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Though technically the first chapter of my novel is the entirety of the first 4 parts on Tapas, i would be happy with a critique on just the first one.
Provided you have the time for it, of course, no need to worry to much for it.

Also, i left my review on the story like you requested, and i subscribed because of how great it actually read, really well done and with a nice flow to it. ^^

Added to the list! Also please check out the chapter A Wish For Death--I think you read the introduction page instead! Thanks! :smile:

I just added a new beginning chapter to my main novel that I would love some feedback on! The forum or a comment is fine, whichever you prefer.

I would LOVE to get a critque because I just uploaded my new comic yesterday!


You can give the review here or in the comments. It's totally your wish.

I would also love a critique. It's a novel. Feedback in the forum please!

I would really appreciate this for my novel and to have the feedback in the forum please!

Here’s mine, has Prologue + 4 chapters as today.
You can give feedback anywhere you want...comments or here, whatever works ^^
Thanks!

Hi, thanks for the opportunity! This is such helpful feedback for the community. :slight_smile: Here's the link to my story. I'd love to hear your feedback on my first chapter in the comments. I'll read your first chapter here shortly.

I humbily request a critique oTL be honest please
(I only have 1 chapter so far..)

Yeah, that would be nice--my chapters are split into small segments, you can decide how much you want to read

Something I didn't put on the comment in your book--mostly because I don't want to leave comments that are criticism where other readers can see it (I left you a comment there though, so you'll get that comment bump), is that it was written really well--it was just really heavy for a first chapter in contrast with the blurb of your book in the first episode which made it seem like a cerebral magic high school teen fantasy. So, as a casual reader taking a peek, I wouldn't have continued because of that whiplash, I went into chapter 1 expecting something much lighter.

Overall though, I think it'll definitely hook the people that are looking for a darker story like that. It has a lot of emotion, it ends on a cliffhanger, it's really readable with good spelling and grammar--all really good things.

And feel free to put your comments about my first chapters here in the thread as a reply to this comment. I don't need a critique inside the book itself.

i'd very much enjoy if you could review the first chapter of my comic!!
i'd prefer a review in thread, if possible :slight_smile:

Hello! Here's your critique:

That was a total hit! The concept packed punch and it was entertaining. I liked your take of the 'Helen' show and her candid interviewing style. You did a wonderful job with your art and the engaging dialogues! I genuinely enjoyed the whole episode :smile: