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Jul 2019

first, i would like to say, thank you for telling me that bubble was cut off, i'm going to fix it on Webtoons soon, i have already fixed it on Tapas

as for the elbow, i was so confused as to what happened there, then i looked at the Tapas release (which is traditional page format) and found out originally; a panel actually covered that, so yes i am glad someone pointed that out to me...

only things i still cant grasp is pasing and the very very hard one... colour theory. i actually have a friend coaching me on that but i know that one will be the harder one to overcome since i really cant grasp the understanding of it, like in a visual sense, you show me a colour nightmare and i would see nothing wrong with it kind of sense but i am takinng these into consideration despite me never going for featured

like the others have said, panels is a bit of a cherry on top thing that I suggest to people who seem to have the skills to accomplish it on top of other things you need to worry about for comics. I do see that many Cavas comics seems to have a lot of white space. Like enough that when I scroll it almost is a bit of work haha, which is something you definitely don't see in Original works. In my experience, people who use smaller korean panels still are just as likely to have large white space so I don't think it's to combat that particular problem.

Regardless, imo panel shapes can be some of the most fun things to do and you do get readers noticing it (I played with it much more in my other comic "Normal." and would get comments complimenting it). Not necessary though. I think your comic is going to go far to good luck on it! :slight_smile:

I don't really think about getting featured because I'd turn into Ahab trying to hunt his whale. I don't even think my kinda comic really has much of a chance to be featured as it's more of a hobby for me and gains steam slowly - tbh I much prefer it that way.

I genuinely think more linear narrative based stories with a more Manga based art are favoured more but not to say other artists work don't shine through, it's only what I have seen consistently for a time.

Going all the way back to the main source question; I think when it comes to gaining a following it really comes down to managing your expectations and doing what you can at a manageable level to put it out there so as not to consume your life, if that makes sense. I've been on and off Tapas and barely broke 100 but have increases in subs by 10 each month on average since january

Don't obsess over growth and enjoy the work you do and relish in the ones who appreciate it.

Don't obsess over getting featured. What you get out of the experience of producing work and the engagement from those who do appreciate it is what matters more than numbers and a digital spotlight (even though yes it would be a marvellous thing I won't deny). Hope this helps somewhat

Okay, I finally updated my comic, and it now has three episodes. I think that's a good number for a critique, yea?

I'd really love some thoughts, this is my first comic!

I was wondering how genre specific your work has to be/how closely does your story have to fit into the genre category you've chosen? What if you have a work that has multiple genres and doesn't neatly fit into a box?

How your story fits into a genre is irrelevant. They want good, original stories above all else. There is just a trend for certain genres not only having really similar elements among stories but having far more competition combined with far less demand from WT.

My story didnt fit into any genre well. They just picked one for me that kind of encompassed one of the themes and rolled with it.

Well, though i want to make the corrections of my webcomic, I will feel bad for my followers with a new reupload ( this is my second upload). They have been supportive in these difficult moments I'm going through . And erasing everything so webtoon can see me again? I guess I'll still make my corrections on the next chapters.

Maybe you could just finish it out with the improvements so you get really good practice with them. Then just come when better with your next story

Naw. I think "reimagined public domain superheroes" is a bit too weird for a Tapas plug. Especially once Stardust starts making with the surreal horror.

Sorry for the wait.

Since you said you're not aiming to get featured I won't critique from that angle, just in general. Also, might I say, 94 updates in the scroll format is incredibly impressive.

My first suggestion would be to use a different font-

You are bubbling great, and the font is in a fine size, but this font has some weird spacing which caught me off guard. It's a tiny detail though.

So I think your coloring is great. The backgrounds are also great. You have good paneling (though I think all the spaces in between the panels could be decreased by about 100 pixels) .. I'd say the thing I am taking the most issue with is the expressions.


Like in this scene, the zoomlines and text make this seem like it's a really dramatic moment. But the character is looking to the side, with a half-smug mostly normal face? For this kind of shot, if you want an impact you should almost always use a face-on shot (it's very intense), and make sure the expression is clear. I can't redraw it because I have no clue how to mask my style drawing faces lol, so here is an anime screenshot with a really exaggerated expression that I think has a similar tone:

Note how even the shading works to enhance the expression. putting shadows over the top of a face always will give the character a "dark" expression.

The expressions being so mild lead to a lot of confusion for me, since the main character never looks alarmed, and none of the "enemies" look like they're on a mission. It looks like this is a daily occurrence to them, as mild as getting milk from the grocery store. I kind of thought the setup was that she is constantly being hunted down, and when the enemies broke in it was like a "Lol, here we go again!" kind of thing where she cheekily taunts them and escapes easily (Like Ash and Team Rocket), but it ended up kind of being a big dramatic thing and she got captured. Making sure the characters faces, expressions, and body language match the tone you're trying to portray will go a long way.

I'm going to go ahead and skip to the latest episodes since IMO art needs the most work here, not that your art is bad at all... I think you just need to zero in on some stuff and work on improving it.

So what I think your STRONGEST thing is your coloring. Your coloring is at a very proficient level (featured level, definitely), I don't have much critique for it. But your anatomy is very off sometimes, which kind of defeats the really nice coloring. I recommend taking some life drawing, or just going outside and doing quick sketches of people walking around. Try to do some detailed muscle-maps of the body. Doing the really complicated stuff I think will help you sort of morph the skills you already have into a more proper understanding of the human body.
Good luck!

So first off, I want to say that I personally think the premise and style of this comic is quite cute. It feel like it has a lot of motivation/passion behind it. Something about the art style that is reminiscent of the cartoons I'd watch on Saturday mornings. This is just my personal opinion though haha, so I'll be getting into the more objective critique.


So right now from the first page I think there is a big issue with readability. Three things

-The gutter space is the same blue as one of your characters, which leads to confusion for a reader. Try making it white or black. I think white and black should be used for 95% of comics, I haven't really seen a comic that pulls off an oddly colored gutter well but I'm sure one is out there so I leave that 5%.

-The text is in a saturated color. I think you should make the bubbles not have any transparency and leave the text as black. Right now the text color is just blending in and I'm having a hard time reading. Readability is super important.

-The panels are quite confusing. When paneling, you have to make it very clear to the reader which panel is 1, 2, 3, 4... Or else a reader will give up quickly since understanding the comic is too much trouble. To do this, try to refrain from having panels that sit on top of each other (your first two here) being completely parallel to another panel. In general, I recommend checking out some american comics or manga and basically copying their layouts.


Here's a random page I just yoinked from BLEACH. See how all the panels stay on the same line horizontally? We know which is first and which is second (noting that japan reads right to left) because we naturally read from the top to bottom. The panels also have tilted "action" lines during fast/tense scenes to get the reader to understand something is going on. But the panels are very neat, clean, and even.


Here's a really quick reformatting I did of the panels. It's not perfect, but if you wanted to keep your original page layout, this would be extremely easy to read for any viewers.

Anyway, I think the biggest improvement that can be made, reading the rest of the pages, is the three points I listed above. All which point back to readability. Text color, bubble color, and paneling. I notice your panels often have inconsistencies like this:

Consider perhaps getting Clip Studio Paint if your budget can afford it. It's about 20$ whenever it's on sale. It has a paneling tool that makes paneling incredibly easy (its what I used to make the panel fix above)

Anyway, good luck ~

Ah, thank you so much! Thankfully, the reboot of DRGN is coming in a few weeks, so I'll be sure to take that feedback to heart! (This comic was mostly just a proof-of-conept/learning exercise more or less.) I've definitely decided to work more on readability in the future. (I ditched the color coded text in favor of color coded speech bubbles instead.)

I can't wait to share the reboot with you when it comes out!

I don't think so. I really need to work on everything especially anatomy, and a schedule.

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... I dunno. Far flung future, maybe? It's pretty early right now and I'm just average skill artistically. But... the folks who have read my comic have been really intrigued... and that sure does fill my head with some silly notion of hope...

I'm not really looking to get featured either, but you seem to give really good advice. If you fell like it, I'd like to hear your critique.

One thing I'm worried about is the color, but if you see any other larger issues you think need addressing I'd love to hear them!

29 days later

My numbers of subs/likes/comments is far too low for that.

The best i could hope is that somehow my comic end in the front page, but those seem to be promoted at random.

I would love it if my WebNovel got featured but I doubt it. It's a WebNovel and I think WebComics are more likely to be featured (maybe, I could be very wrong).

Also, my story is unusual and definitely not for the young'uns or easily marketable. So while I think my art is pretty good (doing Insert Art to give my WebNovel a light novel feel) I doubt it'll reach Staff Picks.

But hey, as long as people like it, I don't mind XD

I don't think I'll get featured. I'm too inconsistent. Still, working and doing my best as if I could get featured is fun