Thank you very much for reading and taking time to critique mine! 
I agree with your concern about description, especially for my earlier chapters (which pace are much slower compared to the later) I will keep that in mind and edit it if I had chance to! Thank you! 
Just read the first episode.
What I liked is how the Gravedigger character is introduced and established as a focal point of the whole story to the point, where just reading this one chapter is enough to make a decision whether you want to continue with these series or not.
What I've found a bit raw is the scene of Helda's meeting with the Gravedigger. It looks like, despite the sombre tone of how it portraied, Helda just wants to get rid of her father's corpse. And if Gravedigger is three century old and all this time was doing this job, she, probably, would have known, when the death occured and if it's ok to take the body already... and what if they decided to bury the body themselves, and she's already came with her corpse cart... did somebody call her? Does she know, when to come? How does it work? Im I nit picking? Who killed Kennedy? Why do men nipples? How... ok I shut up.
Anyway, here's mine latest story.
Wow I think your story is really interesting and cute! I really like the whole flying concept and the wings! Your character names are really cool and creative too, my only criticism is that with all these foreign fantasy names... I kind of found it confusing when you introduced multiple characters and their race/species at once? Other than that I think that was wonderful.
Finally, the link to my novel.
8 days later
Hello! Sorry this took so long, I had to edit over 500 pages in less than ten days for a release so I didn't have much time to read before today, but here are the crtiques! 
The compliment: Asides from what I mention regarding the introduction in the critique down below, I feel like this does not apply to the rest of the chapter. The pacing is great, your word choice is very evocative of everything that is being described, there are also a few good hooks that make us intrigued about the character's past and how he got to be in the situation he is in today.
The critique: Although it is very easy to visualise the character's actions in the introduction, less emphasis is put on the appearance of the room and the character himself. I would suggest adding a bit more description in between his actions, or starting off the phrases with a different word than 'he' as it can get a bit repetitive + it's more difficult to visualise the character doing certain things when we don't know what he looks like yet. (However, if you had intended for things to be read this way in order to keep us 'in the dark', then please disregard what I said before.) I can't find anything else to say, I feel like this first chapter was a pretty solid one overall, awesome work! 
The compliment: Nothing to do with the writing, but I thought the chapter's title was nice as it adds a bit of intrigue even before someone has started reading. (e.g: why is he not a person?)
As for the chapter itself, I thought your descriptions were wonderful and that it was very easy to lose yourself in the world after a few paragraphs. Overall, great tone, you definitely know how to set the scene and introduce characters all the while building the world around them!
The critique: This might be just a personal opinion, but I feel like there are a bit too many characters introduced in the first chapter, which makes it slightly difficult to keep track of every detail because a reader will probably be more focused on trying to remember who is who instead of other details that may or may not be more important to the story. My suggestion is that if there isn't any need for these characters, you may want to cut one or two of them out, or blend them together to form a single character. Or, if they won't be reappearing later on, there might not be a need to name them at all. However, if you do want to distract the person who is reading from remembering other details aside from who is who in terms of characters, then this might actually be the way to go if, for instance, you're writing a mystery novel and you don't want someone to pick up on certain detail that might be noticeable if they weren't focusing on something else (like the new characters in this case). Amazing work and writing style though, I really loved your descriptions!! 
Thank you so much for taking the time to critique it! I think now that I've gotten two criticisms on the only calling him he thing that I'll go back and change it now~! I'm really happy you thought the first chapter was solid. <3
Thanks for the great critique! You aren't the first to comment on the number of characters in the first chapter; I didn't mean for it to be distracting, so I really need to keep that in mind in the future. Great to hear you like the descriptions; writing descriptions, particularly of landscapes and locations, is something I've always been less confident in.
Finally settled things enough to return to this thread XD
Compliment! The mystery is well-done. I like the creepy vibe you've got going on, and it stays strong through the whole first story. It really creates an air and a tone around the words, and helps a lot to put ourselves in the protagonist's shoes!
Some advice! I saw in your comments that you aren't a native English speaker. What you've done for your first time writing in another language is incredible! Here's a tool that may help you familiarize yourself with grammatical aspects as well as help with editing and readability:
All you have to do is copy and paste your chapter, and this tool will give you a blow-by-blow of suggested edits you can either accept or reject. The basic version is totally free, too!
Keep on writing! I'm excited to see where you go!
Thank you very much! I'm already using Scribens.com, but I'll check your suggestion for comparision. I'll definitelly keep writing.
Hiya! I've come out from under my rock and I have feedback for you!
First and foremost, I'm a total sucker for forbidden romances. Your plot is seriously right up my alley, I'm all about that! I really like that you've established an office dynamic, especially with Zoe's personality. She's outrageous, in real life I would despise her, and that's why I love her to pieces from a fiction perspective mua ha ha ha! The joke about the teenager going to therapy for girl advice is hilarious, and I laugh alongside Zoe lmao.
The only real thing I noticed for advice would just be to watch your punctuation and whatnot. I noticed a few dialogue moments that ended with periods, but then had the "She said" pronoun capitalized. Editing is so much fun! ha ha
Excellent start, thanks so much for participating!
