Hello, as it says in the title I'm a new user on this website and I picked up art as a hobby this year because of quarantine. (I used to draw before but not as a hobby... the last thing I drew before this year was a random Miku in 2017 lol)
Anyway, I am currently working on my first webcomic project and I'd appreciate any reviews, criticism, etc. regarding it! As I've never made a comic before, I know there is still a lot for me to learn. At the moment, it has four chapters and two animated music videos.
The story: BreadAVOTA is about a sentient doll named Bread, and all variations of the aforementioned in a quest to change her name to something less... um, that. In the nation of Maldevara, "Living" is a legal and not biological status and she must fulfill the Legal Requirements of the Living to have her name changed, and somewhere along the way gets dragged along by the celemarketer-slash-"supranatural researcher" angel Charlotte into a conspiracy involving the Undead, cursed galleries, demon popstars and something about the radio.
The Webtoon version has some additional art and worldbuilding/lore stuff: not exactly necessary to understand the story so far but do feel free to check it out if it interests you (:
Some points to consider (feel free to ignore these, these are more guides of what I'd like to know)
Dialogue: This is my main priority: I'm diagnosed somewhere on the cluster A-schizophrenia spectrum so my speaking style comes off as quite stilted and rambly, and writing natural dialogue is difficult for me. Is the dialogue easy to follow and engaging? Or is it confusing and drags on too much? Also, do the characters have distinct "voices" or do they all sound same-y?
Art style: I know my consistency needs work and the characters go off-model, but besides that what else do you think should be improved in the art? Is the art style appealing and does it match the story's mood?
Besides those, let me know if there is anything else you feel needs improvement.
Thank you for your time <3