Hi
i just finish to upload the first episode of my action series Mr.Beaver!
it would be great if you could give me some feedback so far , also i am willing to give some feedback of your series if you want to.
Thanks !
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Oct '17Oct '17
It looks pretty good, the somewhat Noir Style with the fact the main character is literally a hardcore Beaver. It's a cool concept and a cool style. I honestly have nothing negative to say about what I've read so far.
ok just read the whole thing and I'll break this into 4 parts:
art= untouchable, impeccable and I'm damn jelly about it XD almost nothing is imperfect in this respect and you should feel great about that
story= kind of cliche with the must catch secret people from my dark brooding past and all that, but the introduction of the MC as a beaver gives it a comedic touch that I appreciate and it makes it kind of fresh in a comedic way, also if it's executed well then nobody cares about cliches
characters= for now the only thing I have is that the beaver is hilarious with how serious he acts and how cliche his serious lines are, I can't take him seriously but I'm guessing that's the point, I could not stop a smile coming to my face when he took out his gun and in his apartment
nitpicking= the quote from the start.... it made me groan cause it's like in the starter kit for all edgy dark stories, it's just my own bias but I seriously rolled my eyes, also the I don't need a partner is a cliche that was very immersion breaking since it's been done in a million other cop/detective dramas to the point that now it's a parody of a parody
other than that,which is mostly just my personal bias with a dash of nitpicking, the comic is great and very enjoyable, I would recommend to read it and I'm hopeful to see it grow
also I would love your take on my comic Kao
Ok. You just blew me away with your art style. It's so BLOODY rendered! Everything's perfect in this one: the inking, the color scheme, anatomies, EVERYTHING. It's a work of art. Definitely can't wait for more! (+1 sub)
The story, all in all, is sort of cliched, but I can't wait for your twist on these things. After all, it's what sets apart writers from each other.
Anyways, here's my novel: Background People1.
Hope you enjoy it!
-Helioxiv
Dude, @Misterbeaver, I can only reiterate what the people above wrote. You're art style is out of this world amazing! It so clean, yet so rough at the same time. Quite a feat to achieve! I love the (assumed) Dark Knight joker reference on page 3. I love the quirky humor mixed in with the gritty, dark atmosphere! It creates such a great and interesting contrast and really pulls the reader in. Overall you have a winner on your hands!
The only small piece of critique I have, and it's so minor, is that the text size just seems about a point or two too small. But clearly you're making this for print it seems like, so maybe in printed form it's fine. But other than that it's a great comic, I've subscribed, I can't wait to read more!!
If you're like to take time to give feedback on my comic, Stop Watchers, here's the link. It's about a trio of time travelers whose job it is to stop time criminals from changing the past.
I've only started and I'm already at page 6.
Your line work is really good and the story plot thus far seems interesting, there's not much more I can say except I can't wait to read more!
Though in the 3nd? page (chapter 1 page 1) there's a slight mistake (not major at all) to be fixed
"There are two kinds of criminal..." should be "There are two kinds of criminals..."
just add the 's' after criminals as talking about multiple kinds not singular - like said not major at all, it won't even register with most people...
Damn! You're art style is good T^T I'm jealous...
Here's mine: Rock! Paper! Scissors!1 and The Teal Jacket1
Quick feedback (Ep01 Pg01):
1 Positive = Lines and inking are wonderful and very striking.
1 Thing to work on = Starting the comic with "There are two kinds of..." is VERY cliche. It's okay to use tropes but avoid overused tropes that have become cliche.
Let me just begin by echoing what others have said:
Your. Art. Is. AMAZING.
With that out of the way, I really loved your comic. You perfectly capture the gritty tone of your setting in the linework and shading. I love the inherent absurdity of Mr. Beaver being an adorable cartoon animal in a tough as nails, straight faced world. I have no problems with your opening quote or the fact that it is a time tested story: your intro defines the direction you're going to explore from page 1, and even stories we've read many times before can be awesome if done the right way. I'm looking forward to learning more about Mr. Beaver and his past, and am interested in finding out how the zodiac symbols will figure into the nature of the 12 hinted villains. 
So, keep up the good work.
I have two series here on Tapas. If you have some spare time and feel like checking them out, any feedback is appreciated.
Hi
Your art is epic and i love the action scenes!
I really loved how Mr Beaver is a stoic pragmatic badass and how it contrasts with his silly name and appearance.
Another think that i love is how Mr Beaver relies on his cleverness and the enviroment instead of superpowers and gadgets. Watching him fight against superpowered enemies will be interesting if you do it creatively. Heroes who rely in their brains can be very interesting but it can be tricky to write. But you are doing great.
While some people here pointed out some cliches like the "i work alone", that`s not necessarily a bad thing if you know what you are doing.
Cliches can be good or bad depending how you use them. Here is an amazing video about it that explains it better.
I loved Mr Beaver so i subscribed.
And if you have time to give me feedback, here is my comic Rocky the Rock.
Is a comedy about a rock saving the world from the forces of evil. An actual inanimate rock!
I left a bunch of comments as I went along.
I know alot of folks are bothered by the cliche-ness of the story. But I sort of like the cross between The Dark Knight/Howard the Duck, but a beaver. I don't think the story needs to be ground breaking as it is already highly enjoyable to read and well executed.
I do hope to get some sort of explanation as to why there is a talking Beaver in a world of normal-seeming humans, but that explanation isn't necessary to understand and enjoy the story so far.
Over all I hope to read more!
