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yuumsarte 2021-02-07 14:31:21 UTC #39

I didn't start posting on tapas yet, so I provided the webtoon link instead if that's okay ! ^-^

thejanuslibrary 2021-02-08 07:11:00 UTC #40

Your new laptop, bought for cheap, seems to be the perfect deal. However, everything changes when you discover what it can do. Other worlds, stories, and people are at your fingertips, you need only click on a document in "THE JANUS LIBRARY." Suddenly, you are engulfed in a world of vengeful retail workers, magic, steampunk machines, and a multiverse conspiracy that threatens the existence of everything.

Specifically, I could use some pointers on voice. The art itself is meant to vary wildly in style depending on the chapter, but I fear the voice of each character might sound too similar at the moment. If you have any advice on this, or any other general critiques, lemme know!

https://tapas.io/series/The-Janus-Library

frgmnt 2021-02-08 18:50:31 UTC #41

Ok, so... this is my first and so far only comic project, and has been on indefinite hiatus for a longer while, but I'm looking to reboot it - I hope it's fine to request a review, if that's not the case, feel free to skip it.

The art is pretty outdated at this point; I mostly want opinions on the story and what could be done better, since I'm trying to rewrite the beginning to make it more engaging and more straightforward Also on the characters and what impressions they give off, etc.

https://tapas.io/series/TheFragmentedDream

Nightsjester 2021-02-08 19:00:24 UTC #42

Good luck getting through all of these, heres mine for good measure.

ReubenB 2021-02-10 03:56:33 UTC #43

My series Con Job: Revenge of the SamurAlchemist just started recently but now that the main plot and two subplots are finally moving I'd love a critique of what I've done so far: https://tapas.io/series/Con-Job

myaa 2021-02-10 04:06:22 UTC #44

Hi,
Here is my comic if you have time
Thank you!!

Quetzal 2021-02-10 15:24:52 UTC #45

There's a whole lot of comics posted in this thread, wow...Good luck reading through em all, that's a lot to read!
This one's mine. I'm sending in the Webtoon link because the Tapas version isn't quite caught up with it yet.

If everything else in this thread is already too much, you don't have to push yourself to review mine, it's fine!

saffasas 2021-02-10 21:55:24 UTC #46

This is my debut webcomic so any advice on how you think it could be more engaging from a reader’s perspective would be great?

WhiskeyMadDog 2021-02-13 07:25:16 UTC #47

@Utamee good story so far. My story is also complex, and nothing much goes on for the first few chapters. It is okay to be slow in the beginning because you'll get to the fun stuff later I like how the style merges 3D and 2D art together. If you can experiment with shadows, that will give more depth to your art. The shadows are a little light, and it helps to look at actual models and photos. A great reference for lighting is David Lynch. David Lynch isn't a really good storyteller, but he is a master at color and lighting, and uses both things to put his characters in danger, or health. Give it a try. I also find that the hair is too detailed since the rest of your style is simplified. It is okay to simplify a few things and explore line variety and width. Use less lines, and create a shape as this will save you more time for planning and backgrounds. Speaking of backgrounds, they are so excellent and it feels like you're really there. I like how the story is going so far, and the pacing isn't bad. Very mysterious. Keep doing it!

WhiskeyMadDog 2021-02-13 07:27:33 UTC #48

Okay, I will respond to more people tomorrow. Happy Year of the Ox everyone!

WhiskeyMadDog 2021-02-13 17:43:16 UTC #49

@cortezlord96 I really like your art style. Good linework and detail. I can tell that you've really polished your work. The way you draw hairstyles and add textures is also good, and I really like the way you draw kids and show family dynamics. It feels like a real family! I don't have anything more to say. Keep at it! I really think your story is going well so far.

@R.n.P Good start so far! Is your work traditional art? We don't get a lot of those here, but I really like the style you're using. It reminds me of Baron Yoshimoto and the Gekiga manga style. Your strength is facial expressions. Sometimes I feel like there is too much text on the page, and it's a lot to read. Only put two sentences per box/speech bubble and omit unnecessary words. Also, sometimes reading direction is a little confusing. I find that my eyes are lead all over the place instead of left-right. My advice is to use less panels per page, and make them big so you can add more detail. As for character development, Luca is a great character. He's very mysterious and we already know so much about him in the first chapter. You're coming along great, and I think you will succeed.

Have a great day y'all, and I'll do more review next week.

R.n.P 2021-02-13 18:20:24 UTC #50

Thank you for the review, i feel the same about the dialogue and paneling, unfortunately i can't fix the paneling but I've been implementing changes for current episodes I've been working on to improve the layout and I'm redoing the dialogue for earlier episodes in order to minimize how much is said
Almost forgot to mention that yh i do use traditional art, I dunno how to draw using digital means, plus i enjoy inking via markers

Utamee 2021-02-13 23:28:10 UTC #51

Thank you for the review. It's mean a lot. GuArth is a good story, but lately, I've been sorry about the way I drew, and tell the story will ruin the fun. I keep wondering if I should redo the early drawing or not. I still struggle with shading, especially with clothing. Yes, I agree, I'm planning to simply things. Thanks for the reference, I will check it out.

WhiskeyMadDog 2021-02-14 00:55:59 UTC #52

Oh, I didn't want you to feel bad. Don't redo the early art as this will slow things down and wreck your mental health. Just keep going forward because it is only with mistakes that we learn. People always improve over time. Especially you. No one can draw like you. Keep practicing, and you can do it.

PaulDevers 2021-02-14 04:24:01 UTC #53

Hey there, if you're still offering reviews, I wouldn't mind a little critique if you could spare the time? I've been working on it pretty hard, but as of recent my subs have kind of leveled out and I can't seem to gather any more, and I'm wondering if it's because of anything that's been going on as of recent. I'm hoping for just a general kind of review, hopefully to tell my if my pacing is off? Is it just kind of... boring? XD I don't know?

Conrad_Os 2021-02-14 04:48:26 UTC #54

If you're still going, I also wouldn't mind

danitasibert 2021-02-15 03:41:09 UTC #55

Thank you for the thread, i feel like I'd like to know what people think for my characters and my pacing for the stories, I know there is so much i can learn and i wanna get better with story telling.
If you get to any of my work i wanna thank you so very much!

brtyler4 2021-02-16 02:55:29 UTC #56

Up In The Clouds

https://tapas.io/series/Up-In-The-Clouds

hartcontactme 2021-02-17 06:51:01 UTC #57

hi! I dont know if i consider myself a newbie but I have been posting on tapas for less than a year so ill leave the link to my webcomic, i´d love to know what you think! any feedback would be great! thanks in advance!
https://tapas.io/series/Separate-crossed-roads

WhiskeyMadDog 2021-02-20 03:56:46 UTC #58

@MegaRay Hi, I read your comic and I have subbed to it cuz I don't know why it only has 29 subs, when it is just so good! The composition, foreshortening, and landscapes are excellent, and I love the way you have used textures. I also like how you combine realism with cartooning. Also the dragons and fantasy creatures are awesome! Your story has good pacing and I really like Lars. Keep it up
@Fedriz_Marini I love how your art looks like it's from a game, and I agree with everyone else that the mom is lovely and the relationship between parent and son is realistic, it kind of reminds me of "The Princess Bride" family aspect. You have good coloring and shading and I think you will go far with your work.
@alextsarace I like your art style. It's very 1960s-1970s underground cartooning with the thick lines. A lot of people prefer detailed art, but I still think being detailed is not necessary to convey a good story, and simplicity is more important. You have shown a great knowledge of color, and line. Your characters also have good dialogue and sometimes it feels like you are there in the room with them. The only thing I would suggest working on is the text size because sometimes the text was too small and I had trouble reading it. Keep all text the same size and spacing, and don't fit in too many lines. Split up your sentences. If you have more you would like to write, just add a second or third speech bubble instead, but don't add too much text on a page. People prefer images over text, and omit unnecessary words when needed.

I will review more comics next week. Happy Friday everyone, and good luck!