Hey! well I didn't read the whole thing, i read the first 50 pages of "the invisible girl"
I terms of the art, it's gorgeous. I really like how you use the color.
The concept is interesting, but the pacing is a little, weird... in one hand, i felt like at the beggining, things where going a little rushed. Mostly because we don't have an stablishing shot before the scene starts, so it kinda feels like we are being drop in the middle of the comic. But on the other hand, I found myself reading page 30 and not much had happend.
But, as i said, i dig it, looks promising
Keep it up
(hey, to be fair, you can critic my webcomic... is a lot shorter, but whatever haha)