thank you :slight_smile: I've spent a lot of time working on the magic system and the way it interacts with the culture of the world. There are definitely explanations coming :slight_smile: In Chapter 0 I wanted to spend more time showing some of those things more than leading with big expository conversations that characters that already understand the mechanics wouldn't really have. "In this world..." "we both know that..." etc lol A short explanation for you because you were so kind :slight_smile: The gloves are called Gauntlets and work effectively similar to a Macro you might set on a keyboard for a game. Basically there are a limited amount of slot that can be set to be cast quickly. The little cylinder is called a Spellbook. This has the longer and more complete list of spells they would have access to. But try scrolling through that to find the right spell when you're in a situation or running. The spheres that get mentioned are topographical circles that surround the sources of Mana. As you get further from sources the magic gets weaker and at certain points you lose access to certain types of magic altogether.

You know, you aren't the first one to think that dino monster is cute lol Might have to show more of that creature in the future :stuck_out_tongue: People tended to like it.

Always down for feedback/suggestions. I will take a look at yours as well!

Here's a long bingable webcomic if you're up for a challenge. 380+ pages strong and still going.

Give it a read and tell me what you think of it.

Well, here goes nothing! ~

Megachurch is a horror novel about an inspector who stumbled upon the enigmatic journal of Justin Harper Lee, a young man who committed suicide on unknown reasons. Now, the inspector has jumped into a dark rabbit hole that lands him into a downward spiral filled with cultists, death, bondage, and authoritarianism.

It's skehri, ir's mystery, and it's gay! Hella gay!

My novel added a new chapter this morning.

Title: Avalon Springs
Genre: Fantasy, Action

My ongoing webcomic is something that grew with me. I started It when I was a kid, around 12 or 13 years old. Now, being with 24, dealing with depression, anxiety and others mental healthy issues for more than a decade, I try to show people how that life is through my boys. The struggles, confusion, misunderstandings etc that a lot of people go through and may not know how to show or express. I want to make you all valid, listened to, understood, things that not everybody had in their life. I know I hadn’t.

That’s the story of a group of teens that grew up together although it took them 15 years to start knowing each other. We’ll see how does mental health affects the lives of those kids. What do they hide behind their facades?

Saudade is a Boys Love comic.

https://tapas.io/series/saudade

Thank you so much for taking time out of your busy schedule to review my work! Of course I will subscribe to your novel.
Chapter 1: I think you meant past tense instead of present tense? Yeah, I really like present tense, but past tense is much more popular, so I tend to make mistakes when I convert it. Thanks for pointing those out.
Chapter 2: I'm glad you feel that way. I want my readers to immerse themselves in the world and story, so I try to keep an eye on the characters' surroundings.
Chapter 3: It will indeed come into play later. Soon, actually.
My wrist is doing fine now. Thanks for your concern. :slight_smile:

Thank you so much for your thoughts and comments! I'm glad that you find both my art and my writing to be engaging!

I do go into more details of Ira and her insomnia as well as her struggles as a child in later chapters, however once this story is complete as a manuscript, I do want to go back and edit it. I plan on collecting these different comments and critics to use to help improve aspects of the story :D.

Thank you so much fren!!

I am new to creating both original comics and in a scrolling format, would help a ton if I can get some honest feedback :slight_smile: My story is titled McBritain

If you like Scrolling format:

If you like reading in traditional layout:
https://tapas.io/series/McBritain-Manga-Layout1

I've just added a new opening scene and would love to get feedback. I can't wait to check out your novel, I've just looked at the info page and it sounds really interesting.

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As a child, Dexter was secretly taught magic. His Gran sharing her ability to see ghosts. When he became a librarian, he was prepared to ignore the allure of the magic world. Until he moved back to his haunted childhood town and learnt that old habits die hard. After an almost deadly encounter, he is forced into the local magical community. Unable to get one ghost out of his head Dexter is drawn to solving her murder with journals of the detective initially tasked with solving the case.

Hey! Thanks for this, here is my sci-fi/horror novel, Vehementia:

Thank you! I made some changes like you suggested. How's this for the kid's description? :wink:

There weren't a lot of people —only himself and a family with a young child who looked like Cartman’s twin from the South Park TV show.

And the trip takes one hour! I put that in as well. I swear I did, but I think I mentally put it in my memory rather than writing it down! :o

I think it really helps that BL is popular on Tapas? I was worried because it isn't for pleasure only like a lot of the premium comics. Of course I'll have some steamy stuff, but there will be a plot :wink:

Personally, I think the cover helps a ton. It's the first thing people see and we all secretly judge a book for it's cover.

Hi there my comic is in the beginning stages only have up to page 10 up but its the best I can do for now,

Let me know if you like the comic or not in the comment sections!

BTW quarantine is making us all bored, especially with it lasting as long as it is now! Hopefully you're somewhere where there is phase 1 or more.

Thanks for checking my comic if you do!

If you like slice of life and a bit of mystery My comic TLC might be up your alley!

The comic is about a young girl that gets kicked out of an orphanage for her unpredictable powers and ends up getting taken in by a shapeshifter into a mish-mashed adopted family. she has to learn what it means to be herself, be part of a family, and uncover whatever the family's butler is hiding before its too late!

The comic has got aspects of modern fantasy, mystery, found family, and slice of life (as well as tiny bits of science fiction but thats far from the main focus). I'd probably rate it at PG-13 (specific Pages with PG-13 content are flagged as such in the episode tittles as well)

Heres the link if interested!

thank you very much, i enjoyed and humbled by your comment. thank you very much for taking the time to read and put so much thought into it