I read the first four chapters and your concept is really cool and unique and your technical writing skills are pretty flawless! I think your transitions from Princeton to Clover are very well done and the story has a very nice, organic pace. Your descriptions are really beautiful and you present your characters in a pretty realistic and likable way. I think my one criticism (which might be just nit-picky personal taste) is that the story feels a bit impersonal because I (think) it's written in third person, distant tense rather than close, and I feel a little bit more like a casual observer rather than being really close to our main character.
You have a really nice, crisp and terse writing style and you know how to keep the story moving. I really like how you get a sense of who each character is right off and how you give just enough about your characters to keep the audience wanting to read more. This might be another nitpicky complaint, but I personally think the pace might be a tiny bit too fast from the first three chapters I read and you may want to slow down and give us a good sense of all the characters' personal wants and desires before you begin building their romantic relationships and begin building up the plot.
You already know I love yours! But I know you really want critique, so I want to help you out! I re-read the first three chapters!
One of the greatest things I admire about your writing is just how good you are at capturing genuine feelings and emotions. You make the reader feel very close to Kora by showing all his flaws and presenting an incredibly relatable main character--and I just love honest writing like that! Not only that, but your descriptions tend to really activate my senses, too, to the point where I feel like I'm in the room with your characters! Very great stuff! As another compliment, I also find your story to have an incredibly unique atmosphere and premise!
The only criticism I can really think of is to maybe cut down your descriptions a little bit to keep the pace up, but otherwise the story is fantastic!
I'll try to critique more later~!