Want feedback on my lineart before I shade it

[KiabIce]

Just want to improve my art, storytelling, everything.

Please give constructive feedback only

[writercynknapp]

No reason to think my opinions are worth anything..

The top panel of the first page. Characters are kinda small against that scene.

[KiabIce]

Thanks for your feedback!!! I'll work on that on future pages. Perspective is tricky for me sstill

[IndigoShirtProd]

The lineart is kind of unclean. In the first panel I can see where you erased the background lines on the female character and a background line overlap the female character too. Lines overlap and go past the borders of the panel. All of your text isn't formatted the same; some of it is centered align, which is the norm, but in some bubbles, the text is left aligned, which is very distracting.

[KiabIce]

Wow I didn't realize I didn't center align all the text in bubbles! Let me see if I can fix that. Omg I didn't notice that You can see the erase marks!

Thanks for your feedback

[Seaby]

I think unclean line art can be considered intentional (and pleasing to the eye) depending on how it's done, which is why I wouldn't worry about fixing it up too much if that'll slow you down.
What stands out to me as an issue is your line weight. It's too uniform, which means that the images don't have any depth to them (ie, they're too flat).

[kkaawmics]

Yeah I agree with varying the line weight more. You have great faces and details, so it would enhance everything if you thicken the lines around the jaw/neck as well as throughout their hair. In the same vein, make the line weight in the backgrounds different from the figures. It'll help separate them and make your characters stand out

[rajillustration]

I think you've had soo much improvement from when you started your comic, by the way!

Something I'd work on is making sure that your facial features (especially the eyes) line up with eachother on the other side of the face.

These are just itty bitty parts that are slightly off--and as you can see, you got it for the most part--It'll just help nail it a little better to check those lines. People tend to be sensitive when things are off in the eyes--so especially check those eyeballs.

[KiabIce]

Really??? Ok I could improve that too.... I do draw them off sometimes I've been told. Thanks for saying my work is improving from when I first started (I''m assuming you must be talking about my old series VS). Thanks for your feedback

[KiabIce]

What stands out to me as an issue is your line weight. It's too uniform, which means that the images don't have any depth to them (ie, they're too flat).

But wouldn't the lineart look flat but when shaded have more dimension?

[Seaby]

Technically, you're right. And I was referring to the line art on it's own. But in terms of the final product, it doesn't hurt to use each step of the process to emphasize the dimensions. Not only would using varied line weight make your line art look better, it would also help make the final colored product easier to visually understand as the lines assist the shading and vice versa.

[amortelito]

But wouldn't the lineart look flat but when shaded have more dimension?

this question was not directed to me, but I just want to say that with the change of lineart alone you can add more expression to your drawings even without color or shading. Just like manga.
Look at the hair how it thickens in some parts.

Having a uniform line can be nice but if the line tickets and get lighter can give you expressivity and amke the drawing more interesting.

You can also just make the outline thicker to make the characters more distinguishable from the background.
Like in this image, the line of the clothes and details of the faces are thin, but the whole outer line is thicker.

[KiabIce]

Interesting. I can barely see the varied lines but I can see it in the shadow area of their neck. The first image the hair has varied lines but that would be a nightmare to fill in with magic wand cause I notice there the lines aren't connected.

Thanks for your information I will see how I do the next pages and see what happens

[amortelito]

yeah, the cut lines is horrible for digital drawings, so I only thicken the parts when two lines join. Good luck with your new pages, your style is already very pretty!

[thecrystalrook]

To add to all this, the closer something is to the "camera", the thicker the lines get

[KiabIce]

Thanks for clarifying! I do get confused about doing line weight.

[KiabIce]

Aw thanks for thinking my style is pretty! I hope it's something lol