Hey everyone,
So I'm pretty new to Taptastic. Started uploading an ongoing title two weeks ago and today I've decided to start a new series of short comics between 4-8 pages long.
I've put my first 4 page comic up today - called PROUD.
If anyone has time I'd love a review on it (and just the views to be honest).
https://tapastic.com/series/Short-Stories-by-James-Mulholland
Thanks,
James
Everything looks good for me so far! Really like what I've seen! Love the twist at the end!
It's really great, it's almost sad to know it's only a short story.In that short, there is potential to be a really great ride. I think it's interesting to see a young child trying to make his parents proud while in other hands, the parents have their own adult problem to deal with which create conflict with the recognition the child need.It's a simple story that I suppose a lot of young people might relate.
Good job !
Wow what a twist. Just all came down BOOM BACK TO REALITY in the final panel (not gonna spoil it for people reading this thread). Love it. Keep it up
Wow, I had to subscribe to see where this goes next, it legit left me speechless for a second. Very powerful, and real for so many people. This easily could have been something that was 'too heavy' but coming from the child's point of view made it a little more approachable and saving the grim reality to the end sort of makes you feel hopeful for the kid that things will get better thanks to his positive outlook despite his situation (which is why I subbed). Art wise, the art is great, the colours are so warm when it starts changes to very cool and dark by the end, definitely well thought out in design.All in all, keep doing what you're doing, this is good and I look forward to seeing what comes next.
... That is one powerful comic. Thumbs up.
Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it I've about 5-6 short stories - I'll be putting one up every 2nd week. But to be fair, I think PROUD is my strongest piece out of the bunch (from a writing perspective).
Thank you. I had an agent ask me to try and convert this story into a 64 page story. I've thought about doing it but 60 pages of stuff to lead to the last 4 pages could feel a little like a cheat maybe? I don't know. But thank you so much for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it
Yeah man. The ideas was based around the final panel. Thanks for not spoiling and I really appreciate you giving your time to read
Thank you so much. Me and Caitlin put a lot of effort into trying to make every part of the comic medium, help in the way we told the story. If you re-read and look at the art the clues are there throughout Unfortauntely, there is no follow up as it's a short stand alone story BUT I will be uploading more short stories every 2nd Saturday (Although they might not reach the heights of PROUD). Thank you so much for giving your time.
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Here's some critique I had, being a mass-consumer of short stories myself;
I liked it, but I thought the doctor's name was kind of beating the reader with a mallet with the symbolism. I get why you had it, but I think it was unnecessary. I also think the comic was a little bit too long --- The set-up was somewhat slow and made me lose interest. Again, I understand why you had the opening so long, but imho it coud've used some editing. Some of the monologue was a little clumsy, especially at the start. I felt you overused the word proud in order to make the story come a full circle, when in fact it would've done so even without the repeats. Overall it was pleasant, but I saw the twist coming a mile away because of the repeats & the over the top symbolism, and I think it'd benefit you if you didn't look down on the reader in a sense --- People would've gotten it even if you didn't go so out of your way to make sure everybody understood the message, and it would've made the comic have a bigger emotional impact.
Loved it, but was not ready for the feels so early in the morning... Looking forward to see what else you come up with ^_^
The artwork is fantastic and I loved the flow of the story along with the kicker at the end. Welcome to Tapatstic!
I actually did go back and re-read it since your view to the story is totally difference once you see the end. And no problem! I look forward to seeing what else you guys make.
It's really good! You've sold me and gained a subscriber.
It was actually really great. I found both the art and the story really interesting!
Woa both story and art are really good! Color, outline, composition - all fantastic. I just think that the font feels kind of squishy? Maybe it can be just a tiiiny bit bigger?
Hey there!!
First of all Welcome to Tapastic !!
I really like the style and color of your comic!
I was not expecting the ending at all so I really loved the first episode!
Great Job so far!!
Really looking forward to see more!!
Good luck!
NuwComicshttps://tapastic.com/series/NuwComics
@bynuwbis - Thank you for reading and for the welcome. I appreciate it I shall be posting a new short comic every Saturday (or 2nd Saturday) for the coming months I also have an ongoing thats 19 pages in called JORUND
@kyutepastry - No problem I will look into getting it brough up in size by .5 Thank you
@manikagupta0 Thank you so much for the kind words Glad you liked it
@lynestjules Oh wow! Thank you for the sub, I really appreciate that. I hope you like my future stories
@insomniascrawl That's great. I always intended to to be a re-read so I'm glad you went back to it Thank you so much we should have another short comic out this Saturday along with my ongoing JORUND series
@ryoko I'm sorry for your early morning feels Thank you so much for the welcome, I appreciate that. I'm only on this about 2 weeks and the community is so great, I love it.
@anmarisinkman I am taking your advice. To be honest, I feel the same as you. I over-done it in parts and when I look back its the only thing that bothers me but overall I'm happy with it. Especially since I wrote it about 2 years ago so I can see the advancements I've made to stuff I'm writing currently.