was guilty on this one until i learned the basic art of double checking my dialogue XD
I still make the mistake sometimes. No matter how much experience someone has things like this just kinda appear lol
“She yelled at my cockerel. My young rooster was frightened. I should never have let her touch my chicken.”
Ha. If I’m frowning at a sex scene, I just skip it, no problem.
I do get uncomfortable when the protagonist (usually female) makes snap judgments about people (usually female). Like: girl + appearance + she breathed near the love interest + what is he doing with her?! + that [redacted]!!! + oh, it’s his sister.
I really hate when the story's author decides to show up or possess a character so they can tell you what they think or what they believe. I read lately some interactive book and in the middle of the conversation with some character suddenly there is brought up the subject of people writting interactive books. It was mostly cringy, with the whole 'yeah, people that do that sure are amazing! Remember to be always nice towards them..' The whole scene took a couple of paragraphs and just felt kinda cringe.
The other one for me is mostly personal. I hate when there is unique character that know what they want but it is not conforming to the lifescript.txt. Things like being childfree for example. Instead of supporting this character people around just bully them into changing. I love strong female characters that say they don't want children but usually in fiction by the epilogue they already have two, just because they met the Right Man™.
Also! Authors that write their characters to have some unique or slightly niche hobby or job, but they don't understand how it's like to have that certain job/hobby/interest irl. Like, I couldn't finish one book that had its main character as an artist because the author just didn't understand how artists are like. He just made the main heroine extremely pretentious and called it a day. (She wasn't supposed to be read as pretentious and no other character acknowledged this they just thought she was extremely artsy, even her coworkers)
I just remembered this from a book I read last year. It's not exactly the scenario, but the gist of what happened is the same.
So the protagonist and her two love interests are supposed to sneak in this highly guarded government facility to find something shady about it, take some video and picture evidence to broadcast it on TV, and leave.
So, theoretically, if you're sneaking in a place where getting caught WILL GET YOU JAILED AND/OR KILLED, you would be smart and stay quiet, right?
Well, the protagonist and her two love interests are hiding from some guards and then they start.... arguing? What doesn't help is that it's about the protagonist's love life and which guy she should end up with? Is it really the time for this conversation?
The protagonist, being the kickbutt main character she is, does not try to silence them, she joins in the argument, saying something like "well, maybe you guys should stop talking about me like i'm not here!" Obviously this gets them caught and one of the love interests get killed as a result.
Yes. One of the guys literally could have lived if they didn't have an argument in a hidden closet about the 14-year old girl's love life. (did i mention the protag is 14 years old, and incredibly insufferable?)
By the way, I hate or have no opinion on every character in that book except for the protag's robot butler and maybe one of the LI's mother.
"Hi! My name is Mary Sue and I have sky blue eyes and long, blonde hair that reaches my waist."
PSA: don't start a novel this way. No one will take your work seriously.
The ole “using descriptive words that fit the plotline’s theme” tactic...
Metaphors can be dangerous at the best of times.
As long as I'm here, more Mary Sue tropes that bother me:
Being awe-inspiringly attractive but either A) not knowing or B) having unrealistically low self esteem
everyone loves, or hates, your character with no good reason. BONUS if your MC is a girl and other girls are mean to her just because they're jealous
The anti-sue. Everything a regular Mary Sue is BUT they have attitude, are mean to everyone, and are fond of fishnets.
On this topic of the MC hating everyone, they'll be mean but people won't seem to mind. In fact, they'll readily forgive them, and there are no real consequences to MC's actions
Mary Sue has no flaws, but author insists MC is "clumsy" as if that constitutes as a genuine character flaw
Over-description of every scrap of clothing ever that ever touches Mary Sue ever (i.e. my tattered, limited-edition blood red converse worked wonderfully with my cotoure black skinny jeans with rips at the knees, and also complimented the Three Doors Down band t-shirt with cap sleeves and a v-shaped neckline. On my hands were a pair of fishnet, fingerless gloves ripped strategically to make them look super cool, and I had a red-and-black flannel shirt tied around my slim waist in two perfect sailor knots.)
STOP THAT'S TOO MUCH STOP PLEASE
NAMES LIKE EBONY D'ARKNESS DEMENTIA RAVEN WAY
Mary Sue has a horribly tragic past but is cheerful and unrealistically undamaged despite it
Mary Sue is any kind of magical creature hybrid of more than two (I'm personally cool with two because Vampire Diaries proved this could be done in a tasteful, interesting way. But if Mary Sue is a vampire-mermaid-werewolf, she starts to look silly.)
Okay I could go on and on, but I'm just gonna drop this link for a Mary Sue test instead XD
Oh my god that's a combo. A 'group makes noise and gets caught' situation can be great and even funny if they're somewhere safe or unaware they're being followed, but having them suddenly forget what they were doing to talk Because Plot is unbearable.
Two characters in a love triangle randomly fighting over the third in general is also rarely done well and sometimes feel outright gross. I might be sick of it because my country is way into soap opera and it's always on TV somewhere, but the third person should not be turned into a trophy or just stare at two characters they supposedly love acting childish(unless it's part of their character that they have a very short fuse, but sometimes it's hard to believe). I actually really like the ending of Super Mario Odyssey for subverting the cliche, even though the plot is a footnote there.
Just finished Code Geass and I have another thing that INFURIATES Me. When a character can solve so many of their problems just by telling the truth but they abhorrently refuse to open up to others and it ends up ruining everything. It twists my stomach to the point where I don't wanna keep watching, reading, anything.
This one is probably one of the most frustrating things, especially when the character has like... absolutely no reason to keep it to themselves. They just do. And cause everyone problems.
I read a lot of romances and more likely than not, this kind of keeping important things to yourself and causing tons of unnecessary misunderstandings will make me put down a story unless there's a really good reason for it.
It makes me so incoherently frustrated that I can't enjoy the rest of the story. My entire mind is focused on how that scene would change if the secret was known or how the characters would react
They only ever trip dramatically into the arms of their lovers. I wouldn't even describe myself as clumsy, but I trip, drop, and bump things WAY more than characters who are actively described as clumsy. 
