Ooh, cool premise! This promises for a really neat story with twists and turns
For your most recent version, I noticed that you started off directly with the conflict. We don't get to know anything at all about the main character - his soul is taken by a demon on the very first page. And since you do only have one page, I can't really tell if that's intentional or not.
We don't know why this demon is even taking Elijah's soul in the first place. And we don't know that Elijah's a good guy without the help of the description box telling us everything (well, we have a couple of shots of the framed prayer on his table, but that's about it). Without this information, it makes for a pretty awkward starting point.
But who knows? You only have one page so far, so for all I know, I could be totally wrong. Maybe come back when you have more content, and you'll receive some more helpful feed back looking forward to what comes!