Post one compliment + one criticism

Rodimus13 2019-01-09 03:01:59 UTC #15

I love the bit of surprise interaction between the two villains we have in your comic. I honestly didn't see it coming and it was a nice surprise! I feel like we don't see that sort of interrelationship stuff often enough with villains because "They are bad and we must hate them!".

I feel like sometimes it can be easy to get a bit lost on what is happening. The most recent chapter I'm guessing is a dream maybe? But it's not getting played off as one. Maybe the confusion is intentional but I'm not certain anymore.

All that said, I am hooked and subscribed!

kip 2019-01-09 16:20:22 UTC #16

Your character feels very "human"! Both in writing, and visuals, MC shows a wide range of emotions we (the readers) can relate to which makes her very easy to root for and gets us to keep reading to see what's going on !
The only real thing that bothered me was that there were very little establishing shots. I'm actually all for using a lot of close-ups but it was a bit hard to understand where the story is set, what the place looks like, when almost all the panels are closeups.

here's mine!

jensrichard77 2019-01-09 17:12:03 UTC #17

Good to read something new here. And this one I haven't read.
I really like the tone in this comic. The way it is all just a normal routine to die and go to hell like getting into college or something. Good story and good dialog.

Can’t tell if your choice of the speech bubbles is the right ones? As long as you can read the text it doesn't matter I guess? But be careful how you use them.

Here is mine

Rodimus13 2019-01-09 17:26:38 UTC #18

I’ve let the artist know! Thanks for the helpful review

simplykit 2019-01-09 22:05:45 UTC #19

you can give me some advice too if you want ^_^

thanks

gh0stcr33p 2019-01-09 22:08:07 UTC #20

I'm pretty sure we're only supposed to respond to one... plus I don't want to confuse the next person

simplykit 2019-01-09 22:08:16 UTC #21

thanks. yeah those games are a big influence in my art. also berserk and one punch man

i agree. im still working on improving the txts and bubbles, its my kryptonite

thanks for the review ^_^

now my critique on The Amazing Adventures of Alpha Alpaca!

Compliment:
- the comic is fun to read
- it has a friendly approach to readers

Criticism:
- you can improve on the art style
- you could polish the characters and object placement
- add shadowing details

simplykit 2019-01-09 22:25:18 UTC #22

oh yeah , i forgot , i got lost in ur comic

criticism:
- you can polish some of the character outlines and shadowing a little bit ( or maybe you did that intentionally hmm)

other than that the comic is near perfect

simplykit 2019-01-09 22:26:32 UTC #23

oh ok, my bad

im such a noob at this site , i just started 3 weeks ago

dawgofdawgness 2019-01-10 01:16:09 UTC #24

I love how meta some of your strips are - “kneeling?” really made me chuckle because of how creative and self aware it was ^_^ I think it’s a really unique series! I’ve never really seen any other comic on here that specializes in fourth-wall break humor like this

One criticism: well, I would say that the artwork is a little stale, but the simplistic appearance really works for your series in particular. Also, it allows for some pretty great gags, like the one in “kneeling?”

Edit: Oops! Forgot to add my comic:

punkarsenic 2019-01-10 22:55:19 UTC #25

+: you've got some really great experiments with different compositions and comic techniques lately andilovethepurplepalettethiscountsasonecomplimentokay

-: you could work on how you format text to better fit your text into your bubbles. youll find that formatting text in a diamond shape will make things fit better into your bubbles - that feels like a real nitpick but its also a tip ive found useful myself

hokay....

feuersichel 2019-01-11 14:57:24 UTC #26

+: Those colors are pure amacing! It's so interesting and enjoyable to look at. Also I like how you use tones on different situations.

-: Sometimes the lack of panel-surroundings make some panels dissaper into another. As an example, on your page from dez. 26th (by the bubble "alright"). At first I didn't notice it as a panel and just as an object in the background. But this is just a minor flaw I personally found a tiny bit distracting. But most of the time it isn't a problem at all ^^

Aaand here is mine. I posted the link from the most recent page as I'm still improving.

punkarsenic 2019-01-11 19:23:56 UTC #27

ugh, yeah, this really bugs me. its one of them things that i like... notice while im making, but never do anything about - though lately ive been working to make the distinction better by erasing some of the bleed panel by the inset panels

thanks for your feedback!

unknown_user 2019-01-13 17:04:46 UTC #28

@Lia [Drop in the Ocean]

+ Good using of the scroll format, beautiful art and logo, consistent color gamma, nice characters.
- Too many dialogues for my taste.

@feuersichel [The story of Osram]

+ Fun beginning, interesting and sympathetic characters, good humor and unique heartwarming art with constant improvements.
- Plot feels less solid because of filler events and scenes.

feuersichel 2019-01-17 19:44:30 UTC #29

Thank you for the critique ^^ I kinda guessed, the filler stuff might be too much. Back then I wanted those episodes to be some smoth world-explaining things but whenever I reread it, most infos feel useless.
I was also thinking about deleting those scenes. But A'Mara, the desert-girl, is my ONLY nice and pure character, I can't get rid of my little girl xD
Well, time to do it better in future episodes

revisionstudios 2019-01-17 20:01:25 UTC #30

@tired_programmer

+: Okay, you got a good laugh out of me in part 3 of the first chapter. That was some really satisfying humor considering the scenario. I like that you're integrating so much tech, too!

-: So far, all the characters seem underhanded in some way. It comes off as a little too edgy and cynical and makes it hard to sympathize with the main two. Would love to see some genuine emotion and motivation here soon!

Here's my comic, Midwinter!

Chita 2019-01-17 22:43:10 UTC #31

@revisionstudios
+ Your comic looks amazingly poslished and professional. I really look the urban fantasy ambience it has and the characters are very unique too. But seriously, I’m in love with the magic effects and symbols.
- As I’ve said before your comic is super well developed so I’m not very suited to critique it. Maybe the only thing I’ve gotta say is that at first some action poses looked a bit stiff.

Here’s mine!

aqua03 2019-01-17 22:47:50 UTC #32

± you're characters are very likeable and the world you set up has potential for growth.

story is very by the book fanatsy manga and doesn't seem to match with your intentions of a more serious fantasy epic (but, room to grow.)

Here's another one of mine that I wish got more attention.

Chita 2019-01-17 23:26:45 UTC #33

Thanks!! I'm glad that you like the characters :3. And about the intentions, I'm starting to thing that It really isn't a epic fantasy comic, just your usual fantasy adventure (but I want it to be more focused on the characters though).

aqua03 2019-01-17 23:32:17 UTC #34

You're welcome! I came to a similar conclusion with DRGN, focus more on my strengths of comedy and character writing and let the epic fantasy and power rangers esque fights cook in the background for a bit. Keep up the good work!