I'll Review Your First Chapter! (closed (for right now))

[iamanerd]

Hi friends!

I decided that I wanted to be more involved in the Tapas community, and would love to support new writers.

So, I will read your first chapter and give you feedback. There are a few rules:

1. List at max three questions you would like me to answer about your first chapter.
2. List things that you do not want me to cover (i.e. you don't want me reviewing your MC)
3. One thing you would like me to focus on
4. If you only want the review to be positive only

I work full-time and am a part-time grad student. This also means giving me time. I'm a slow reader who is easily distracted.

Ideally, this is for small new creators who have less than 50 subscribers.

[SpookySky]

Hello, and thank you for your time!

1) Flow of the chapter? Is it easy to follow? Is it too wordy to be intriguing?
2) Nothing I don't want you to cover
3) I tried to make it like you're experiencing everything that the MC is also experiencing for the first time, since we're following his journey. Does that portray well enough?
4) I'm good at taking criticism, so give me the good, bad and ugly <3

Read Dogmatic Dungeon Dominion :: Chapter 01: Awakened | Tapas Community

[mikesakatamaki]

Hi. I appreciate you for creating such a meaningful topic.

1. Is my manga easy to understand? Were there any parts that were difficult to read or felt strange?
2. There’s no subject I don’t want to address. I’d love to hear your opinions.
3. I hope you enjoy seeing my life in Japan.
4. I would like to hear your thoughts, including any criticism you may have.

Please take a look at my work when you have the time.

Read Mikesaka Art Class :: Studio Signage | Tapas Community

[Leyelle]

Well,one of my stories is larger (135) but my other two have less than thirty, so idk if I'm eligible? it's okay if you think i'm too big for this oppurtunity.

ig to focus on:
1. clarity: is it clear to you as a reader what's going on in the story?
2. action: do you get the feeling that what is going on is high stakes and fast paced?
3. intrigue: does it make you curious about what's going on?

List things that you do not want me to cover (i.e. you don't want me reviewing your MC)

i really don't have anything I'm opposed to receiving a review on. And it's okay if it isn't all positive

One thing you would like me to focus on

I guess my main focus is whether it's easy to follow what's going on, sometimes I worry that my writing is a little all over the place and so people can't understand what is taking place in the scene without too much effort.

Thanks in advance if you choose to check out my story!

Read Crystal Blue :: The Actaeon | Tapas Community

[iamanerd]

The flow is nice for an introduction but leaves me a bit confused about the world and the MC. In this chapter, it is mentioned that the MC joined the military at 18, but since I do not recall how old he is it is difficult for me to know how long he was in the military.

Despite this, the flow is still nice. It does a nice job world building and leaves me interested by how things work. It does get wordy within the dialogue to the point where I forgot someone was talking, with this I am referring to Mrs. Watts.

You do a great job of making me experience this at the same time as the MC. The MC doesn't need the world explained to him, but don't forget that your reader will. While we are often smarter than writers think it is a challenge for us to know the world if you do not tell us. There are ways to go around this, you can make chapters that are newspapers or chapters that are not in the MC's point of view.

[SpookySky]

thank you! There is a lengthy prolouge before this that does a lot of world building to set up the whole thing but I jumped you to chapter 1 since thats how the rest of the story is laid out. I'll work on the wordy sentence's and ill be sure to make more clear whos talking. I appreciate you <3

[iamanerd]

Your manga is easy to understand, but with comedy I think we will need to have the punch line hit earlier. This means, make the joke happen quicker especially since it is your first chapter. I also, personally, do not get the joke.

The first chapter is the most important to draw readers in. Your art style is cute and fun to look at, and I am interested in learning more about Mikasa-san. However, just keep in mind your audience. If you are aiming for an English-speaking audience there may be things they miss. For example, I think Mikasa is the last/surname.

Don't let this discourage you. You have a lot of good things in here!

[sams_cartoon_shack]

1. Does the pacing draw you in? Is the layout clear? What feelings do the strips elicit?

2. I'd like you to review the first few strips of my recent The Shapes storyline Struck v. Stuck, as it's more reflective of my current drawing style

3. I want your general opinion.

4. Give me your honest critique including the positive and negative.

Read The Shapes :: Struck v. Struck 1 (Season Premiere) | Tapas Community

[talassus]

Hey, so I know this is most likely about novels, but I would love to know what you think of my comic, SCARS OF THE FUTURE. I´m linking you to the First Chapter proper, not the prologue.

QUESTIONS
What do you think of the pacing?
What are the pages or layouts that, in your opinion, don´t read easily?
What do you think is the thing you like the most about this first chapter?

Read Scars of the Future :: PART 1: The First Jump | Tapas Community

Also, if you liked or subscribed it would mean the world... but that is entirely up to you!! If you do take the time, I thank you SO much for doing it. I´m a little bit beyond the 50 subs, but I´m still new at this. This is my very first comic.

[Harshitx]

To be honest i have some subcribers but i need a honest review for my series please if you can try then please try tp give a review
https://tapas.io/series/SEA-OF-REVENGE

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[LOKIEL]

Thank you for the review!

1. Do the relationship dynamics seem natural? Is the pacing good? How is the world building?
2. You can cover whatever you want!
3. I switch characters point of views, does the switching make sense?
4. Honest critique!

Read The Star's Advent :: Chapter 1: The Proposal (1) | Tapas Community

[mikesakatamaki]

Thank you for your honest opinion.
I didn’t include a joke in Episode 1.
I realize now that it’s not good to have no jokes in a comedy, and I missed that.
I’m grateful to you for pointing it out.

As you said, "Mikesaka" is the family name.
I want to create a proper comedy, and to do so, I’ll study more about the culture of English-speaking countries.

I’m happy you said my art is cute.
I’ll do my best to keep the good points while reducing the flaws.
Your review gave me motivation.
Thank you so much!

[iamanerd]

Hi, apologises but this is only open for those with less than 50 subscribers. c:

[iamanerd]

Hi, can you please provide me more details on things you would like me to focus on?

[iamanerd]

Hi, based on what I could access it is difficult for me to make a review for this one chapter. Is every book its own chapter?

Right now, for me, I am not feeling anything but confusion. Instead of making each chapter its own book keep it together in one big book. I also think this is a book that needs to be interactive withe audience. What ways can you hide details? Could you add hyperlinks to videos?

[iamanerd]

Hi, I know you mentioned that you have other novels with more than 50. So, I just wanted to make sure you want me to still review it or if you changed your mind c:

[iamanerd]

Hi, apologises but this is only open for those with less than 50 subscribers. c:

[Rowan_Lane]

Read Strange Country :: Chapter One - Mom's Gone Missing | Tapas Community

Hey thanks for this!

1.) Is the start too slow? Do you think the MC is making smart choices? is the prose interesting?

2.) There's nothing really i don't want feedback on

3.) the pacing

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