Hello! Would love if you gave our comic a try. Only the first episode is available right now on Tapas, but you can go over to Webtoons if you want to read the second episode as well.
I hope you like it.
Realizing I never replied here even though I thought I did--
But better later than never, right? I'm still trying to figure out how exactly the pacing/formatting is going to be so I appreciate some feedback.
Oh, I would LOVE to read what you'd have to say about my fantasy-horror series... Unfortunately it takes a while to get going, but please, please read it!
22 days later
TWELFTH UPDATE! (Replies 115-131)
Dianchian @Lemon_Demon
=I think this novel suffers from an oddly…detached writing style. Like, it feels almost like you’re going out of your way to avoid creating an immersive experience.
Like in Chapter 2, when you spend all that time describing what a new character is wearing, and then just suddenly drop that whoever he’s looking at is his ‘nephew’ as the only identifier of who this character is.
Like, if we need to know, why not just say that someone’s uncle walked in?? Why make it so cryptic and unnecessarily confusing…?
To give another example, this line: “The girl looked like she was about to facepalm”.
It’s purposely abstract…to “look” like you are about to facepalm is so much more nebulous than…actually facepalming. Or frowning, or sighing, or other actual expressions that are associated with exasperation. But instead of using any of those, you choose to describe her as being about to make an expression. Why??
All in all, it results in a novel that’s almost ‘uncanny’ to read…between this and the lack of setting description or even movement description, it feels more like a rushed string of events than an actual story.
When the Leaves Fall @gabrielabittenocurt
-POWERFUL beginning. Holy moly O_O
-This is one of the first novels I’ve read here where, although the language isn’t 100% correct proof-reading-wise, the words flow really well and are pleasant to read. It does get a little confusing at certain ‘poetic’ moments, but overall it’s not bad.
=Interesting setting, strong dialogue, well-formed characters. ^^ I think you have a great story here, and I wish you luck with it in the future~
The Sound of You @littlelilylee5683
-Maybe it’s because I already know French, but the way you sneakily translate every phrase used within in the next couple of lines is just…it feels odd. Like, I admire the skill, but whyyyyy
=It’s a nice book. Doesn’t really capture my attention, but it’s pleasant to read, I guess. The side characters feel a little hollow and NPC-ish, but I think you have a strong MC.
Grim Reaper in Training @summermcallen
-Composition: Excellent~
-Art: OK
-Dialogue: OK-ish
=It’s not a ‘perfect’ comic, but I like it so far. The characters feel pretty lovable already, and although their dialogue is a little clunky, it seems to reflect their personalities well. ^^
Dragens Den @Fox_Den7
=Mmm…ok-ish? It has a pretty amateurish feel (which is kind of exacerbated by the ‘hey this is a serious comic’ announcement at the beginning…) and the beginning is a bit dull…for 5 pages worth of material, nothing much seems to…happen. The flashback picks up the pace a little, but with the skill level of the drawings it’s difficult to tell what’s actually happening without a second or third look…
Welcome to Hell @techstylesstudio
-…Ngl, this feels less like a coherent comic and more like an excuse to repeatedly draw a sexy demon girl with comically large boobs. =/
=I can tell there’s supposed to be humor in this, but it just doesn’t feel like you’re trying very hard; it’s so basic…I mean, the whole premise is a little basic, but you could easily do something creative with it. Doesn’t look like that’s happening, though…
…Also, typos. Typos EVERYWHERE
@DokiDokiTsuna I must say, I admire your commitment.
Thanks for the feedback! 
I'm not sure how far you read, so I don't what to say about the side characters. I write in third person, but I do try to stick to one character's point of view. I suppose that limits the development of other characters. I'll try to work on that. Sorry it didn't interest you, but I'm glad it's maybe an easy read? At least my MC is good. 
The translating without translating is for all the people who don't speak French, I guess. I didn't want to sacrifice that part of the character, but also didn't want people to miss what was said most of the time. Perhaps I don't need that and the reader can just not know.
Title: Talipandas
Tags: Fantasy, Slice of Life, Romance, Magic, Royalty, Transimgration, Reincarnation
Comic or Novel: Novel
Summary: When spoiled rich girl Ari's life ends, she finds herself reborn as Princess Iris in a fantasy world created by her childhood imaginary friend! But being a princess comes with being the last hope to remove an evil curse from the royal bloodline, which would be a lot easier if she hadn't inherited the most useless kind of magic in the world.
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Thank you 
<3 glad that you like it. The art gets better at the newer episodes 
the first ones are 2 years old 
I will work on my dialogues 
🏻 it's just sometimes really hard because I'm not a native speaker
Thank you so much for reading! Thank you for sharing your thoughts on the story. I am relieved that the dialogues are good, as I feel a little difficult to write them. I apologize for the grammatical errors. English is not my mother tongue (I am Brazilian, I speak Portuguese). In fact, I hired someone to translate for me. Again, a lot to read. I hope you follow the story going forward
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I'm looking to see what someone thinks on a realistic standpoint...I'm still learning how to draw better though so spare me that lol
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