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Hello world,
I am wanting some feedback on my current story. This is my story through a character. I did not want to write an autobiography. My thought is that half of the book will be set in the past and the other in the present. Do you think I should go back and forth between past and present or talk about each all at once. It is first person point of view. I will talk about other people in my story but briefly. Do you think this will be detrimental to my story. This is not a memoir. Since this is about my life some episodes will be episodic but some will be linear (ish). A lot of people want a linear story but my life is not like that, it is all over the place.

In this book, the reason why I thought to put it as science fiction is because the individual does not know about anything in the beginning and then all of a sudden her life changes in a matter of several years. She was introduced to new technology, new ideas. Should this be science fiction or slice of life?

Could this be written as a diary form?
I want honest feedback. It is okay to speak your mind.

https://tapas.io/series/Bittersweet--Suffering11

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Hello, hon!
So, reading your thread so far, your story seems interesting but a bit troublesome, which (I think) must be the reason why you need the feedback...no?
Well, although I myself have troubles too and I'm more than aware that I'm not perfect nor an expert, I would really like to help you with your request if that's ok.
Would you like it here, or directly into your story?

Also, and please don't feel obliged bc I'm not doing this in search of payback, if you could please help me with some feedback too I'd be very very glad.

yes i would love your feedback in my story. i would love to see your work

I'm writing & publishing something that's episodic & bounces back & forth in time, too. But the whole time I'm also thinking that if the inspiration & story keeps coming, it may be rewritten some day in a more time-linear fashion.

So, looking good so far. I've left a few comments, hope they're useful. I'd like to answer those other questions I couldn't answer back there, right here.

Do you think I should go back and forth between past and present or talk about each all at once?
It's ok the back and forth, I think that'd give your narrative an interesting touch, so your storytelling would be everything but simple, which is good.

Do you think this will be detrimental to my story?
I do believe all characters in a story have an effect on it, regardless of how much they appear. One single encounter with one single character may be the decisive of how the story is going to develop. So, rather than being detrimental, it might as well be beneficial.

Should this be science fiction or slice of life?
I think Sci-fi suits it better.

Could this be written in a diary form?
You can write it as you please, hon. :wink: That's the wonderous thing about storytelling, there are no rules.

No prob!
Also, I'll leave the link to mine here. Please, only give it a look if you are interested. If not, it's okay!

Not a problem but do think about a way to cue the reader to the time shift. Something as simple as extra line spaces or some divider graphic.

I suspect you'll want to talk about things or actions that wouldn't normally (I think) appear in a person's diary. Such as, "I walked on the left side of the street because everyone else does it the other way and I rather fancied being contrarian and annoying." Or "I struck the match. It fizzled like the fuse on a cheap firework, then died in smoke and disappointment."

Could be either, depending on what you mean by the new tech, etc. Traditionally, scifi was fiction written to examine, or play "what if" with, aspects of science & tech & their effects on people & societies. That might not be what your character does, though. But it's also acceptable to call stories scifi if they only use a future or alternative universe as a setting for a love story, for example.
Tag it both, if the fit at all or you think readers will think they fit. :slight_smile: