Honestly, I was a little worried by your description of your comic….until I discovered you are very wrong. What do you consider slow paced out of it?
Anyway, I’ll go on to the review.
I am impressed! I don’t read slice of life comics often because they don’t always keep my interest but I read yours pretty quickly and didn’t even want it to end. It gives me a small feeling of Ouran Host Club? Just by the dynamics of the main character’s situation and appearance. But this isn’t a bad thing! Sometimes that relatability is what draws us in!
Most of my criticism lies within the art this round. :]
Before I begin I want to say that I think your style is adorable and well put together. It has a professional quality that reminds me of the Paperman animated short with a mix of Glen Kaene’s work.
However, something that distracted me is your shading and backdrops. The backdrops are well executed...to an extent. They almost feel as if they were done separately from the figures altogether? Maybe it is because they are not lined? I’m not entirely sure and I figure this is more of a nitpick anyway. Continuing on with backdrops, make those figures interact with it more! You’ve got the details and clutter down, now add some interaction! Let us feel they really are in those environments! We are always interacting with what’s around us as people, let that influence how not just the main characters but those in the background as well.
Something else I noticed is that your shading can seem a little flat and off. I noticed it heavily in outdoor scenes or in the classroom. The lighting direction didn’t seem to make sense compared to some of the backdrops they were in? Something that may actually help is a trick I picked up to get a very loose and rough idea for the lighting in a setting.
What is it?
/drum roll
PINTEREST!
Yup, I went there.
Need a nice outdoorsy type lightsource?
Type in a few keywords and do a few searches and you may have a new few references.
It is a silly little trick but it is great for roughing out panels and ideas for values and lightsources.
Since the story is still young I don’t have much heavy criticism for the writing portion. The only thing I’m very curious of is why does a toddler have the vocabulary of an adult? Is this plot relevant? A genius child? I truly am asking here! xD
All in all not a bad start! The art is very well done and the pacing pretty damn good. The characters are lively and I can tell them apart. I look forward to your further work.
