thanks for your review! from what I've heard, character is very important for hooking people, so I tried to make sure their personalities are in the blurb and I guess adjectives ended up being my way of doing it. I'll keep in mind not to use them that much if they confuse people.
also,
But can surviving ever be a replacement for being happy?
I was really struggling to phrase that sentence well, but I think you nailed it. thanks!
Your blurb has a nice length, but I feel like there's a bunch of unique terms to your story that kinda make it confusing to read (like the Dreamers, Echo, and Gaia). A thing us fantasy writers gotta deal with is how to explain unique terms in our stories, and I feel like it might be best to leave that to the story itself, unless we can quickly define them in the blurb.
Alfredo Ventura is a young boy who always wanted to be a Dreamer, the powerful heroes of his favorite storybook. Yet he is unaware of the power that already resides in him, which can bring peace to the World of Gaia once and for all.
I think the blurb could also use some more information from the comic's plot too. I'm a bit confused where Alfredo is actually. When I read the prologue, I thought he was a kid in our world just reading a regular fantasy book, and then I expected that he would somehow get "isekaied" into the book. But then I go through "Starchild" and apparently he's always lived in Gaia? I will say I don't really have a lot of time to look through these stories I'm reviewing, so I mostly skim and might miss some information. So I'd like to know what actually happened to him, and maybe we can add that to the blurb.
Well, the only thing that happened in the time skip was that he got separated by his mother, otherwise, He always was in Gaia, being what came after earth as the Lorebook implied.
Although, that little suggestion could be useful indeed, I really appreciated this review overal.
Edit: although I admit I did it a bit as a “Isekai-bait” since I wanted the shock factor to be that it’s not actually an Isekai (since it a a bit over-satured as a genre, I wanted to play with some bait and switch eh eh)
@Awesomeness_Studios Would this sound better?
Alfredo Ventura is a young boy who always wanted to be a Dreamer, one of the powerful heroes of his favorite storybook. Yet he is unaware of the power that already resides in him, which can bring peace to the World of Gaia once and for all, despite all the obstacles He will have to face following the separation from his family, and the changes He brought into the life of many, in a series of Stories that will lead to his growth.
Okay a major issue with this blurb is that it tells very little about the actual story. I decided to read the first few episodes and WOW there is so much going on that you don't even tell in your blurb. Don't sell yourself short and just say what the plot is. Let's actually list those plot points:
I'm pretty short on personal time so I can't really afford to read the whole thing, so this is what I got from what I read. I think you can do something like:
Two strangers with the same name and face meet one day and are taken on an interdimensional quest to save the multiverse.
Definitely you can add some more sentences to hint more that happens in your story (maybe with what happens when they make contact 
), but I think this would be a good starting point. You have a very unique story, so definitely market that as much as possible.
Hmm, I'm a bit on the edge about it, since that last sentence then becomes a run-on sentence, making it more difficult to read. We can still keep the part about being separated from his family though:
Alfredo Ventura is a young boy who always wanted to be a Dreamer, the powerful heroes of his favorite storybook. But when he must separate from his family, he discovers the power that already resides in him, which can bring peace to the World of Gaia once and for all.
Actually wait, as I'm writing this I got an idea to end this blurb in a question:
Alfredo Ventura is a young boy who always wanted to be a Dreamer, the powerful heroes of his favorite storybook. But when he must separate from his family, he discovers the power that already resides in him. Is it enough to bring peace to the World of Gaia once and for all?
I'm sorry for not thinking of this earlier, but sometimes question endings can help with getting the reader interested, since it isn't entirely specified how the story will end and now they have to read it to find out 
. But I'll leave it to you to pick which one you prefer.
While the separation wasn't an agreed decision, but rather an accident, I can say that this suggestion was much better, although I've decided that the final version will be something more akin to this:
"Alfredo Ventura is a young boy who always looked up to be a Dreamer, powerful heroes of his bedtime stories. But after he got separated from his family, he discovers a power that already resides in him. Will it be enough to bring change to the World of Gaia, for the better?"
Would love to hear your thoughts on mine. I've tried to make it shorter in the past since it uses almost all the characters Webtoons gives, but could never figure out what I should remove.
OH that is really helpful!
THANK YOU SO MUCH!
I actually did not want to spoil much of the story so I made the blurb as small as possible, but yes I will make the changes. Thank you again.
mine is yet to be released but i'd love to hear your thoughts on my blurb as well!
description:
Across the galaxies, there is a book club hosted by four deities. From tragedies to passionate endings, Fate, Rebirth, Love, and Time are nothing more than ancient readers drunk on stories. And in order to savour such fables, they have devised a single consciousness that would act as their eyes and ears—a dimension traveller, in other words.
This traveller only has one purpose: to convey the worldly attachments of each and every storybook to these gods. So when a mysterious existence starts making their presence known and leaving their own mark within the pages, all for the traveller to find, a curiosity begins to blossom.
Perhaps there are more secrets that the universe holds, and perhaps it can be found in the Library of the Versescape.
Oof sorry i abandoned this thread for 3 days, but I'm back to do more blurbs.
So for this blurb, you got the general idea down, but it can still be shortened. A good tip to use when you don't know how to shorten it is to just list down the main ideas, and then turn that into the blurb.
A new science company has discovered a way to modify memories, and now the majority of the population has undergone the procedure. Believing this to be a secret scheme to take over the world, a resistance group formed to fight against it in the shadows, knowing the risk of getting caught and all their memories rewritten.
So you can do something along the lines of this, or change it if you still feel like something is missing. A couple sentences should be what you aim for however.
Ooooh that's an awesome idea 
are you still open?
If yes, I would be really happy, if you could give you oppinion on this intro. I'm not that creative, when it comes to wording, so I struggled quite alot to finally got this one down :,D
Description
In the morning Osram was just an unlucky treasure-hunter, now she plays a fake girlfriend for a strange guy. What for? Money of course. But will those two knuckle-heads realise, there are some dark foes planning something? Probably not.
Sorry for occasionally forgetting to check on this thread. I have quite a busy life so this often goes past my thoughts. Sorry about this, and unfortunately I would expect this more often in the future 
A common mistake I see with blurbs is that they are far too long. Aim for 1-3 sentences, because most of the time a good story can be summed up like that. Let's list the basic points of the story
Four dieties host a book club to satisfy their hunger for stories. In order to fully engage with these fables, they create a being to travel through the worlds within these pages for them. But when a mysterious person appears and the stories begin to change, the traveller grows curious: perhaps there are more secrets that the universe of the Versescape holds
Essentially something like that can be done for your blurb, of course if there are any other details missing that you feel are important too, feel free to add them.
thank you so much!!! i’ll be taking that into account. i thought it’d be easier to explain the traveller’s purpose in the blurb but it does feel like it’ll be conveyed anyway through the story. thank you again!
If this is still open can you take a look at mine? I struggle with summaries! Thanks for offering to do this for the community, its nice to have a second set of eyes help with a blurb. Full disclosure mine's way too long but I don't know what to trim.
Discription: Seven days ago an alien green storm swallowed the entire state of Kansas , taking nearly three million citizens with it.
Nothing goes in and nothing comes out.
Out of explanations and options, the American government turns to its most secretive branch, the infamous Farm. The Farm sends inexperienced agent Dorothy Gale through the storm wall, hoping to use her psychic abilities to make contact with the other side.
Accompany her is the cyborg Sargent Nic Chaves, the unflappable sniper Corvus Granger, a former science experiment Feral, and a robotic spy dubbed T.O.T.O. Together they survive the storm but they didn't land in Kansas. This is Oz and its no Fairyland.
For Dorothy though it's familiar, and she has no idea why.
Nothing could have prepared them for bizarre hell scape that greeted them or the political nightmare they thrown into. Dead witches, civil wars, and rebellions; oh my!
This merry old land of Oz is trying its best to kill them and this yellow brick road is getting awfully bloody.
Can Dorothy keep her friends alive and unravel her mysterious connection to Oz?
Sometimes destiny can be a real witch.
I might have to aim to do at least one of these every night since it does seem to be a good workout for the essays I write in my humanities classes 
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Anyway, for this one you have a blurb that's short and easy to understand at least. I'd maybe do some rewrites to make it more concise and thus more polished (not to mention that there's a couple of spelling and punctuation errors).
Osram was just an unlucky treasure-hunter who now plays a fake girlfriend for a strange guy. What for? Money of course. But will these two knuckleheads realize that there are some dark foes planning something? Probably not.
I feel like maybe the part about the "dark foes" should be specified a tiny bit more. I want to know what makes these villains different from bad guys in other stories. You can do that without spoiling; in my comic's blurb I specify that the big bad guy takes the role of a "video game final boss" yet is up to something darker than you'd expect for the world the story takes place in
The way I tried to achieve this was by having the blurb be very light hearted and silly and then end it with an unsettling note. If you like how I did it you can try it yourself. Use proper word choice by putting light-hearted words where you want a light-hearted feel and then dark words where you want a dark feel.
Thanks alot for the tip! I also felt, that sentens feels a bit unfinished, so your advice helps me alot
