You review my comic, I review yours

Progg 2018-07-06 10:15:43 UTC #1

So I've been posting my comic on Tapas since March now, and I figure I could use some more feedback. I've gotten some feedback on the forums already, and it's been very helpful and intelligent. So it would be great if you would like to read my comic and give your thoughts on what to improve, and I'll write a review of your comic in return. Just a short paragraph about things you noticed would be very much appreciated! If you don't want to go through the whole thing, you can read just the first 10 or latest 10 pages. Let me know if there's a particular aspect of your comic that you'd like me to give feedback on!
Here's mine:

chickknightgreenleaf 2018-07-06 14:37:31 UTC #2

chapter 1 dull as F, just like Granby, but when the kidnapping happened, I think I started to like it. sub.

Progg 2018-07-06 19:48:00 UTC #3

I like your style! It's clear that you put a lot of work into it, and backgrounds, creatures and objects look really good. (The backgrounds are especially impressive.) Reminds me a bit of Berserk by Kentaro Miura. Your character anatomy still needs some work, but it's definitely improving.
I think it's a clever touch to have the story start in a fantasy world and then, once that fantasy world is established, start making references to our world. The English grammar is not very good, though. If possible, I think you should ask someone to go through the dialogue and correct mistakes. It's not difficult to understand what characters are saying, but it can be off-putting to some readers.
Keep up the good work!

jasxsilva 2018-07-06 20:25:35 UTC #4

There is so much potential for this comic. The care you put in language (dialogue) is impressive, and I feel really interested just from the opening line. The panels flow well, and colors are very unique and vibrant, much like a 70's sci-fi book cover. Which is a pretty neat look. My only suggestions would be to cut down a little on the dialogue, although very entertaining and engaging, the shear amount of words on the page is sometimes daunting and may deter people from taking their time with this series.Show a balance between dialogue and visuals. Another suggestion would be to invest in a tablet to color you work, or adjust some settings to your scanned images. You've done the work, all it needs is some polishing! Keep up the good work!

https://tapas.io/series/Wild-Pack-6

A-weird-girler 2018-07-06 21:00:23 UTC #5

Alright, first things first, I LOVE the comic's art style. It's very rare to see comics done in traditional so it's nice to see a comic in traditional that has a clean art style unlike many others. However, one of my main issues with this is some of the grammar. Also, like another user pointed out, the pacing could use some work. Like, it took some time before we actually got to the main conflict. I like it a lot, though, so I subbed.

Here's mine :

Progg 2018-07-06 21:04:00 UTC #6

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. And I do need to restrain the dialogue a bit.
I enjoyed reading your comic! There's a good balance between western tropes and unexpected elements. The opening is striking, and Kit is a relatable and interesting character so far. The dialogue works well, but there are a few grammar and spelling mistakes, so I think it would be worth it to do an extra proofread for each new update. The visuals are good, and the characters look expressive enough for the reader not to question their being dogs. Sometimes the backgrounds look a little bit sketchy, but it doesn't really take away from the overall experience. Your comic is great work!

Progg 2018-07-07 09:55:14 UTC #7

Thank you! I see what you mean about the pacing.
Your comic is interesting, with lots of intriguing character interaction. The characters feel real and credible, and the story is promising. Sometimes the exposition gets in the way of the story, though, for example when Valentina lies awake, explaining parts of what happened between her and Crystaleen. I think it would be better to show things like this in flashbacks, or have her mention it to another character who doesn't know about it, since she wouldn't need to remind herself of what's happened. "Showing instead of telling", basically. The art is unique and appealing, but the backgrounds need some work. The change in lineart that starts at this page is a big improvement. Keep up the good work!

Sieza 2018-07-07 21:17:57 UTC #8

Hi! I was passing by and noticed your post and I read a little of it. First of all, I love the style! It fits the tone of the story very well. Both of our comics seem to have a space travel theme and characters visiting other worlds so these kind of stories really draw me in. One thing I noticed is that the speech bubbles could use a little work. (I had this problem too and am currently fixing mine. :D) Try adding more space around the words to polish the look and experimenting with different fonts to help fit the style better. Also dealing with dialogue and story, I would work on your pacing as well, something to draw in the reader. Space is exciting and supposed to be eventful so don't be afraid to get creative! I loved the scene with the anti-gravity in Takeoff 3! Anyway, I subbed and look forward to reading more!

Here's mine if you wanna check it out!

orchidesyl 2018-07-07 22:08:25 UTC #9

Dear Progg, I like the textures and the older generation feel of comics, and it's nice to see traditional styles comics online. This may be a personal preference, but you may want to look into this site's suggestion on formatting your captions and text, especially with how you indent the text.

http://blambot.com/articles_grammar.shtml

Hope this helps!

This is my comic!

Progg 2018-07-08 19:41:25 UTC #10

Thank you! You're right, I'll try to space out my bubbles a bit more.
Your comic is fun and eventful, and reminds me of the adventurous feel of a role-playing video game. The changing locations and character dynamics keep it engaging, and the world-ending stakes work well for this kind of story. Overall, I think the story and dialogue are better than the visuals. You have a distinct style, and the images do communicate what's going on, but maybe you could experiment with "zooming out" a little and showing more backgrounds and full-length pictures of characters. Keep up the good work!

Progg 2018-07-08 20:00:10 UTC #11

Thank you! And yes, my text formatting definitely needs work.
Now this one is interesting! I don't think I've ever seen a comic quite like this is style, and it looks really good! There's not enough comics around that make use of white lines on black, and the crosshatching sets the mood very well. The character of Atlas is charmingly strange, and it's a really promising start for a comic. Depending on where you plan to take the story, it might be fun to have Atlas interact with more distinctly "normal" (non goth) people, to show the differences between his outlook and that of our world.

orchidesyl 2018-07-08 20:23:02 UTC #12

Thank you for your insight! I will include that considering throughout the story his interactions outside of home are in school and where he works (the shop local relatives own). I appreciate your feedback and the comments towards the format and style, it's been something I've struggled with when it came to writing and posting my comic so it helps to know it has a promising beginning and I'm able to see it though.