Genuine Read 4 Read & Feedback anyone?

[chokoreito]

Hi, my name is chokoreito. I'm fairly new to Tapas and I'm looking to exchange genuine reads & feedback with other people.

Comment your novel/comic and I'll check them out and let you know what I think!

In exchange, I would love for you to read and provide feedback on mine as well.

Thank you!

Let's all reach our milestones together!

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[Tidelullaby]

I will read yours, kindly read mine as well. Genuine feedback is welcome,(not mandatory-no pressure)

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[Branking]

For sure, let's do it, guys! I will read everyone's work who reads mine.

The Voidbound Goddess Who Took a Mortal Boy

Twelve-year-old Kevin witnessed a stunning, otherworldly goddess who came to retrieve his brother’s soul. Despite his fear of her overwhelming power, he crossed the rift by grabbing his brother’s feet — and was dragged into the World of Ever-After.
Lady Seraphina, guardian of Ever-After, realized too late that she had accidentally kidnapped a mortal!
Now, catastrophic consequences are in motion.
His brother’s sacrifice.
The vengeance of the "Red Smoke."
The wailing of the Seven-Headed Mother.
Beyond the Void lurk the corrupted Divine Entities...
What can a mere boy do when faced with challenges beyond mortal comprehension?

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[LivvyLeopard]

Ive subbed yours. Will you sub and comment on mine? I always like more feedback.

Synopsis: For generations, the world has been protected from the evil monsters and beings of darkness by a mysterious guild of heroes called the Celestial Guardians. People gifted with the powers of animal constellations. They have the ability to transform into their specific animal, as well as possess amazing powers of their own.

Every generation, twelve special beings are chosen to inherit these abilities for the greater good. But for this current generation of chosen ones, a brand new guardian is selected to join them. Will she be able rise up and become a brave guardian?

This story follows Sakura, as she and her newfound friends work together to defeat evil as the Shining Celestial Guardians.

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[raspberry590]

Always happy to exchange reads and feedback! @chokoreito just read your novel so far and am staying for sure, you can see my notes in the comments! Really enjoying it!!

And as for the rest of you I've started reading and commenting (and continuing reading as I was already subbed and in progress @LivvyLeopard !) Keep it up!

You can find my active story here if you have the time:

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[Soren_Frost]

Great! Here is mine!

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[chokoreito]

sure thing! will get started on it soonI read yours and I really like it so far! Keep up the good work. Can't wait to read more chapters.

[justincarbunkle]

I'll try reading some tonight. Subbed/liked.

Here's my comic. Would appreciate some feedback.

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[eternityoz]

Hi! I found the time to read through the first ten episodes and will leave my opinions / feedback here!

First episode:
Honestly, purely from a reader's perspective, there's nothing I'd suggest adding or removing. I loved how the sentences and paragraphs were all pretty short, yet still conveyed so much of the story and emotion (or lack of emotion in certain aspects). Definitely got me hooked and made me want to keep reading, and that's what matters!

Overall Impressions:
Loved your pacing and storytelling so far! I don't feel like the plot is being drawn out too long, but I also don't feel like I'm missing anything substantial for comprehension. The characters and their dynamics feel REALLY thought out and lifelike, which seriously helps in building my investment. They're not too stereotypical but also not too 'out there' to the point I'm left feeling distant.

One thing I must add, however, is that there are sometimes a lot of names being thrown around that don't receive much attention in the following sentences or paragraphs. I feel that aspect specifically can leave me a bit confused while still grasping the overall plot, so its not really detrimental to my enjoyment of the story.

In the end, I'm definitely enjoying the read and have subbed! Looking forward to the content to come!

Here's my current work if you're interested in checking it out! It's kinda lengthy, so don't feel pressured to give feedback on all of it!

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[chokoreito]

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[chokoreito]

I appreciate your feedback! If it’s not too much trouble can you tell me which chapters you found a little confusing (like what you mentioned with the names thrown around names and stuff) so that it’ll be easier for me to edit them? ^^

[navf86]

Subbed!! Amazing work you're doing! Keep it up!!

Here's mine... please do check it out. I hope you'll like it ^^

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[eternityoz]

Looking back, I think some of the most prominent examples for me were in episodes 5-6 where Tessa is traveling through different locations. After reading a few more passages, it became apparent that these were supposed to be the names of those traveled-through places. However, I must admit that especially for episode 6, opening up and being hit with three names first thing was a bit disorientating.

I'm not necessarily saying that it's something that has to be changed, since conveying those kinds of information through such a method definitely fits very well with the already established tone and flow. Trying to add too much contextualization could also definitely take the tone in a slightly different direction, so in the end, whatever best suits your style!

[chokoreito]

I just read a few chapters of your comic and I really feel like more people should see it. everything from the art style to the plot is just chefs kiss. Definitely subscribed. Can't wait to read more of it.