Most of the feedback I will be giving is gonna come from D&D homebrew writing, and text based RP if you're okay with that!
Its something I'm more familiar with, and I'm not too familiar with literacy/writing novels.
Most of D&D writing for homebrew is about taking some wordy rules and abstract mechanics and turning them into something engaging to read and easy to understand. I'm also coming from the perspective of someone with ADHD and undiagnosed Autism 
I like the variety of vocab you use in the first chapter, but there were many points where I started to get a little lost with some of the description.
An example is this line:
The words were a bit too flowery, to the point where I was struggling to mentally grasp what I just read. That's usually something that personally pulls me out of a reading experience. Where it becomes more about me rereading something, than just enjoying the story.
For me personally, I grasp description well if people are just direct with me, only using flowery language/uncommon words sparingly. (At least that's my taste)
If I were to suggest something, what I felt you were trying to write was "The late November chill fogged the windows of the car, like the condensation on a cup of ice water."
This is not the only instance this has happened btw, its something that was occurring often as I read that I felt I should bring up.
Also reading into Kattar! When I read how they were briefly introduced, I do wish they had some more description. Like a sentence or two pointing out distinct visual traits, and something about their personality. Like that would be a time I felt like I wanted to know a character about most. Otherwise, their dialogue genuinely wont stick to me, because I can't imagine whose talking.
I wish I could talk about more, but that's as far as my expertise goes 
I know for certain that other people might enjoy this story more though, and would prefer the flowery language too! I just can't be sure personally, because its not a medium I am too familiar with.
