Okay, cleared four of the new batch of requests. Some I feel like I couldn't provide that much of an in-depth critique, but it was either because I felt like I couldn't provide enough of my own experience/logic to the sections I would've changed, or just had no real things I would've changed. I really liked the vibe of @Writenry's story, and I had very little actual points of critique to give there besides "yeah, I liked that".
Hope people overall got something out of it, though!
Should be able to get around to the remaining two sometime tomorrow.
In the meantime, feel free to keep them coming!
Also, I released a second chapter of my story, so if you wanna check that out, feel free to, as well: