What was your First Short Story?

kazukitakamura126 2018-03-10 19:22:28 UTC #1

I recently decided to challenge my story telling skills and decided to write a short comic. Something like 5 to 10 pages. The comic I made is called, "My Hollow Heart." Its about a socially outcasted girl in a house on a hill.

What are some of your short stories you have written?

Since this is my first short comic I was wondering what you think of it?

Hexigate 2018-03-10 20:03:09 UTC #2

The earliest story i can remember making was a small superhero story; i made it when i was...5 years old?

I don't remember any details, only that it was for a preschool class, and we were told to take it home. After finishing the story, i thought it was so bad that i left it in class, only for a classmate to chase me down and give me back my hell-spawn of a book.

HollowEve 2018-03-10 20:52:50 UTC #3

The first story I wrote was first acted out using Pokemon action figures. My brother and I each had a couple, so we started playing around.

My bulbasaur was a princess who was kidnapped and her father, Venusaur, called upon my brother's Bulbasaur to save her. We ended up creating a series of love stories for minor characters as well.

SoFt 2018-03-10 21:03:34 UTC #4

I've written these.

Incidentally, "Stay", the last of the stories that I published here, was the first short story I ever wrote (outside of school projects or something).

Chopythes 2018-03-10 21:27:54 UTC #5

My first story was about a snow hen that melted.

... I started with the end at first and had no idea how to... end it.
I just knew that I wanted it to melt, so that's the first thing I wrote xD

I must've been about 7-8yo at the time, I even made a cover for it with a snow hen on it and badly written "story" on the inside xD

kazukitakamura126 2018-03-10 22:51:18 UTC #6

Oh, that was nice of that guy/girl though XP

kazukitakamura126 2018-03-10 22:55:20 UTC #7

Speaking of "birds" I remember my earliest comic was "Tim and Al" (Tim Allen must have influenced the name) It was basically a smart, old turtle (Tim) and a dumb, young turkey(Al) and there daily shenanigans.

Kolymsky 2018-03-11 14:44:17 UTC #8

Interesting topic!
My first short story that I can remember, followed an exiled prince walking through a cursed forest, all while being taunted by the souls of previous lost wanderers.
Sounds depressing, but there's always a happy ending in a tale like that
Also I like your story so far! Keep up the great work

lunaartemisasama 2018-03-11 15:37:09 UTC #9

My first short story in the Internet was a Pokemon fanfic in spanish lol. Actually I still get some views in my old blog because of that, Ash x Misty because I like to ship since before shipping was a common word lol.

Mari 2018-03-11 16:57:12 UTC #10

^This. And it's awful.

Written one was this novel I wrote when I was 13 about a pedophile. 0/10

375 2018-03-11 17:09:17 UTC #11

My first short story was called "The Magic That She Wrote" and it was published in an anthology until the publisher went bankrupt XD

It was about a curious girl who always wanted to know her neighbor who lived a couple of miles away from them. This neighbors house was the home to a grouchy old lady who grew a beautiful garden. However, her home was surrounded by walls and this little girl admired it. One day, the old lady died and so she decided to go explore the house. Inside the home was papers scattered everywhere and so she carefully maneuvered around them.

She headed out the back door to the garden and found a prince who took her to his ball. The two danced together and pretty much had a good time. When she came back to the garden, she decided to go home, thinking that what she had experienced was a dream. On her way out of the house, she found a letter addressed to her on the mantle of a fireplace.

She grabbed the letter and opened and read it. The Old lady told her that she had a choice. The papers scattered around was all about the little girl's life. She could either take time and piece her life together, reading it from beginning to end, or live it with the Prince in the Sky because she had just become "God".

And then the story ends ¯_(ツ)_/¯

arushiangelica 2018-03-11 18:23:54 UTC #12

My first short story was Mr. Roy which I wrote for my college magazine.

dawgofdawgness 2018-03-11 18:27:55 UTC #13

Created when I was 10, about a group of friends who had superpowers. They work together to try and save the world from an evil guy with a machine gun. Also robots??

kazukitakamura126 2018-03-11 19:25:51 UTC #14

Your first short story doe sound similar to my comic, "My Hollow Heart" minus that the exploration. Also thanks for taking a look at it. Although it is only 6 pages so there won't be any more.

kazukitakamura126 2018-03-11 19:40:42 UTC #15

I really liked your short stories, they all felt so personal and I couldn't stop reading them. I guess that is the nature of short stories. I also used my own personal experience as a base for my short story "My Hollow Heart". If you are interested you wouldn't mind taking a look at "My Hollow Heart."

PP-Asper 2018-03-11 23:07:39 UTC #16

My two of my earliest is a manga like story where aspects of the dream world and real world came together, reaching a daydream state that is used to fight invisible threats on real time.

And the other was called, archeo, the pioneer of aviation! Was about of an acheopterix that wanted to fly! but with a more interesting twists

kazukitakamura126 2018-03-11 23:35:19 UTC #17

Those two stories sound interesting especially the first one. I had a similar idea a year ago but, another wanted its turn to be written first.

The second one reminds me of a dream I had last night where a group of people lived on this mechanic bird looking for a place to settle. These people had telescope type thing to survey the ground since they were so high in the sky. When they wanted to investigate they would get these mechanical wings with a jet pack to descend to the land below.

Anthien 2018-03-15 22:51:08 UTC #18

I wrote a Harry Potter parody back in 8th grade and called him Shavey Planter. He had short red hair and a scar on his chin the shape of a swirl. His two main friends, Henry - a smart, straight-laced guy, and Rebecca - a rule-breaking tomboy, fight evil with voodoo at Sharewarts.

kazukitakamura126 2018-03-15 23:22:36 UTC #19

I can definitely see a group of up and coming actors, writers and movie producers making a movie like this to showcase their talent. Also to pay respect and make fun of Harry Potter.