Oh neat. I just put the full disclosure down there because I do have some friends whose stuff I've pimped before, but I just like to make people aware of any relationship I might have with individuals which might otherwise color my views. Usually the views are negatively biased because a lot needs to be fixed. I just find it to be good journalistic ethics on some level, but hey; nice to know you read my stuff.
Anyway.
You actually had a product that didn't disappoint me. I was expecting the usual flaws in cyberpunk to crop up at some point; but 50 or so pages in and you have kept it all very grounded, very stylish, and the characters very characterized. It doesn't feel like anything has bent over backwards for the plot at this point, and everyone seems organic to who they are. This can of course change, but given fifty pages, no severe changes to your creative team, and the dreamspace stuff; I've got faith that this quality will continue. Things are building, and you've increased the action of events just enough to entertain without it feeling dissonant or weak.
There's always room for things to change, for delivery to fail, et cetera. I mean, I love Evan Dahm's Vattu; but damn if I don't have my issues with the pacing. Everytime a good story looks to be cropping up we change focus elsewhere. four years in now, it is building to something great; but I doubt I'll be able to appreciate that until 2020 and as such, I have issues with it right now despite how good it is and how good it may become.
But I've got faith in your talent.