Good to see ya here, Beau! Here's my bit on the first chapter of Embargo!
First, I LOVE it when authors put things like tasting the air into their text, that kind of imagery really speaks to me and I use it myself pretty regularly. Excellent visuals with the shadows on Yuuta's face as he's in the elevator, you knocked that out of the park.
My critique is more of a personal preference, and pretty minor, so feel free to take it or leave it! I feel your flow could improve by physically spacing out your dialogue a little, if that makes sense? I don't mean having more text between quotes, but rather if a character talks, then there's narration, then they talk again, it can look really nice to have those three things in their own paragraphs, if that helps make it more clear XD
Anyway excellent job, thanks for participating!