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Oct 2016

Okay so... @anismegharia

Compliment: Although you only have one episode out, I think your art is great! Pretty stylish. Your character designs are pretty cool and make it easy to distinguish each character. I can't wait for the next episode.

Critique: That being said, there isn't much I can critique with just one episode. I suppose I'm confused with what's going on right now. Like whose wallet did Iris (that's her name, right?) steal? So it's kinda hard to follow the narrative structure. Maybe I'm just an idiot though, or maybe the next episode will clear things up.

So this is my comic: Rich Fiction3

@redsblueyoungster

Compliment:
The storyline is very unique (working in hell!) And it seems you spent a lot of time on research (without wanting to sound inappropriate: boobs haha)

Critique:
the lines are very stiff and the colours are too shy. Try using burn with decreased opacitiy and a very bold colour (blue) on a different layer, it will rock your shadows

My comic: Patterns in Snow.2

To everyone: Don't count this comment as "the last one". I want only to reply to @anismegharia .

Anis, your comments are really appreciated, thank you.
All the Negative aspect you noted, are already in process, because we already noted ourselves.

The first one, same panels repeated, is an habit derived from passing the style from a "weekly strip" with single puns, to a full story "weekly page" publishing style. In a strip is essential to repeat a panel, changing only expression and balloons, to reinforce the pun and to give continuity to the scene. In a long story, instead, it's almost mandatory to vary the reader point of view, expecially when you need to mark some sentences with a physical emphasy. The new pages I'm drawing are already going in that direction.

Even the suggestion to go "out of the ballpark" and inside the characters private life is already a project. This first episode is focused on a Summer Tournament, where children are sleeping out in tents, near the ballpark, palying two matches each day. Next episode will be focused on the Regular Season, jumping from the training to the matches, passing through their personal lifes. You read our mind.

The last one is more technical. When we started to draw Casabase, it was a "weekly strip" type, so I chose the "Comedy" category (also because there is not a Sport category!). When we naturally passed to a full story "weekly page", I chose not to open a new series and to continue after the strips. So now the Comedy category is perfectly fitting the first part of the episodes, not the last one.
I asked the staff for a way to separate the two parts without loosing all likes, comments and subscribers, but I received no answer.

@pearl1

Compliment:
I like the effort placed in every background.

Critique:
I noticed a few typos like in chapter 1(2,3)-managed, chapter 1(8)-sure. Maybe double check it first? Also the speech bubble
placement could be improved on. Maybe work on your color palette too? I'd love to see the depth of the backgrounds. Overall I think the suspense is holding up, it has a lot of potential.

My comic: Mosquito Girl4 Aha, I am aware that this story is quite confusing at times but I have no idea why? Also it's quite long, sorry.

Compliment:
Your pacing is good; theres a good combination of slowed-down story and quirky punchline moments.

Critique:
The white poles w circles on top for generic background characters doesnt really work - its odd, confusing, and doesnt match the rest of your background. i understand the technique to make rufus stand out, but id recommend giving your background characters more form (dont worry about colour, the grey thing works well)

my comic: There was a War1. please dont critique the font in the prologue its all anyone ever tells me abt so its not helpful

@punkarsenic

Compliment:
I love the look of this story. It has a primitive (in a positive way) element to the art that I think works quite well for the story so far.

Critique:
There are a few moments where the storytelling is a bit murky. I do like the use of unusual panel shapes but there are a few instances (i.e.- using the arms of the captors to define the panel) where it gets a bit confusing. Other than that, it is a really intriguing comic.

My comic is Who is The Girl2 (and, I know that people have some issues with the font choice)

@carythehat

Compliment:
A very interesting concept and story, I really love your art and how that works so well with the atmosphere and themes in your comic.

Critique:
While I do really like your art style and the textures you use, I sometimes feel that in some scenes the textures cover up the faces too much and it becomes harder to see their facial features.

My comic, Socializing1016

@Pandastrophic
compliment:
wow theres a bunch i like about this comic but if i gotta pick 1 thing i really like the pets. muffins is hilarious and teacup is so cute. and its great how much mihai loves muffins. it speaks to my soul
critique:
i dont really like the lettering ya got going on. i think it looks ok in the extras but not as much in the actual pages. maybe somethin cleaner or thinner since the linework is so thin?

heres mine: Robo Hole1

@pearl1

The lines might seem stiff since I use the curve tool in Manga Studio 5. I use the tool mostly because my hand is kinda twitchy so I can't outline too effectively. Thanks for the shadows tip, it really makes a difference.

I read through the first chapter and skimmed through some of the later pages.

The Good stuff:
I think your art style is very appealing, and I really like your use of colours. As pointed out by one of your readers, you do your lighting really well, especially in dark scenes like the one in the first chapter.
Your writing is also well-paced and at a comfy tempo that I can read it with ease. I also really dig the concept of Geckie's character (can't say too much though, wouldn't want to spoil the rest of the thread)

Criticism:
There aren't any glaring issues, but I would say for a goal in terms of art, try to work on improving perspective. I noticed that a lot of your backgrounds can sometimes be quite straight on. Other times, many of the lines look too parallel that it is a bit uncanny. It's overall not that detrimental to your work, but with some improvement, it can enhance it to whole new levels. When you get the confidence, try to play around with camera angles as well.

Hope you find something useful in my 2 cents.

Now, this one is really old and complete trash, but I don't think it'd hurt too bad to get some feedback on it: https://tapastic.com/series/SHADE3

I'm currently working on a one shot to enter on a shonen jump competition, so any feedback that will help is appreciated smile

@monotone_ink

Compliment:
Despite not being someone who knows a lot about manga I do consider myself to be fairly familiar with the art style and its nuances and I'd say that your comic is very much in line with what I usually see. A big well done on that.

Critique:
However, as much as I like your pencils/inks I do feel that the textures that you use become a bit overpowering at times and almost blur the action.

Here is my comic: Batman: Tales of Gotham City3.

Compliment: I Love how dark the comic is. it really captures how dark Gotham city really is, and getting to know more about the villains rather than the great bat himself is very interesting. Its always great looking through the views of the villains/side characters

Critique: The character designs could use some work, i personally dont like the look of them. I guess it adds to the horror factor of the comic but some of them are just ugly

My Comic: https://tapastic.com/episode/4849383

Compliment: For a black and white comic, I love your use of color and shading. There's always a clear distinction between characters and the backgrounds regardless of how light or dark they are which is great. The story also looks promising so far, I like your writing. I'm interested in finding out where the story is headed. I also thought the text was a bit weird at first but, you know what? I think it actually works for this comic.

Critique: The intro took a bit too long, which I see you already mentioned in one of your comments how the beginning is always boring. Maybe you could remedy that by posting the first few pages as one episode instead of splitting up all the pages like that. It might be easier for readers to get through that whole intro in one sitting without having to click to see the next page.

Best of luck on your comic!

Here is mine: Random Time Encounters4
(try not to judge based on the first few episodes, my art was pretty bad in the beginning)

Thx for the advice! I made sure to do that right away. maybe now ill catch more interest.

Good luck with your comic too man ^^

Compliment: I like the Legend of Zelda feel. It really makes it feel natural and like its an actual game. I really enjoyed the pixeled version in the beggining. That sealed the deal.

Critique: The characters need to have their own personalities. Capelin has one, but Gunk and Nestin are nearly the same.
Other than that, i like your comic!
https://tapastic.com/series/The-Way-of-the-World1
My comic

@Zachlowry98 I checked out the changes and the intro flows by MUCH smoother, definitely an improvement. Glad I could help.

@LukeisBootiful Thanks a bunch, I'll definitely work on differentiating their personalities .