Oh damn I completely forgot I posted my comic here lol
First of, thank you for taking your time and look over my comic! I really do appreciate criticism, esp early on of the comic so I can focus on my weakness over time. So all of this is a huge help! Anyways let me just comment on your criticisms for a moment!
Art Talk
Im sorry that I made you yeet your notes lol. Honestly in the beginning, Im struggling on the "look" and "feel" of what the comic should be. Basically trying to find the style that fits the kind of story I want to tell. I think once Im almost finish with chapter 2 is when I starting to feel comfortable with how I do my comic art. Basically streamlining the process without sacrificing quality. Once I felt more comfortable, I feel like Im confident on coloring as at the time, I figure out a good way to do it without taking forever to do.
As for the reboot talk, I have thought about it a few times before. I know that If I reboot the first 2 chapter (not the prologue to be honest. I felt like the prologue was near perfect to me. I might go back and fix a few thing up but thats how much I willing to do for it), I could attract more readers. But honestly I want to put my full focus on future chapters at the moment. I think once I ever finish 20XX, Ill go back and reboot the two.
I agree with the environments comment so much! It's something Im trying to improve currently. Even planning to go back and fix that crowd panel cuz I hate it so much lol. Just at the time, I felt the burn out coming up and I just say screw it on the panel. I feel better now of course and planning to go back to it once I finish the current chapter. I also been improving on the empty spaces part as well. Currently have been filling out the environment in future parts and hope to get better over time too. As for the figures comment, big ol yep. Currently I been trying to make more vary bodytypes for different character design (theres one character later on in the chapter that is beefy tho I think I could make him a bit more beefier ). One of the many things I want to improve on. Also the relax pose thing. Yeah I pushing myself to break off from that.
Design talk:
When I read the stuff under the pages part, I went and cut it down as much as I can lol. That is something I havent really thought of so nice to know that maybe having a longish outro is not the best idea. I will try to cut it more down as much as I can!
As for the gaps...yeah thats kind of my fault on how I put together the parts. How I made the comic is that I draw them in a traditional format and then paste the panel to the webcomic format. The way I make the webcomic format is to split them into little sections like this: https://gyazo.com/5fe6e86bea155ec95fed61077691c2a4. In hindsight, Maybe I should make the strips longer for easier formatting so I can avoid the long blank spots. Ill try to do it for the next chapter as I'm kind of way to deep into the current chapter to go back and fix up (unless theres a way to combine all of that together lol).
Writing Talk
Ok this one is a bit tricky to comment on because as it stands, the story is still very early so Ill try my best to replay to your great feedback!
Currently Im on world/character building mode of the story. You are right about the check list comment cuz I done it on purpose. Want to give readers a sense of familiarity and such before the story opens up. Jeez its hard to say anything on this lol. I present the first 3 chapters as a way to say "Yes you seen this all before, lets get it over with and move on" and in a way, Im still a bit in that mode but not for long as the current chapter introduce an set of important characters of the story that I will not say any more about because spoilers.
The comment on Quinn...yeah I wrote him that way on purpose lol. Theres a method to this I swear to you! Could it backfire? possibly yes! Do I care? Nope...ok maybe a little BUT I AM CONFIDENT DARN IT! As for the rival/antagonist comment, it is planned! That's all I can say about that. Overall, the way I want to do the story in the beginning is more on the slow side. It's mostly because of me being a fan of these kind of stories. Might not grab some people right away and I understand completely, but really its a story I want to tell its going to be a very long one too.
Seriously though, thank you so much for taking your time to look over my comic and give some great criticize to it! Gave me a great focus on what to work on improving for the long run! I don't know how to end this long reply...uhhh....chicken butt! Yeah.
Thank you!