Come get your reviews!

I'll check the first 2 episodes and then the last 5 just to compare and review it that way!

-Art-

Quite the improvement in art, lines are more smooth and colors are better. The first chapters look a bit blocky (as if upload was hurt by compression or something). The last one are great in that department. I like the variety of characters and the different angles used constanly.

I went and check a 'racing' one since is one of the important part and...I would use speedlines instead of blur effect for moment. I like the trail effect in some of the panels...but I would suggest checking some of 'Initial D' for how movement of races is done there. Use the street and trees to give a feeling of movement and speelines, blur sometimes doesn't work.

-Writing-

I read various one to see the style among other things. I like the font you use and you have the correct amount of text (love the 'dream one with the whole 'Did I pee myself' thing...which we all know what really happen xP). I can't comment much here since I haven't read everything. One thing I notice from random picking is that I never see someone explain rules, concept among other things to help reader (and new readers) understand more the racing aspect. I know most of the things, but some people might not know what a lap run is or pole-position.

I did like the one where the explain the car change among other things, more little details like that help new readers that like the drama get in touch with the racing aspect might help.

-Story-

I can't comment much here since I haven't read it fully, but what I read I like the school of racing aspect and I see you have quite the cast of characters and their interactions with each other.

I know you ask thefalsevyper but I'll do the review as well just in case.

-Art-

I am not so sure on the huge watermark. They distract to much when reading or checking it out. Outside of that I think the art fits the story, it feels gritty and rough. Love the various background you have, from ancient like city up to modern times, quite a nice variety and quite easy to distinguish each one.

I notice that after a few episode it becomes a grey tone style instead of color and I actually think it works better that way and when color does appear it makes them pop out even more. I could see the on-going improvement in term of line-art as chapter progress (the line being more solid and more smooth). I would play with the thickness, I think it parts the line might be a bit to thick. In shadows try not to go completely black, it feels like I am missing part of details from the shadows being so dark and abundant.

-Writing-

There is a LOT, A LOT of text on the first chapters. It can be a bit overwhelming as a lot of important information is thrown at you super fast. This can be work around with some paneling, but that will be left for the next segment. I do like the world building it sets up and it being a very important part of the overall story. I suggest trying to minimize the amount of text as it can be daunting to some readers, or spread it out a bit more so is easier to digest as one moves from panel to panel.

-Paneling-

You should try spacing out the panels, there is barely any breathing room between panels. The beach scene seem a more calm scene compare to the other, but it can be hard to tell cause panels keep the same style through out the story. If you space out those panels it provides a more relax feel and is easier to read as text wouldn't be so closed together.

Try taking advantage of the vertical format of webcomics. Even if done in a comic like format paneling spacing is crucial and the 'page turn' method can be well use there.

-Story-

You got a lot of backstory that is really intriguing and a well set out lore! I like the mix of fantasy with the present, most story stick to one setting (fantasy/medival or sci-fi/future/present). Is a nice welcome mix that I think you have a lot of ways it can go!

I do like the constant improvements and I hope to see it continue improving.

Thanks for the review You aren't wrong on the bases, I used to, but is taking to long and I was getting less panels done. I am slowly using the head method to try and keep proportions correctly. There is no offense in giving your opinion at all

The stiffness is real, but I am trying to be more dynamic with poses and more natural feel to remove that stiffness feeling

Here is my review of yours!

-Art-

Your color are really good. They pop, but not in a bad way, simply that they feel quite alive. They are simple but really good. Your characters design are also great, love the main villain, she is perfect in her role from her look and way she talks!

Is clear you keep improving (outside of the jump you mention in the disclaimer). Your lines become thick giving good difference between background and characters. You make great use of various effects (glow, transparecy, blur).

I do notice blur is the only thing you seem to use for movement, I would try some speed lines,for example: the running in the forest. character has some 'trails' but the background is just a blur, if you add some lines to the floor it makes the movement a bit more pronounce.

-Writing-

Another great improvement area, at first many of the I where in small case among other errors. I'll say that the bubble position on the last one feels a bit off. Usually one reads in a zig-zag pattern (top-left to right then move to bottom-left to the right), but this one is in an arc pattern (took me reading it twice to notice). This is the only instance though, the rest was easy to follow and read.

I really like the various bubbles and fonts use depending on the characters!

-Paneling-

I think you should really try spacing the panels more, I notice there is barely any room between panels. This helps in the pacing and of course it helps when moving from one scene to another (as in when a transition happens). I do like the amount of panels you have per update, just think that if you space them out a bit more it be easier to follow the sequences of moment and the importance of some panels over other (I know we all love each panel we work on...but some just have greater importance to the story).

-Story-

You created a great visual villain and great emphasis on her which works really well. The story is moving at a great pace and the mirror's mystery is still in play giving us reader more interest on what will happen next!

Here is my review:

-Art-

This look rather rough, sketch like but in a computer. Lines are cut-like shape (as in one is thrown, the other start but is off a bit from the end of the last one). There is lack of contrast, thing are either black and white and this might work in some, but in this case most of the shadow aspect appear like a black spot. I would use shades of grey to bring out more details and create more depth. I see potential in your designs and facial expression. What are you using to create your comic? (so I might recommend some programs, etc, etc).

-Writing-

I like the pacing and the different use of text (the wavy like text, gives us a feel something is wrong with the characters). Is pretty easy to keep up with what is going on, not so sure on the 'main' font mostly use. It has this feel of almost pixel and giving the story (which seem like a horror/dark one) I think a more serious font might work out.

-Paneling-

I like your paneling, there is enough space between the panels. You use mostly 4 to 5 panels per page and it doesn't make the page feel heavy. I would suggest in some parts (like the mauling one) to actually get them a bit closer, this cause a feeling of tension when most people are ready and for moments like that is actually a good feeling to give.

-Story-

Not much has happen, but I can see the seeds been planted on future events and what is to come. The mystery element on what the 'monster' is and why he is in that hospital/clinic works.

Keep up the work and hope this helps you improve

Ah, a one joke/commentary comic. Hard to do with my usual style so I'll do as bit of a different approach:

-Art-

I am guessing you first do it via pencil and then use a marker of sort? I would suggest a really light pencil that is easy to erase once you use your marker/pen. This will omit the double line seen in 2 and 3. Since the important thing here is the joke I think the art style works, maybe have the lines be a bit more 'curve' instead of straight lines.

Also make the pages uploaded bigger, the size you use on the 2 episode is perfect, the other feel really small.

-Writing-

Some pretty nice jokes here, but I would try to move away from some stale or overuse one (the Dragon all one) and more to the ones like in 2 and 4 ones. Those where good. Also try using a smaller tip pen for the writting so is easier to read.

-Paneling-

I notice most are 3 to 4 panels (number 2 being an exception) so all I can say is to create some inbetween space between each panel just for a more clean look.

There isn't really story giving is more random jokes which is good, just mentioning why I am not doing a story part.

Just keep working on your art cause you do have some good humor material in a few of the 4 you have uploaded.