Okay let's do this!
@Inspector I clicked on your link and it gave me a 404 error, so I might just try to search for it on the website. I hope it's okay that I do yours second, it's just that I'm super lazy and @cherrystark 's link is right in front of my face.
Okay after reading your feedback, I think I am going to just loop in my prologue with chapter 1, because the more I think about it, the more it sounds like a chapter and not a prologue. I'm already planning to shift the beginning into a clearer first person pov, but I think I am going to keep the story in first person, just because I love to write in it. Nevertheless, thank you so much for the feedback!
Now on to your feedback! What type of scoundrel would I be if I promised feedback but never gave it! Of course I'm interested! I'm just going to give you my general thoughts about your first episode, but keep in mind that they're just thoughts. Your story is already amazing, so there's not much I can do.
A typo in the first sentence is not a good look. I usually wouldn't point something so small as a typo out, but it can really make readers want to pick a different story. First few paragraphs read really choppy. This beginning doesn't really draw me in, like right now it just feels like any other episode when it should be THE BEGINNING. Rich-green does not need to be hyphenated, and along with other word choices this really makes your first chapter read more as "holier than thou" and less thoughtful and polite. Please consider merging sentences. There's something off about how the dialogue is structured, but I'm not sure what. Really need some present-day context or something, just not feeling attached to any character. I'm not sure if this psychotherapist would say "treatment plan." The therapist just sounds too clinical in general, more of an internal medicine doctor than a therapist. There are a lot of sentences that could really be paired with just one explanation. Throughout your first chapter, I was very confused on when dialogue started. Also, I still really need some more explanations? Like which number child is she? "He never wanted for drink or female companionship" just sounds odd, as does much of your long backstory dialogue. MC talks in modern English in the beginning, but as soon as we enter the dialogue, the MC suddenly sounds old-timey. The italicization of naked just seems odd. I just can't find myself intrigued by the MC. Super unsure if the last paragraphs are dialogue or not.
Overall, really good! Definitely worth subscribing. I mostly just wrote down my criticisms but let me assure you there are plenty of amazing things about this chapter. The only big problem that I have is that I really don't sense any strong plot. It's very Little House on The Prairie-esqe in the way it is written (lots of summary, narrative voice), which is not necessarily a bad thing, but can be troubling if done poorly. Thank you again for reviewing mine!