@sarahmcsquish great! Looking forward to it then
@krinscoop Just read all 3 episodes you have so far for Faemen. I definitely subbed, rated, and even left a comment!
First of all, I love your art style! It's very painterly, but still clear and detailed. I like your color palette, and your lighting is pretty good too!
Story-wise, you seem to have an interesting story planned out. You did a really good job in making me curious about the faemen, the deities, the king, and the angels. I'm looking forward to the dynamics of each of those factions, and also their interaction with all the other factions. You've already revealed that the angels are supposed to kill the deities, and now this firstborn character Kefkel is plotting something and has recruited this angel. It's all very intruiging.
My main gripe is about your main character. He's a troubled character who seems like he can't control his powers, and that makes him very interesting. That makes me want to root for your main character, except I don't know what to call him at all. You haven't named him yet. I look forward to finding out his name in your future updates!
Good luck with your comic! I'm rooting for you!
Thanks for reading mine! I've read all your episodes so far for Full Moon King too! I subbed to both the Webtoons and the Tapas version, so I'll definitely get notified when you update next. I also left a comment on your Webtoons one.
Art-wise, I like the black and white with a splash of color that you used in many of the pages. It's striking and stark. There's a bit of inconsistency with regards to when you use them though. Some of your flashback pages were in full color, while some were in black and white. You might want to limit the full color to present day and the black and white pages to flashbacks, just so the reader can better understand when a scene is a flashback and when a scene is present day.
Story-wise, it's an interesting start! A prologue for your character's tragic past. You did a good job in making me curious about what this weakness is that your main character's dad was looking for. I'm sure you'll reveal it eventually, of course!
Other than that, you didn't really reveal much about your character, so I dunno what kind of character he'll be or even his name. Is he gonna be a bitter man, an evil man, a depressed man, a righteous man, a coward? Is he out for revenge, for justice? Is he running from his past or looking for answers to it?
Waiting for more!
I did the full color for the first few pages due to it being the start of the book. Most of the chapters will be black and white with splashes of color unless it is an important scene or a new chapter/book. I'm kinda doing it like the reg mangas that start in color and switch to black and white. I'm working on a smooth way to show flashback vs present day (It's a minor kink in the story flow trying hard to fix it in the future).
Silver has quite the past you'll learn. His kind of a mix of those things just depends on the situation he is in. I'm trying to update a min of once a month, but my goal it to work up to once a week. It kinda depends on my artist schedule (she does the drawing and full color. I write and do the splashes of color) and depends on my funds (I pay an editor and my artist).
@arayakim Your comic looks fantastic so far! I would like/comment on Webtoons if I had an account there.
The art style, especially the linework and bold pallette, are perfect for a superhero comic. Superhero comics also are the perfect opportunity to draw really dynamic and expressive poses, and you've done that well. My favourite poses that stood out to me were the ones both heroes have in episode four.
I really like how cheeky and boisterous Rabbit Boy's dialogue is (or just his character in general). The "villanous boyfriend" bit was hilarious. And speaking of villains, I agree with Rabbit Boy, Baleful Bloodarm is an epic name for a supervillian!
Overall, really nicely done and I'm glad you are getting the recognition you deserve!
If you want to read the start of my comic, here's a link. I don't know if it's enough to review/give feedback yet, but if you want to give feedback, feel free!
Hey, just read through Rabbit Boy, loving it so far. I think you have a good balance of character moments, world-building, and plot progression, and they all fit together pretty well. I'm especially intrigued by the two-souls-one-body vibe of the "power cores," and the idea of cities with guarded borders. Seems like an interesting world, and I'm genuinely looking forward to what happens next.
One thing I think could be improved is the facial expressions. The poses are dynamic, but sometimes the characters hold the same expression for several consecutive panels which makes them feel a bit static. And when the expressions do change, they aren't pushed very far, and in particular I think growing or shrinking the irises/pupils to fit the expression would go a long way. (Really small for fear/shock, really big for that cute n' cuddly look) Hope that helps, and congrats on getting to number 1!
My comic is very slow-paced and up to 51 pages as of today, so don't feel the need to read through all of it. But any feedback or tips would be much appreciated!
So I've read every episode you have so far for the Cursed Vermeulen! It's a really interesting start! The concept of a cursed painting that gets updated every 100 years is actually really fascinating, especially for artists like us. You kind of spoiled the story with your character sheet on Reed though, because now we know this is the same painter that disappeared a long time ago. You probably should have saved it to be revealed in the comic itself. Art-wise, the comic is pretty solid and I like it! Maybe adding shadows on the characters themselves could work if you were looking to add some depth to your artwork without changing your style. Anyway, that's about it! I subbed, and am looking forward to the next episode soon!
Also, it's quick, easy, and free to make a Webtoons account, you know
I'm so sorry it took me so long to reply! I got a little swamped with work and my own comic that I forgot to check the thread!
I just finished reading the entirety of your comic, Far-Star Summer School! Art wise, I like your art! It has that traditionally-drawn feel, despite being inked and colored digitally in the later chapters. In terms of dialogue though, the earlier pages were quite hard to read due to it being handwritten in pencil. I'm glad that you slowly transitioned to the inked writing, and then to the computerized font, because it vastly improved your comic's readabilitiy!
Story-wise, I really like the concept of a supernatural summer school, and the way you set it up is really nice! I like that there's a coven of witches overseeing the school, and that they don't necessarily have to get along with each other all the time. You also did a good job showing that your younger characters have quite varied personalities, which I really love! I do think that your story sort of follows too many characters at once now, and I wish you would have them mention each other's names more, the way you did in the earlier episodes. It helps the reader remember which character is which, especially since your characters have unusual names like Kairuwo, Astaire, Primrose, Leecha, Grimilde, etc.
That's about it! I subscribed to your story! I'm looking forward to what happens next, especially this newest development with the missing kid.
I'm so sorry it took me so long to reply! I got a little swamped with work and my own comic that I forgot to check the thread! I read your comic, Another Time, and subscribed! I actually think the comic has potential!
I like that your main character died early, basically signaling her transition into her new world. It's a good call to adventure, which I always appreciate. You introducing this concept of "Shepards" sounds like an interesting development, which I really liked!
I'm gonna be honest though, other than that, it needs quite a bit of work!
First, you really need to actually name your character! I have no idea who she is, because you haven't given her a name! As a reader, I can't relate to your character, because I don't even know what to call her.
Second, your art is a little chaotic. I think cleaner lines and more defined panels would help a lot with your comic. Also, it feels a little dark, and not in the intentionally dark way either. You just use so much black on black that it becomes kind of muddied. Some more white space would brighten it up considerably and make it easier to read!
That's about it! I actually do like your comic! I wouldn't have subscribed if I didn't. Keep at it, it definitely has potential!!
@mroverlord So I read your comic Mr. Ink and subbed!
Art-wise, I could definitely see the improvement over the episodes you put out. While your art style isn't super detailed right now, I could tell you were definitely aiming to improve, and I respect that a lot! I think you could do with putting in a lot more colors. Right now, your comic feels super dark and predominantly blue, and I felt my eyes straining while I was reading it.
Story-wise, not a lot is really happening so your most recent development with your main character having to beat up a zealot is a welcome change, because the story is finally getting on. Also, you could stand to mention your character's name more. As a reader, I had a hard time relating with your character, because I kind of forgot his name mid-way through reading it. By my count, you maybe mentioned your character's name a grand total of twice in all your episodes. Mentioning his name more often lets the reader more easily distinguish between characters.
That's about it, thanks for sharing your comic, keep at it!
I've just read your comic, Double Crimson, and I I subscribed so that I get notified when you update next! I also left a comment on Webtoons!
First off, your comic is really fun! I really like the premise of a broke Demon Hunter. I also like that Aki has a short, memorable name, and that you had him introduce himself to the demons. As a reader, I always appreciate when authors do that, because it makes it a lot easier to remember the characters! Story-wise, I think you did a pretty good job showing Aki's motivation for becoming a demon hunter. You might want to have more things happening per episode, because the single page per upload makes the pacing feel a little slow.
Art-wise, you actually have a great vision of what you want with your posing and action shots! I can tell that you read manga or watch anime, because some of your action shots are very reminiscent of manga action scenes! I think that feeling you have about your art missing something just boils down to the execution. Your execution is a little off when it comes to the perspective and foreshortening, but that really just comes down to more practice and watching more perspective tutorials on Youtube. Character proportions are a whole lot more style-dependent, but watching tutorials on those will help too!
That's about it! Good comic, looking forward to where you take the story!
Hey! Mine is more fantasy but later it's gonna hit the superhero theme. I'd like to receive any feed back on my work if you are ineterested, and I'll comment back. I have it on both webtoons or tapas, so you can choose.
Your story has a really good start! It's really well-made! I'm actually surprised that I'm the first subscriber on Webtoons! I left a comment there btw, and liked all your episodes!
I love the prologue, the premise of Harmony leaving the world and leaving behind four elements, as well as the promise to one day return and judge the world. I don't know if you've seen the show, but I'm a very huge fan of RWBY and your character Harmony is very reminiscent of the Brother Gods from RWBY, both in terms of concept and in their actions.
The one thing I saw that might be able to use some improvement is in the spacing between the speech bubbles. It feels a little cramped, and could probably do with slightly more space in between two bubbles. I know that might be a little more difficult given your comic's format, but it would help out with your comic's readability!
Art-wise, your art is really nice! I really like the bright color palette you used in the Prelude, and I adore your angular art-style, it feels really appropriate for the comic! I gotta be honest, I wouldn't be surprised if your story gets featured in the future! It's awesome!!