Sorry guys, I got way busy and lost track of time. I did promise I'd review everyone, but I won't have time to go in-depth, so here's some rapid fire stuff.
@Buurd As you already know, the biggest thing holding you back is the competition in Originals already and your genres. This is like 70% of the battle imo For some critiques regarding the story: You tell us a lot, and don't let us see through the story. I'll repeat this a lot, but narration explaining things is generally unfavorable to showing them. Like, IMO just remove the first episode. In episode 00 you start showing us the soulmate thing without specifically saying it. never just give the reader information, this makes the information worthless in the eyes of the reader since you're just forcing it to them. Make them work for that information by reading the story. Think about it- You have a chocolate bar. If some guy walks up to you on the street and shoves the chocolate bar in your face you're going to see it as a very undesirable chocolate bar. But if that very same chocolate bar is kept under lock and key, and when you ask security why they act dodgy and say they cant talk about it, you're going to be MUCH more interested in that chocolate bar. And when the audience finally gets that chocolate bar, it's going to taste good. Almost all "exposition" can be shown through story, but if there's really some information that just can't be explained, you need it delivered through a character conversation or something. Almost always avoid the omniscient voice. You have a good, appealing style though. No issue with the art.
@Zugaikotsu Reading through the first ep I think my biggest issues is the speech bubbles. The art is really nice and you are showing expression and stuff, but a bubble either 1. will get cropped 2. the words will be off-center inside or 3. the bubble's tail won't be long enough so I don't know who is speaking. Also I know this isn't your fault, but boy, I wish the webcomics watermark wouldn't fall on top of the text. I don't read much BL so I don't know if stories have a certain fashion they follow, but I generally found the setup fine, and was interested in the main character by chapter 3 or so. I thought the setting was also unique, and made the children's homophobic behavior actually believable rather than just thrown in for conflict.
@liamnaughton7 If you want commentary on the future of the medium, I don't think page format comics will die out as long as manga is a thing. However scroll comics are much easier to break into professionally and are constantly growing. Webtoon is #1 on the app store for comics, so in a way, it's already the king of the (mobile) digital world for comics. However, page comics will likely never die out. As for your story, I have no critique. The art is very good and the storytelling is good, and it's not far enough in for me to make any more observations. I think, if you're wondering about the lack of readership, is because this type of comic is unfortunately not popular on tapas/webtoon. You have a very nice art style but it isn't appealing to a lot of younger readers. Readers are able to accept things like the main character being a father (which is unusual in the popular webcomics space) but usually the ones I see where people are okay with it they're like a hot anime dad. I think your comic is honestly quite good, very professionally done, but I think you'll struggle to find readership for this particular kind of thing online. Maybe, if you haven't already, have it printed and reach out to local comic book stores. I think that will be easier to find fans.
@Kelheor Right away, I think you could benefit from making the text bubbles smaller and the text a little smaller as well. I'm kind of getting the "text wall" feel, which should be avoided in comics. If your characters have a lot to say, draw multiple panels with them talking rather than stuffing it all into one panel. Also I dont know if you wanted a review for Originals or just in general, but I'm sure you're aware already that the episodes being quite short is a big wall towards getting chosen to be an Original. But I do like the art quite a bit, I think maybe choosing more adventurous shading colors could go a long way in setting the atmosphere. And I like that you start it off with conversation rather than exposition.
@azzy-m My first observation is you crop your panels a little too much. When possible, show us the FULL entire scene. Not just the character on the bed, but the character in the bed and the entire room. You need to establish the scene, or else the reader will feel like they're kind of in a void and become disconnected from the story. The first shots are the character sleeping and their phone ringing, and you have a lot of crops and the phone and their hand. What this should be like is "Full scene of the character on their bed and the room" > "Closer shot of the character on their bed with the phone visible next to their hand" > "Closer shot of the hand AND phone in the same panel" > "Phone ringing"
@akitsukino so your observation about the color is correct, this IMO is the biggest issue. You have a established style and can draw characters in a pleasing way, but the color kind of throws things off. I would do some studies perhaps of maybe animated 2D disney films and their color choices. You want something nice and carefree, like your art style. I don't have much critique outside that since you only have three episodes.
@antimekii First episode, I think that your first shot is a good shot, but not a good shot for the first shot. Remember first panels are super important. I think a birds eye-level view of the setting would be strong- Like the shot you have in the 8th panel. That should have been first, IMO, maybe with it a bit more zoomed out. Also try out some more SFX, like the first action scene seems oddly... silent. Adding in some SMACK, TOSS, SLIDE, etc would go a looong way. You have SFX but its small and hand written, try out a more violent font and make it much larger. Action is such a large part of your comic (from what i've read) that it feeling generally silent is a huge detriment. Make it LOUD , lots of crazy angles, dynamic perspectives. Also I recommend trying to go deeper with your colors, the sort of muted palette isn't helping the silent feeling of the comic. Your art is very good, it just needs to be pumped up to the max. You have the panel count, the color. The update schedule isn't there, but at your chapter count they understand you can't do it for free forever. Also though you have the description on the sidebar, by episode 3 I'm still completely confused as to what the comic is about. Establish quick, right away, with some kind of "hook" what your comic is.
Okay, no more reviews for me. If I missed someone I'll cover them, but no more new ones haha. Questions are fine though.