Point out a deal barker. (constructive criticism)

[Aims]

Simply put: I'm trying to find any deal breakers in my series that might be turning away new readers.

If you want, you can leave your series' first chapter here too, for others (or me) to find any possible deal-breakers.

https://tapas.io/episode/1732463

[darthmongoose]

Well, the misuse of the term "trigger" in the foreword is a pretty immediate massive red flag for me. Triggers are specific things that cause a very serious reaction in people with conditions like PTSD, they're not just things that vaguely upset people who are a bit sensitive. When somebody misuses the term, I'm put off.

[Aims]

Ok, so which word should I use then?

[IdiotWithPencil]

upset the word you are looking for is upset

[Aims]

Thank you, I change it once I have it then.

[AllynCrowe]

I want to rework my first chapter soon, so if any of you can find any flaws, please tell me!

https://tapas.io/episode/1333359

[elyss]

CW for content warning

[Aims]

Nah thinking back "trigger" might be actually the appropriate word, but I'll also put "upset" in the warning just to be sure.

Edit: decide to just scrap the warning altogether and put CWs in the required chapters instead.

[Aims]

Couldn't really find anything bothersome besides the friends' descriptions getting a bit mixed up in my head as I was reading. Maybe you should separate them?

[AllynCrowe]

Ah, fair enough! I'll try to separate them a bit more then.

[IdiotWithPencil]

Nah thinking back "trigger" might be actually the appropriate word, but I'll also put "upset" in the warning just to be sure.

I would advise against it, unless your story has graphic, and I mean the girl with the dragon tattoo rape and revenge scene graphic, descriptions of rape or assault, I wouldn't use triggered.

but hey you do you bubu

[Costratos]

first chapter info dump or confusion. Like if you dump the entire world's lore into your first chapter that's a turn off, but it's also a turn off if you dump me into the thick of an unfamiliar world and just let me figure out what your world's quirks are.
This can also apply to a realistic story, if your character has maybe an odd life situation that the reader wouldn't immediatly understand. Its a delicate balance.
My novel takes place in a completely foreign and fake civilization so I spend a lot of time thinking about how much is the right amount of info to give to my reader. I think it needs to slowly trickle in but by around the 15-20K word count they should have a really firm grasp of the world. Less words if it's a realistic story.
Here is mine if you want to take a look Not that it's perfect, or I'm an expert or anything lol, it's just my opinion on how info should be given to readers.

[ninjashira]

Right off the bat, if I can't tell the characters apart or if I can't easily read the dialogue (like if it's all in flowery cursive or badly-hand-written), I'm not going to give it more than a page or two. It could be the prettiest comic on the planet, but if I can't tell what's happening, I'm out. Clarity of concept should come before anything else!

[thedude3445]

Why is there bold text...

[Aims]

That's something that has to do with the lore...

[Aims]

Well there aren't any rape scenes in my story, but for example this other series of mine (that also had the warning) so far as a chapter were a character flashes back to the moment of his mom's death, and I though that the way she died could be triggering...

[IdiotWithPencil]

it could be upsetting, triggers are specific things that trigger a reaction form really horrible trauma, think a veteran hearing fire works and is back in the war, or a rape victim smelling the cigarette brand of their rapist, unless the mom died in a very graphic/detailed and specific way, it should not need a trigger warning, but a disclaimer for graphic or upseting content should suffice.

but again you do you bubu