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Hazumirein
Aug '20

Okay, so, flipping through it--it looks like you used references for objects like the bikes and cars and guns in the first couple episodes, but not as much for the people--they could use some work. For better or worse, the best solution is to practice. Look up some tutorials on anatomy and proportions, and study from photos (or from real life, if possible). You can study other artwork from artists you like, as well; that can be beneficial with helping you develop your art style (just don't plagiarize others' works).

I'm not entirely sure what you want your art to look like in the end, but there are TONS of tutorials online you can look up to help you learn to draw pretty much anything better :slight_smile: I'd start there. Also, be patient, art is something that can take a long time to learn. But as long as you practice regularly you will improve!

riverrdog
Aug '20

Judging from the fonts you're using, I'm assuming you use Medibang?

I want to take about your typesetting. In comics, for speech bubbles, try to centre-align your text. It looks very jarring to be left-aligned unless your speech bubble is at a left corner.

Typesetting is an overlooked aspect of comics but imo it can make or break the reading experience. Plus, you don't need to keep putting "narrator;" in front of narration. Rectangular bubbles are good enough already.

I don't think you need really good art to make a comic, but if the text is unreadable, then that makes all the difference.

For art, all i can say is practice practice practice, but don't put off making your comic until your art is "good enough". Your art can never be "good enough". Get your story out there and seen. Your art will improve over time, don't worry too much about it.

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darthmongoose
Aug '20

You could maybe improve your Japanese handwriting a bit. Your n looks like a so, and your shi looks like tsu, for example. It's best to leave off putting Japanese into stuff if you don't really know what you're doing. I mean, I'm a little rusty, but I'm reading your cover as saying:

"Nest-first-me of Rioso, by Tsuyotsuko Waraisu"

I get the feeling this probably isn't what you intended for this to read as?

For general advice on the comic. Try to think more about how you compose panels so people aren't so often right in the middle facing forward, and keep working hard studying and improving your anatomical and perspective drawing.