Read the chapter & can find nothing to critique, really, other than just differences in style. Whups, there's more to read....
Small technical things... Funny how small things take a lot of words to describe........
In Ch2: "permanent-bone dislocation" doesn't need a hyphen.
Also Ch2, the line "Do you even remember your educational qualification?" was paragraph spaced from Bobby's previous sentence (about toil for the next decade). Normally, a paragraph space like that is used to tell a reader that the speaker has changed, but this time it didn't change. I'd put that line in the same paragraph right after "he asked."
Ch3, where the STATS appear... there's a little trick that will keep the lines closer together for a better appearance. I'm assuming you paste the new text into Tapas vs typing in Tapas. Right? After you paste in the new text, go back & replace the 'returns' with 'shift+return'. The line spaces will be much smaller & look like line spacing vs paragraph spacing (as it does now).
Ch3, where Manager is re-briefing Kris, Manager speaks for a long time, leading to paragraph breaks, which normally cue a reader of a speaker change. But... according to the writing gurus... if we end a paragraph of speaking without an ending quotation mark, it means the speaker continues in the next paragraph (which begins with a quotation mark). I learned that the hard way & it seems a minor technical detail. I'm not even sure if people do it much.
Sorry for so many words.....