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[diestreve319]

Hi, Darknight!
Thank you so much for your positive review. It truly inspires and helps me and my collaborator to continue with our episodes of Searching For Kazehaya. I'm so happy to know that you enjoyed the art and story of Searching For Kazehaya. It means a lot to me and to my collaborator. Again, thank you so much!
^_^

[yondoloki]

I would like a review of my comic The Changeling's Sister

The Changeling's Sister | Tapas

[GalacticPotato]

Hey, it would be pretty awesome of you could review my comic, i've had some reviews before and they mostly mention the backgrounds need some work, but i'd like a better point of reference on what to improve, and you reviews are really well done.
Here's the thing:

Trip across the Multiverse | Tapas

It's really short, only 34 pages so far, but take your time.

[sfkdreamstudios]

Rei: Hi there! I'm the artist for Searching For Kazehaya, and thank you so much for your thorough review! We're glad you like what you see so far!
If you don't mind, what did you mean by "The outline is perfect by not going fully black outline but using the color of the clothing (though a darker shade of course)"? Did you mean the speech bubbles, or the line art? I use black for the lineart, but it does appear gray/lighter in color due to the lighting layers I use afterwards. Thanks for following us on Webtoons! It's so awesome to see someone from there! <3

[Daknight]

Here is the review!

-Art-

I see you made huge improvement from how it started! Thicker lines, better expression and overall improvement. I do like that you kept the coloring style and just improve on it. It gives you story a nice touch giving the horror/drama feeling to it which works really well!

Your clothing and era feel are on point! I am a sucker for that Victoria age clothing and you nail it! All I can say is to keep the good work as I can tell you are indeed improving each passing chapter!

-Writing-

I am a bit conflicted on this, I think the writing is actually well done, great font, great usage of different bubble colors depending on the scene. Yet the writing is modern style in term of there speech pattern and way of speaking, which might seem weird giving the Victoria age time. I don't mind it, but I think dialogue using the period time might be better suited to give that feeling of this being in that time line. This is more a nitpicking than saying it should cause I do believe the current style is easier for readers in general.

I really like that you make the 'sound effect' have action to if it needs it (the 'fhump' of her falling from the window being the best example).

-Paneling-

I see this is a one page update so it keeps the traditional comic paneling style and is really well done. I am not 100% sure on the black border and reason is that I (and many readers) got use to and associate black border to past events (as in border go black when we are looking at events in the past or a character past). This is more an opinion cause I actually do like the black in this case cause it makes the color stand out and give a heavier feeling to the story. Just another of my observations is all.

-Story-

Way to keep someone engage and interested! Love the start of it, maybe I would had kept the abduction hidden a bit to cause even the readers to question a bit more 'Was she just badly hurt once (the scars part)...is the sister real?' and then when the face part is reveal you do the bit of showing the past with the alien to make the audience go 'OOOOOH'. Those kind of secrets keep one interested and invested. Even then you are doing a great job with the whole mystery of 'why was the sister taken? why is this doll/clone bad? how will she learn about her real sister?'

I for one am interested in finding this answers!

You got a really great comic and I hope to see more of it

[Daknight]

Here is the review:

-Art-

Another show of improvement. Lines are full now and thicker (in the start they would be gaps between lines sometimes and they were thin). You have a nice variety of poses and expression which is really nice. I am guessing the anatomy is a choice (as in head big and body smaller than the average compare to the head). I believe it work giving the character are not humans giving it it's own unique style.

As for your main concern which was the background I notice you do include more of them such as the police station, interrogation room, etc. I'll use one big example to maybe help you out, it is chapter one - page 28.

This is REALLY, REALLY overabundance of blue, try to find something to break the blue pattern on the wall. Maybe have say a bulletin board in the wall behind one of the characters with it having warnings or other stuff. The point is to have something that makes sense that it should be in the room they are in and helps you break the blue a bit.

Also try not making the floor the same color as the walls, something that happens in your latest chapters (the two being the same colors). Is really rare to find the walls and floor be the same color no matter where you go. If you do, the floor normally has a pattern or something that makes it different than the walls.

-Writing-

I like that you give each character their own form of speaking, giving a nice character to each one. The colored bubbles are also a nice touch helping to know who is saying what in each page. You use good amount of text, not to much but enough to give us all the information we need!

Great coloring on the sound effect to give them that nice extra feeling to them!

-Paneling-

I see is the one page update format, keeping with the standard comic method. I believe it is the best method for one page updates and you are consistent on the space left in between panels. I see that you decide to different the page by making them black (instead of the usual white), is a nice idea, just remember some people associated black black page with it being past events. I doubt they will with yours giving they are all in this pattern

-Story-

I like the concept of the multiverse, though not much has happen to show this (outside of those two falling to one), but the seed is planted and I am sure it'll come up again later on in the story. You have a good pace and are moving the story forward in a good way as it also build up the characters as the story moves (character growth). I look forward to more development and to learn of the situation of the other two lost in the multi-verse!

Keep up the good work and I hope this helps you improve in some aspect.

[antwyonsimpson]

Thanks for the review. i really appreciate it. Its funny you brought up HxH as in influence bc i didnt even know about that at all when i came up with this concept. DBZ is an influence but not a huge one aside from my main characters hair which is a YYH reference as well obviously lol.. I have alot of obvious references in this comic a really big one is the city they live in - Kyyber City which is reference to lightsaber crystals from Star Wars. Even though my story has alot of fighting and combat i really wanted to lean more towards a fantasy/horror type comic later on, for now i just wanted to set up the world and my main characters. For the pages i have up so far i wanted to set up the mental state of my OC Raizao and the reason i had inconsistent background shading is to show the dream hes in breaking down. I guess it didnt work out as planned though. And the shadow popping up out of nowhere was supposed to be an indication of the dream hes in. The way i wanted to set it up is that In the first panel you see his shadow in the tree and you think its Raizao but then when he pops up you realize its not and that hes been followed and stalked this whole time. I understand the confusion. Also the first 13 pages of this comic were made in 2016 and i edited them and tried to fix a few things. Ultimately i decided to keep them to show my progression. I agree with the posing problems. This is something ive tried to remedy in my later pages that i havent posted yet. The panel spacing is something i wondered about but i can fix it in Manga studio. Again thanks for the review ^^ ill defintiely take the advice/tips to heart..

[TimCaloweh]

You can take a whack at mine if you want.

The Rainy Days | Tapas

[GalacticPotato]

Hey, thanks for taking the time to review it. I'll try to keep in mind all of this when working.
I know i have a provlem with the color blue, my idea was to kind of associate differeny worlds with different colors, but it might be a little overkill. To be honest, i didn't even notice the floor thing, i need to pay more attention to detail.
As i tought, most of the problems seem to be on backgrounds, but having a more detailed list of things to improrve is very useful.
You're really doing a great job with these reviews, but i see you're getting a lot of requests, don't overwork yourself

[Daknight]

@antwyonsimpson I hope to see the newer stuff soon then Interesting on going fantasy/horror but I can see it can lead to that. If you are able to I would add some screams to the end when his shadow his chockiing him 'wake up, WAKE UP' to kind of establish is a dream. I know you want to keep the element of surprise that it was all in the head, but I didn't think it was a dream and just that he pass out and then woke up via someone dragging him/saving him.

@GalacticPotato That is a nice idea (the colors for different dimensions) is an easy way to establish different places and hope you are able to find a new happy medium in showing the color and balance Hopefully I won't overwork myself, I mostly do reviews at certain times only to avoid that.

[Daknight]

Here is my review:

-Art-

It seems really rough as lines are scribble like (MS-paint effect most would say). The lack of any color (or grey scale) makes it look to flat even though you have some good backgrounds in quite a few of the panels. You have a nice amount of angles which is really good. The swinging part towards the windows does look really good. The following part with the window shard impale in his leg, you can feel the pain.

Got to say that city shot is one of the best panels all around!

I would suggest to try an invest on a graphic tablet (they can be found for 50 to 60 dollars for starting out) or if you have an android tablet, get medibang and try using a disk stylus. It'll probably better line art I am sure.

-Writing-

There isn't much dialogue per see yet, but it does have a nice comedy feeling to it. I like the use of spacing out the sentence in the latest one 'Its time for lunch'. Gives is a nice touch and it uses the panels in a good way!

-Paneling-

All the panels are the same size and vertical format. I would suggest trying to work with panel sizes, the reason is no matter what, some things are more important than others in a comic and the size of the panel can represent this. For example: When he gets impale, that is a very important moment, if panels where of different sizes you could had make that one big as to drive in home the severity of him being impale.

-Story-

I'll be honest, I have no idea what is going on with the story. The prologue starts a way which seem like a post-apocalypse way with him trying to survive, then suddenly their aliens and comedy routine is played out (which was funny with the whole line mine explosion). Then he is suddenly them with them selling them stuff? I am not sure what the story line is or if their is one, maybe pages are missing (how he get to them, how and why they arrived).

I do see potential in your art to keep improving as your faces are good, just need to improve your line art, incorporate grey scale elements to your stuff and some anatomy elements.

[gh0stcr33p]

thanks for your review! I'll try spacing out the panels more and I'll keep the speech bubble tip in mind. I think some of the lowercase I's were intentional but I don't know about all of them.

[TimCaloweh]

Hahaha. I always like it when someone misinterprets my story. I know i barely have anything to work with but it still nonetheless funny. I mean i thought it was a crazy idea putting aliens in a WW2 setting but it's slowly paying off. Thanks for the review man.

[Daknight]

No problem, sorry for misinterpreting your story (I read the summary so I know what it was about, it was more on the sequence and there being a lack of coherent sequence to some events).

A tip though, if I am not the only one misinterpreting the story try adding some more transition panels from scene to scene (helps in knowing we are moving to another location). I know you did with the ship landing giving us the idea where he came from, but we never say him recover from crashing threw the store door so not many will associated the ship with him (the kid) arriving to meet with the aliens, etc.

[TimCaloweh]

nah i'm adding it on piece by piece. It'll make sense in the end or i'll cut my loses and convert this into novel.

[Seokthih]

Review mine, if you don't mind I'm pretty bad withnmaking rewievs, alas. But I can surely say that I like your comic!

Ravenheart | Tapas

[Daknight]

Sorry for the delay! I usually do this on the week, but wasn't near a computer for awhile. Here it it!

-Art-

The art is quite interesting, it feels it takes various influences (American, Japanese style and some European feeling to it). Is a nice mix that works well. The sketch like nature blends well with the kind of story been told and so the gray scale with occasional red (for blood).

I like the blending of lines with similar grey scale in the background (or white in some parts), makes them feel different each time!

I would say the proportion in the characters need some improvement. Story seem rather serious and I think good proportion helps a lot in this kind of stories and some anatomy practice.

Also different angles will come in handy specially in fight scenes.

-Writing-

I like how you do the uneven shaking like bubbles for Ravenheart, though in some parts they become normal like and not sure is cause of the situation or just a style change. Also try changing the fonts color in some parts (the background being dark grey and letters black make them a bit hard to read.

I do like the poetic like feeling of speech in some times and speech feeling like is in medival times (which seems like the time period the story is set in. Really good writting (some minor typos here and there). It cause intrigue and interest on all the lore and back story of the various characters.

-Paneling-

Your style of 'paneling' seems rather interesting. No black border making them feel rather open, but thanks to the use of space in between 'scenes' everything flows well. It surprisingly fits very well with the story and how is told.

-Story-

You created a nice little mystery feeling to Ravenheart and of course the rest of the elements you introduce (with the recent Paladins...which reminds me kind a bit on the sith on the 'apprentice must kill master). The lore you slowly introducing also makes you want to keep learning more and more!

Great work and hope this helps you out

[dawgofdawgness]

Hey! Got room for one more?

Leftovers | Tapas

It's really cool for you to be giving reviews to everyone ^_^
Thanks in advance!

[Kaito26]

@Daknight
Wold you mind reviewing mine? I have seen other reviews of mine on other forums but I have updated many things... So... I would like an updated review

Eunice | Tapas

[Daknight]

My pleasure! I actually follow your comic xP

-Art-

I really love that the art is influence by Jazz in general (in my opinion). For me Jazz is smooth and relaxing which is the feeling I get from your art! I like the simple color pallet and excellent idea of using blue purplish background for most of things, beside bringing jazz to mind, with the whole 'blues' factor, it also makes every other color come forward.

I really like the concept of the main cast having a distinctive color in them (hair, eyes, piece of clothing) while the secondary or 'background' characters are just black and white. Helps differentiate them easily and of course makes the main characters stand out really well.

The only pointer I could give is to try shadows more (know is more work though). In the last page you have shadows before she screams stop and it looks REALLY good.

-Writing-

Great font use, is easy to read. Though I mentioned the font is great, for some reason I feel a more hand writing one could had work better. Reason is the bubbles have slight deformations on them while the text is really straight making them clash a bit. With a more hand writing (non-perfect) font they might have a better harmony.

Otherwise I found the writing easy to follow, easy to understand and quite funny

-Paneling-

You have done a really great job here! The spacing is perfect and usage of panel borders to demote an action (the slap sequence in Page 10) is amazing. I like your mix of traditional style paneling, but you also take in consideration for the vertical reading format.

I would say I notice some errors when characters parts go outside the borders of the panel (the panel line is visible on top of them). Those thing are some time hard to catch, but that is about it.

-Story-

I really like all the set up going on at the moment! Great concept on it being center jazz music, most comics based around music go to the usual classical or rock band. This feels refreshing and of course having a song in every page to get readers to listen and learn more about Jazz music. Your characters are all great and different from each other, which makes it really interesting!

Can't wait to read more and of course know how Frances helps this group become good, if she can manage that!