Me, who only ever makes blurbs, never actual stories up until now and never going to critique threads because I don't know what I'm doing:
So, personally, a rule for me is that I'd never use personal pronouns in blurbs, unless it's like some sort of comedic self-aware story. I wouldn't refer to the protagonist as "our peasant girl, Harlow", rather, I would probably say "Harlow, a peasant girl,". I'd also change finances to debts, since I think that's what you were trying to say and it sounds bit better, so the rewritten sentence would be:
Harlow, a peasant girl, has never had a peaceful day to rest with her debts weighing her down.
I'm also intrigued by the cash grab part. What do you mean by a cash grab? Is it an opportunity or is it a person? An object? I think mentioning what it is, even vaguely, can build more intrigue to the reader. Like: "when an opportunity to make money pops up, Harlow's dreams may come true". Something like that.
Anyway, my critique is short because I'm not entirely too sure what to put (I really don't do critiques often, sorry), so I hope the advice I gave is good, haha. Hopefully sxxaint can add more!
Here's my blurb for my upcoming comic that I actually got up and wrote for this specific thread (i know i said i only ever makes blurbs but I swear this is one of the only stories I don't have a blurb written beforehand because I was absolutely stumped, send help):
Aleeyah Zenith, heiress to the Zeunian Empire, wishes to one day be crowned Empress and bring prosperity to the galaxy. When one day a festival she was present in was attacked by a figure from Pitia’s history long thought dead, she finds herself on a ship with three Celestials - powerful beings who wield mysterious weapons called Mystics - on a quest to free her people from her tyrannical father and discovering the secrets about the magic that powers society.