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Todoyama 2023-10-05 20:58:45 UTC #1

I will review your first chapters of your comic/ manga.
The review will consist in "large review" for the manga's that I like and "short review" for the ones that didn't really start my interest.

Here's my novel if you're interested in the genre "mafia" or some like that

https://www.wattpad.com/1369486768-cartel-or-nothing-june-flame

Chocolate 2023-10-05 20:59:36 UTC #2

Hoii! Did you checked my comic Larvae before? I forgot!

Stargazer31 2023-10-05 21:00:17 UTC #3

I'm up!

llobucervallince 2023-10-05 21:00:40 UTC #4

Cool! hope you enjoy it!

Aeneas1 2023-10-05 21:01:18 UTC #5

Go on then. Be as honest as you can. Oh and excessive detail, if you please.

Gen_Atto 2023-10-05 21:09:12 UTC #6

Sure, sounds fun! Hope you like it!

gene99ec 2023-10-05 21:19:54 UTC #7

Quick question... Will you be dm the review?

cm855844 2023-10-05 21:23:23 UTC #8

"Prologue" is well, the prologue, and "Rude Awakening" is the first chapter! There's a quick summary of "Outcasts" below:

After Grace and her brother Gabe were born, King Damien died and his wife, Queen Vanessa, took control of the land. The rules were simple: anyone with magic would be brought to her, and they were never seen again, erased. Too bad Grace and her brothers have magical powers. Can the Myers kids find a weak spot in the queen’s plot and defeat her once and for all?

I hope you enjoy my action/adventure-fantasy webcomic, Outcasts! Just please keep in mind that I'm working hard to improve my art skills! But please give me your honest opinion!

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Hoku_1 2023-10-06 00:36:20 UTC #9

Dear readers, I'm excited to share 'Fading Echoes' with you. It's a story that means a lot to me, and I'd be honored if you'd give it a chance. Take a few moments to dive into this enchanting world, and if you enjoy it, please consider leaving a review and sharing your honest feedback. Your thoughts will help shape this journey, and I can't wait to hear what you think. Thank you for being a part of this adventure......

I'm trying to go for a anime movie vibe.

morganicfoods 2023-10-06 01:05:39 UTC #10

Go crazy go wild <3

SereinChoo 2023-10-06 03:08:29 UTC #11

Please check out my story, it really need some love.

Todoyama 2023-10-06 05:15:04 UTC #12

The title says Gargoyle, but I assume it's a story about a vampire?
The plot continues too slowly, being 2 pages/episode or chapter, which is really annoying in my opinion, continuously needing to change the chapters to see his next movement or line( this if it's the same with all the chapters)
Lastly, I don't quite catched the art style, meaning you just draw to put out episodes, you should try to stay more time on a single page, rather than spamming episodes out

This is purely my opinion, If you want, you can just ignore it.

Todoyama 2023-10-06 05:48:27 UTC #13

I feel like the cursing is too much, like almost in every sentence, I guess you are trying to show the characters anger by making them curse constantly?
Besides all this, the art is really great tho, I like the old man's design, tho the bunny reminds me of that one from Alice in borderland, I'm not sure why.

llobucervallince 2023-10-06 08:11:08 UTC #14

Oh yeah, I did stop doing that after the first chapter. Besides that thank you so much.

Stargazer31 2023-10-06 08:55:30 UTC #15

There's nothing to do with vampires. Where did you draw that conclusion?

Todoyama 2023-10-06 11:20:37 UTC #16

That's what I was thinking when I saw "900 years"
+ you didn't explain what are "gargoyle's", how are they manifesting, what they are, so the readers just directly think about vampires.

Stargazer31 2023-10-06 12:22:32 UTC #17

There are multiple other immortal creatures, and just because something isn't immediately explained or spoonfed to the reader doesn't mean that it won't be explained later

Todoyama 2023-10-06 16:27:01 UTC #18

The text is not readable, I don't know what does the snowman in the picture has to do with the story.

Todoyama 2023-10-06 16:55:59 UTC #19

Dayumm!!!
Okay, firstly, I can see that this comic was made profesionally, and you don't need my opinion on this.
Really really well made, the characters, plot.
9/10
(I'm not giving it a 10 because the bus was in a mall or something like that, correct me if I'm wrong)

Todoyama 2023-10-06 16:56:48 UTC #20

Send it here, I don't get notified for dm's