Is this dialogue good?

[dbeirigo]

context: jackie is a space pilot, and they been drinking while piloting
yuki and kamso work with jackie.
Jackie: it's so fuuuuun to drink and drive, I think everyone should do it.

Kamso: what?! No, people shouldn't do that, it's really bad.

yuki: of course not , it's insane, jackie must been droped as a baby

jackie: shu'úp knee-high

yuki: I'll turn ya eyeball upsidown!!

jackie: if you can reach them, microbe

kamso: common, guys don't fight.

[llobucervallince]

Well, the dialoge seems natural for the most part.
there's just a couple grammatic mistakes:

jackie must been droped as a baby

you should add a "have" bewteen must and been.
and

common, guys don't fight.

it's come on, but that probably was the autocorrect doing its thing.

and as a personal preference.
I think would sound more natural for jackie to just say.

it's so fuuuuun to drink and drive,

or more similar to what you wrote.
"everyone should drink and drive, it's so fun!"
but besides that is good, I don't see any problems with it.

[ArtGremlin]

I might change a few things.

Jackie: it's so fuuuuun to drink and drive! I think everyone should do it.

Kamso: what?! No. People shouldn't do that. it's really bad.

yuki: Of course not! It's insane! Jackie must have been dropped as a baby.

jackie: shu' up knee-high-

yuki: I'll turn ya eyeball upside down!!

jackie: If you can reach them, microbe!!-

kamso: Come on, guys don't fight.

Mostly just a little more punctuation to clarify stuff.

[joannekwan]

The first line "it's so fuuuuun to drink and drive, I think everyone should do it." is very on the nose. I expect to be shown (or shown previously) that Jackie is drinking while driving instead of having it pointed out clunkily in their own dialogue. Describe (either through text if this is a novel or draw if a comic) Jackie at the controls with a drink in hand.

So a revised line could be "Woooo! Why is this illegal? It's a sin to forbid this much fun!"
Or if it happened already and they're out of the ship. "Woooo! 100 knots per hour plus 2 bottles of flux make for a great time! It's a sin to forbid that much fun!"

And then Kamso's response as it is now is also a little rudimentary. We as the audience know it's bad and are aware of the consequences. In the moment Kamso should be reminding Jackie of the immediate consequences that could ensue.

Kamso with a horrified expression: It's only fun until someone dies!

[dbeirigo]

those are really good sugestions, but Kamso is suposed to be obssessed with right or wrong in a anxious way and I wanted to show that but the line "it's only fun until someone dies" coveys a healthy amount of preucupation with safety.

[NickRowler]

Jackie: it's so fuuuuun to drink and drive, I think everyone should do it.

I do agree that this sounds off. I think if you are showing him drinking, you may not really need to say he is drunk, we get that from context.

"I always feel like I drive better after a few beers. Honestly more people should try it."

Kamso: what?! No, people shouldn't do that, it's really bad.

Still sounds stiff. If he's a stickler for rules, why not rephrase it in that way.

"What?! That's illegal! Oh god, please tell me you're not drunk."

then you could follow it up with Yuki's reponse.

"Of course he's drunk. Jackie was dropped on the head as a baby."

[dbeirigo]

I think if you are showing him drinking, you may not really need to say he is drunk, we get that from context.

in this scene jackie is drinking straight from a bottle, while piloting the ship but I'm afraid people won't know it's alcoholl if I don't idicate in some way in the dialogue, also I really wanted to indicate that jackie does this for the fun of it, specially because it's wrong they like to break rules and take risks, and they are also suposed to be saying something it's clearly messed up to say, like I think the frase "everyone should drink and drive" is funny

[dbeirigo]

I edited a bit

Jackie: uhuu!!!

Kamso: please, stop piloting!!

Jackie: naaah

kamso: oh god! Why are you like this?!

yuki: Jackie was droped on the head as a baby

jackie: shu'úp knee-high-

yuki: I'll turn ya eyeballs upsidown!!

jackie: if you can reach them, microbe!!

kamso: come on, guys don't fight.

[llobucervallince]

yeah, this is better.

[GodbreakerComic]

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[zoleri]

Going off your revised dialogue.

Jackie: uhuu!!!

This is a little sudden. I think if you introduce in the prose the fact that Jackie is drunk and making a cheering or whooping sound, this line is unecessary. It could just be a me thing, but I'm not too big on sfx in dialogues.

Kamso: please, stop piloting!!

I'd go with something more exciting, like, "Jackie, I'm begging you! Get your hands off the stick!" Stick as in joystick, flight stick.

Jackie: naaah

This is fine. Maybe less 'a's though. "Nah... everythin's absolutely A-OK" Is what I'd do. Add a little more dialogue in because he's drunk and talking nonsense, you know?

kamso: oh god! Why are you like this?!

I think it'd be funnier if Kamso talks to Yuki here, turning to Yuki and saying, "God... why is he like this?"

yuki: Jackie was droped on the head as a baby

"I still think he was dropped on his head as a baby." would fit with that

jackie: shu'úp knee-high-

Maybe to clarify, "Shu'up, you knee-high—"

yuki: I'll turn ya eyeballs upsidown!!

I think to contrast Jackie's drunkenness, try to make the others sound less drunk. "I'll turn your eyeballs upside-down!" Although I also have no idea what kind of threat this is, it's so absurd that I don't find it urgent. I would change it to something more space-pilot-y, like 'I'll eject you right into orbit! Then we'll see if you can play basketball with meteorites!" This is then both a threat and a jab at Jackie's height.

jackie: if you can reach them, microbe!!

Microbes are small, not short, so I'd go with something else. And a continuation from my proposal could be something like, "At least I'd be able to reach them!"

kamso: come on, guys don't fight.

I feel like "Come on, guys... not again..." would be funnier, if Yuki's height is a sore spot.

In essence, this is what I'd do:
Kamso: Jackie, I'm begging you! Take your hands off the stick!
Jackie: Nah, everythin's A-OK!
Kamso: God... why is he like this?
Yuki: I still think he was dropped on his head as a baby.
Jackie: Shu'up, you knee-high—
Yuki: I'll eject you right into orbit! See if you can play basketball with meteorites!
Jackie: At least I'd reach 'em!
Kamso: Come on, guys... not again...

[dbeirigo]

Yuki is a super strong martial arts fighter so her threat should be physical violence.

[Lensing]

I like what everyone suggested, @joannekwan made a very good point about the
"show don´t tell" thing.

Here is a different kind of approach. You could let Kamso be the first one to speak.
That way you can also make him introduce Jackie who is the main character (?)
to the reader. The reader will get the information about their name and that they
are drinking

Kamso: Jackie, have you, by any chance, indulged in drinking once again?

Jackie: Driving under the influence? Sounds like a hoot. Everyone should give it a shot, don't you think?

Yuki: Utterly absurd! Jackie, were you dropped as a baby or something?

Jackie: Whatever, knee-high.

Yuki: I'll flip your eyeballs, you know?

Jackie: Sure thing, microbe.

Kamso: Let's maintain some decorum, shall we, gentlemen?