@kainatarma about Karana (Sorry for the long wait, I was sick yesterday)
I am impressed that you use fairly advanced language for a non-english speaker. Also, to be clear, the "first chapter" I focused on was your prologue since that should be the first thing the readers look at. Overall, the writing makes sense and is relatively easy to follow. I can see that despite not being a native speaker you are able to connect with your readers, obviously as your comments and subscribers shows. That being said, there are some things you can work on.
1.) You really should get an editor or at least a native speaker to read over your writing
After reading the prologue I noticed multiple mistakes that will force readers to either guess what you meant or re-read the sentence, because it didn't make sense the first time. Most of these mistakes are using the wrong tense or wrong conjugation.
What you wrote: "Lucky she had the pot exactly on the glass table in front of her sofa,..."
What it should say: "Luckily she had the pot exactly on the glass table in front of her sofa,..."
What you wrote: "...it was fortunate that she has not yet choked."
What it should say: "...it was fortunate that she had not yet choked."
As I said, you are connecting with your readers and these are not huge mistakes. Therefore, this is not a high priority. However, it will still detract from your meaning and make some readers lose interest that otherwise would not have. I suggest using a tool like Grammerly, if you can't find an editor, it will catch some of the mistakes you are making, though probably not all. You can even use the forums to find one. I am currently editing a comic for someone in exchange for drawings of my characters.
2.) Don't overdo the details
I understand the importance of creating an image for your readers. However, if you overdo the details it will seem like "droning". As authors we sometimes need to come up with creative ways to describe a scene. In your case, the "droning" was mostly occurring in the first 2 paragraphs where you are describing the character and setting. Doing this is fine, but it's not the real purpose of a first chapter. You should be focused on creating a hook that makes the readers want to read more. You have a pretty good hook, it just comes after this. Leaving some mystery, especially with the character, won't hurt you one bit. This is probably the hardest thing to fix, but something that, if learned successfully, will drastically improve your writing.
3.) Don't throw out too many things the reader's won't understand
I know I just said to leave some mystery. However, there is a fine line between some mystery and complete confusion. Fortunately, you are teetering on that line, but not quite over it. Some things don't seem to be confusing to us as writers, but they can somewhat throw a reader for a loop. Introducing new concepts or names is fine, but you can't hit a reader with too many at once. It will overload their heads with questions, which can distract them from how you want them to feel. Over the span of two sentences you introduce four new terms, "Aylar Sub-District, Toryaemae District, Maiyean Regio, and SAR team." If you were just introducing the first three I think you would be fine since the reader can tell they are places. However, before they form an image of what that looks like they see "SAR team" which will break their thought and cause confusion cause they don't understand what that is. This is not a major issue, but most readers won't get any valuable understanding, feel powerful emotions, or become curious when faced with that. They will just push it into the back of their minds. The best way to fix this is to try to read your novel as if you are just seeing it for the first time. This is difficult to do, but a valuable tool.
Overall, your "first chapter" is pretty good. These are just ways I think will make it better. You keep it short, set the scenario, and the hook in the last two paragraphs is enough to keep most readers attention. The things iv'e mentioned prevent you from having a strong buildup though. The better the buildup, the more impactful the hook. I hope this helps you and I wish you success.