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I will definitely give your novel a read it looks really cool!!!

I just started releasing my Original Story Morpho Mons here on Tapas.
It's a Novel which is also illustrated, and will feature short comic pages in the future.

It's a passion project, a remake of sth I created 12 years ago, which combines childish/nostalgic media with more mature topics.

Genres are Drama, Slice of Life, LGBTQ+
More subgenres will be added in the future. It's a bit hard to categorize, but I generally want to show the stories/identities/struggles of the characters in this setting.

I read the first two episodes. I liked Bilana's perspective. It kept me engaged since her story seemed more complex.

Glad to hear you liked it. Checking out your novel now. :blush:

I read the first three chapters of your novel (I'm a fast reader) and its alright so far.

Anyways I'll place mine in here now.

Title: Jervis T Booker

Genre: Action, Fantasy, Drama

Chapter Count: 20

Summary: Jervis T Booker is one of the heroes who defeated the Orc king, and he is looking for his lost daughter, he must find Nash, the man that is taking care of his daughter, along the journey Jervis will make many friends and enemies.

Thanks for checking it out! I'll take a look at yours now. :smile:

When you are finished please tell me your thoughts. (I want to know what's done well and what could be improved)

@CommanderMarty
1.You use irregular tense.
2. There should be a reaction from the thieves before they charge at Jervis.
3. wails of agony, not walls of agony
Good parts...I like the swagger Jervis has. Also, the descriptions are pretty good as well.

I corrected two of these mistakes.

The first and third one. (The irregular tense is mostly used to make the pacing quicker, I do think this gets better as the series continues)

I think irregular tense confuses the reader and takes them out of the experience, but it's your choice. :+1:

Honestly I was hoping you would read atleast the first two chapters, but I can't and won't make you because that would be wrong. (Thank you for the feedback)

Sure! I'll go check yours out now!

Edit - I read through the chant and the first chapter. While the story sounds interesting, I tend to struggle getting into 1st person novels. I don't want to subscribe and be a dead sub for you, so I added it to my bookmarks to check out again once I catch up on a couple novels that I'm currently reading.

I've already read the first 3 episodes of yours and have been meaning to read more! It really captured my interest, and I'm a big fan of stories with mythology influence.

My novel is also influenced (partially) by mythology :smile:

You don't have to force yourself, I understand. :blush: I'll check out yours now. Would you like to hear my commentary as well?
Edit: I'll definitely keep reading this one! You have a new subscriber. :blush:

It's not forcing! It just takes me a bit more concentration for 1st person! The story itself sounds interesting so I definitely want to keep reading it once I have a little more time and get caught up on the other couple novels! :heart:

And thank you :heart: I'm happy you enjoyed it!!

I'm actually gonna be cheeky and drop mine on here being as I already read all of yours and really enjoyed it. Only asking for the first chapter ofc, I just always like new opinions on my stuff

if you already checked it out and it wasn't your thing, totally disregard this