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I can't? Its automatic from the page. So, yeah.

English is not my first tongue, so also, yeah. I do my best with the little I have.

Absolutely agree! This are the things that I can't learn just by doing. That must be told by an outside eye so I can catch it quicker than I could on my own.

Thank you very much for the honest review @Kuma!

Hello! I've already reviewed Centris a bit, but I have to say that your cover art is gorgeous and definitely drew me in. The summary doesn't draw me in all that much, because I'm not that much of a fantasy nerd, but I like that you introduce the main plot threads quickly. I also found one error, "is, without realizing, drafted to become a paw in the silent war between the factions of the court". I believe it should be "pawn" instead? Aside from that, there's a little bit of wordiness that doesn't work in your favor. For a bit of a catchier blurb, you might want to condense it a bit. For example, you could edit the sentence above into "a young mage ... is unwittingly drafted into the silent war between the factions of the court." or "a young mage unwittingly becomes a pawn in the silent war between the factions." Cutting out words and phrases that mess with the rhythm will help a lot. It's also just a lot of info for a blurb.

I have a few concerns for the hook of this one. First is the cover, though I can't do much about it because I have no money to spare for commissions. It doesn't really strike me as a BL cover, and I also think that on Tapas, characters sell really well, so having a cover without that might drag me down. There's also the fact that my setting is based on the Joseon dynasty, but there's nothing on my cover to represent that, so the reader would have to look into the tags and my blurb to get that part. Beyond that, my blurb might actually be a bit too short. I really try to walk the line of not revealing too much while still showing the core of my story to draw people in. I don't want to misrepresent it. Anywho, let me know what you think!

Murmurations of the mind,
When thoughts coalesce,
Dark emotions shimmering like a fluid heart.

please review mine as well. the first page is the cover art. cheers!

Here is my comics
Comics;
Genre: Action, Drama


Genre: Action, Drama

Genre: Action, Horror

Genre:Action, Drama

Hope you like it..

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A battle shonen novel based on other battle shonen stories.

Hello. My series is a long runner at this point. But I have always had problems when it comes to a description or a thumbnail image lol. I'm never sure what works, so some feedback would be helpful : )

Thanks a lot for the feedback, Although, I mostly have some difficulties with the Description to be honest, as I don't know how to put down in a few words the premise, originally it was longer and more specific on the various stories, but after a while, it might have been a drawback, so I wanted to compact it by also referencing the "Introduction" chapter, and yet it appears it's not working even in this way... I had no idea at all, I always had difficulty with a synopsis (Mostly, trying to explain a lot with just a few words, I tend to be over descriptive in the scripts).

EDIT: Ok, It is shorter than the last one, but I guess this one is more specific and less general, while also not giving away too much.

Ah, I'm glad I could help! I always worry that I'm being too harsh, but the teacher in me wants to help as much as I can.

Apart from working on videogames I practice Pro-Wrestling, so I'm acustomed to getting hit really hard, I have thick skin.

yea i totally understand the issue with the background as im only doing everything myself and backgrounds take a long time to do. as for the story it will take a bit longer to get the full story going as its just the beginning. its slow. but i feel after a few more episodes the story will go better. as for the names they're names i gave them with i was a teen and only changed the last names. mind you i did originally create this story when i was 16 sooooo as of now about....19 years ago. lots of things have changed since. but lets see where it goes. but totally appreciate the feed back. <3

I think you misunderstood the naming part. I meant to say that your description is a tad generic, to the point that if I replaced Janelle's name with any other name, it could easily fit other stories. The issue isn't the name, but the content of the description.

ah ok i get you. the description i had a bit of an issue with it myself. i know i have to re-do it as you said, generic. but i didnt want to give the whole plot away with it.

Is a matter of giving a hook, of telling the audience what makes your work different from others

very true. i'll work on it. it is different here on tapas than webtoons as i have over 10.5k views and 250 subs. but guess its a different audience. i'll just work harder on it. just wish i had a team. maybe one person to work on the background.