Okay, I have read all (but @Spectorium_1 because he edited out his part), and I have to say this for all of you
-Please, describe the place where your characters are! The time! The era! The clothes, hair, looks, etc!.
-@ivanskilling and @AKG you both started with conversations and a situation happening. @ivanskilling has more points though, because the happening at the beginning was not real, it was a video that the character was watching and that gave the vibe of what everything else was going to be without having to describe it, -but for some people it may take too long. By I.2 I had some problems, as I had no idea of the characteristic of the character, where he is (in the world, city), what clothes does he uses. He seemed a bit flustered to have landed in this job, even when it was his dream, what I found awkward. Definetely it has a lot of points to add drawings to accompany the story, but a final warning. Don't decide things for the readers as 'the CEO and CTO are both very handsome' -that statement depends on the viewer. I for example, found that the CEO had sleepy face, and thought that he has the ideas, not the motivation to do anything. The CTO looked like a con man. He put the ideas in motion, and may steal all the money at the end of the book. And none of them prepared for the picture to be taken. I never thought of them as 'handsomes', and that kind of statement that reveals the inner thoughts of the principal character should be addresed as such, not as a certainty.
-For @AKG, besides the lack of placement of characters, you try to put too much in too litle. In just one chapter, I read something about heros, a gym, a university, a whole family who seems to be in a two floor edifice, and one of them is invencible? Besides that, dad tries an insight on the action of the brothers. Thats too much happenings on the first chapter, where we expect to learn things, but not in such a load. There is a need of breathing. In chapter 2 you take more time to describe your character and his situation, and it feels way better the pacing. If people read after chapter 1, they stay. And about chapter 2! The chemistry about Gabe and August was palpable. THAT's why people stay reading. There was right in there a wall that they both should work on and the motivation for the next chapters. You took your time, you choose the right words, and delivered. It was a bit late, because people should be this compromised on chapter 1, but still delivered =D
-@ccmatta Loved your work, really. I subscribed~
What I can say to you, is that you need to do proper backgrounds, ha! But you must know that. Besides that, change from time to time the close up panels, study a bit of gesture drawing so you can add more action in your drawings. About the pace, its a bit quick for me, as first this character made himself some cuts, and later the other had a panic crisis. It was a thing after another and none of them are solved, but I understand why is that, because all of their problems will be treated during the comic, but I felt that if you start with that emotion so soon, you will always have your audience and your characters in danger mode. It may also had been because I read all in one go (not all, a lot though). In overall is very good at any rate. That's why I subscribed =D
If all or any of you think that I made an underserving critique, plz, don't take it seriously. I am just guy. Follow your instincts, read, learn your craft, and grow. We are all here to have fun at the end of day, so have fun!
