Thank you for your detailed review ! Feels nice to have one. Yeah they northern, snow people haha not surprising you got that vibes. This is a big family, hence succession issue, not much I can do for that. I tried to look for an short word for great-grandfather like grandpa for grandfather but couldn't find one. I come up with greatpa, in other chapters. I know it doesn't exist but it's kinda cute. Thank you for the comment on music ! Just came up with the playlist last week, I was so excited about this. Anyway thanks for your overall review ! ^^
Thank you for the review! I really appreciate the feedback and I'm glad you like my writing style ^_^ I hear you on the translations part too haha.
I would like to note though, the reason I didn't describe the person screaming is because since it's in my MC's POV, he would have to be looking at the person to be able to describe them. But since he is locked onto his target and is pretty much used to people screaming, he doesn't bother to look at them. I wrote it that way to make it feel like he can hear the people around him, but isn't paying attention to them. I hope that gives a little clarification. I just try to keep in mind what my characters are actually able to see/are looking at to make it more realistic.
@bulletcrucifixion as I said, it's not bad. You just need a second to adjusted to the names and find out who is who
Excited for the more music, tbh ^^ also you are welcome, I am glad I could help a bit.
@ZakuraTheFungi That makes sense didn't thought about it even though I praised your POV writing , I am sorry. Totally agree with you at that point. Just so used to get everything over described....
hello im folowing u ^^ this is min ^^ https://tapas.io/episode/1944423
Round two (Three will come along)
@ApplesOverIndia Your Novel was one of my first I subbed after I started Tapas again. So, for sure I like it. You paragraphs are the nicest to read out of all Novel by now, it just hits my taste. Also your writing style reminds me a lot of Jona Dreyer - just the English version of her, with words like warm gooeyness. Don't get me wrong Dreyer is one of my fav German Authors! The only thing was that you double your sentences starters sometimes, doesn't happened often and you over read it easily. I just notice stuff like that rather quick. Example in ep 1. So...So..
-Also Mitta reminds me of Mittens and I often read her name like that
@hamza9644 just a tip. If you put info behind your link it shows the banner of your book, what makes it easier for new readers to decide if they want to read or not. I have to say I am not into the story but I like your art and want to see you improve. The only thing that still throws me of is that there is not mature warning. Tapas got a Mature warning button if you turn it on you don't have to tell that in the episode. Especially if someone dies or a lot of blood etc.
@itsrue Bl is always good I am not into Chinese tradition or way of living so I can't judge your story on that part. You got a quite simple writing, not for everyone but I think I like it. And I would like to find out more about what happened to Jing Chen a bit closer... I don't know if it happens in the next few ep. but that would be a nice addition.
@Alkareel I adore you banner, it looks like high quality! And the occasional drawing makes it easier to imagine. But I have to say you need to work on you paragraphs because they are almost none existing. You make every sentence a new paragraph what makes the ep. longer but at the same time harder to read. I think that comes form the talking and you try to separate talking from story telling?!
@EncryptedWriting Katrina is nicely build up, she is though threw and you can feel it while reading.And Henry is an Angel I wish i had a few like him. The story is slowly building up, I will definitely keep going reading it. There is only a minor mistake (I made too without realising). You put instead of “ you put " what is only used for Quotes. Example: Katrina told her mom: “Don't worry, I am fine.“ and a Quote would be "My drops of tears I'll turn to sparks of fire " - William Shakespeare
@mcmx The story development so far is good. You use a wide range of words, it makes everything quite colourful. The reading experience on the other hand is a bit hard. Your paragraphs are sometimes a bit to big, some could lose interest through that mid ep.. Also the same as @EncryptedWriting you use " instead of “. The first one if for quotes the other for speech. Tapas sometimes does this and I still didn't figured out why?!
@Fox_Den7 The calm colour scheme makes it nice to read, the size of your speech bubbles are perfect. And Dragens chewed of Ear is cute, even though it might not be the nicest reminder of what happened. The only thing is the mature content, you can just simply turn it on and Tapas will give to your ep. a warning and people have to tap continue to see the ep. - I know that you mentioned it at the start, but people read your comic over time and might forget about it and i think it's easy to just turn it on.
@Tamachii I am just in woaah and aww. A Traditional art comic, I am speechless. You don't see it that often her on Tapas, but I appreciate and envy everyone that puts so much time and work into it. The only thing is sometimes you see some lines, but don't worry about it. And the words are hard to read because they are so tiny (might be different on the phone). But for traditional art it's nothing compared.
@Fuzzyman818 The simplicity is capturing on its own. Fun to read and a Tom and Jerry vibe is on it. Please keep going with it. Great for a fun minute in my break and anytime appreciated!
@Colours_dont_match I like that there are people like you in this world. Addressing the problems of our hoax society. Please watch out for trolls, they are on something and will discuss everything with you. The only thing is the mature warning. Because of miscarriage etc. just put it on and give your readers a chance to decide if they are fit enough to read it. And I saw that Thanos input
hi im folowing u this x) is mine https://tapas.io/episode/1944423