Ok, I read Life of an Aspie, Kaiju Academy, and Empire.
Here we go:
@Greenraptorstudios:
Kaiju academy
First impression: Fun premise, funny designs, simple but effective coloring!
Art: Once again, simple is key here, but it works. The kaiju designs are fun and very close to the genre. I think it's going down a good road, just keep at it.
Characters: Principal Butterfly made me chuckle in her entrance, and the other characters seem fun, although very rushed. I'd like to get to know them a little more, kind of like how Calvin and Hobbes make it work through interactions and opinions more than just the goal each have in mind.
Story There isn't much plot since it just started, although I would have liked to see our protagonist's attempts to enter their desired fields rather than skip to the test results. Not much to say since...again, just started.
Recommendations: In the words of Jackie Chan, slow and steady wins the race. You have an interesting concept that can work as a fun parody, it just started so I think you're off to a good start. Focus more on the characters ad the road you're heading into rather than moving the plot along too quickly.
Final words: You have a good sense of what you want, and I think it'll go great, just really get out there and experiment!
Total: 7.5/10 and I subscribed!
@guily57:
Empire
First impression: Ooh, use that font minimum as possible...art looks very much like the Kishimoto brothers' art style, which can be used for its advantage. There's work on this though. Scenes could be placed a little better too.
Art: ...The action panels are a little confusing. Anatomy is almost there, I also recommend some daily practice and you'll see the style really land itself, but it's not bad. Still, the paneling and sequences of the action could use a second viewing before publishing. I was a little confused.
Characters: Kind of what you'd expect in a shonen manga: brash, hot-headed but kind-hearted protagonist, the brooding rival, equally funny best friend of the protagonist, and the girl at the end? I think this is your weakest bits, sadly.
Story Why is the school training people to fight? Is it military? If so, why isn't uniformity a thing? I think it should use other inspirations to expand a bit, but I think my interest peeked with the old man lending a hand to the main character (pun intended). I'm curious on the world and its rules but I think you showed what you could at where you are right now in the story, good job. (again my biggest issue is the setting of the story itself and the laws)
Recommendations: Practice some anatomy whenever you can, but you're getting there. Work on the paneling and study a bit more how they work, (I recommend books on storyboarding and composition) and really try to mold your characters beyond what you currently have, although to be fair you're also just starting out.
Final words: Keep at it, really. Your heart's in the right place, you just need to push yourself a little harder to step out of the box, but I think you can make it.
Total: 6/10
@toadsteroven:
Life of an Aspie
First impression: Ok, interesting cover page. Uh...are those cuts or stains? I don't know if it's my computer but some things appear too pixelated. Anatomy is off. However the premise of a person with Asperger's as a focus, is very interesting.
Art: Practice, practice, practice. I recommend taking some anatomy lessons even online and this includes drawing the naked body along with some portraits. The project has heart, but the anatomy is very distracting.
Characters: It's very...much like a manga from the 2000's. Not that it's a bad thing, some of my favorites are from that decade, but an US American....English...? girl in a Japanese boarding school seems a tad bland. I think the idea of the concept, which I wouldn't be so pushy about it if it wasn't in the title, is a miss more than a hit in this almost too-expected setting. I don't know who Hiroshi is and by the end I was kind of lost on story and location...sorry. A lot of same-face syndrome in characters of the same gender.
Story Again, the premise is lost a bit. Paneling isn't too bad, but it could be better. I recommend reading books by Scott McCloud for this, it helps A LOT!
Recommendations: Study anatomy, every day, for 30 minutes minimum. Do quick gesture drawings, study weight, draw skeleton maps, turn it into a habit and you'll start seeing differences in how characters look and react. It'll be tough but you'll be thankful for it later. We joke about this in art school that you need One Punch Man discipline to properly draw, and it's true! Do it every day and try to shift the focus on the characters, much like Kaiju Academy, your strongest setting should be them to really take it out of the box.
Final words: Don't give up on the comic! Keep at it!
Total: 4/10
Finally, there's my comic, Cosmic Fish
