I'll Review your Novels

[irislm]

Hi, I think I really need some feedback on my work. I have recently uploaded 5 chapters only. If possible read them all. Thanks in advance.

Title: can Love Happen to us
Genre: BL, LGBTQ+

Can Love Happen to Us? | Tapas

[ivanskilling]

Thanks for the opportunity! I would love feedback on my short story collection if you don't mind.

Title: Dark Bytes
Genre(s): Scifi, Action, Thriller
How many chapters you want me to read: The full thing, if possible! If not, then maybe the first 26 episodes?
Critical hit required: Goldilocks critic!

Dark Bytes | Tapas

[EchoMan]

Hi, I'd really appreciate some feedback on my novel if possible .

Title: N3on Noir
Genre(s): Scifi, Crime, Action
How many chapters: All if possible
Critical hit required: Goldilocks. I'm just starting out so I need to know what's good and what needs work

N3on Noir | Tapas

[Freemints30]

Despite its warning so far the NSFW parts I believe is not too much now, since. Especially in the 1st arc. which is just more slow and causal (non-existant except violance). But really I tends to mark every thing that happens when its more mature than usual with specific warnings so you can gloss over if the violence is too much.

Title: Smoke and Murders
Genre: Mystery, LGBTQ+, Drama

How many?: Im up to 73 chapters but If you don't want to that I'll say just the 1st Act which is 50 but you can skip all the extra artwork, collab, joke chapters and world builiding notes as the are not necessary.

Story synopsis: As the smoke and smog spill into the sky, many have accepted it as just the way things are. Even while the Ildens get's colder and colder with each passing year, and no one seems to care.

Three people who shouldn't be close find themselves forced to work with each other. But will their efforts only help to make things worse?

At this point does it actually matter how much worse it can get?

Critical hit: I guess a mixture of goldilocks and a dash of harsh. I know my English is poor and Im planning to go back and edit it out. But really I want to know how my story if fully going especially with 1/3 of it done

Smoke and Murders | Tapas

[LinYang]

Thanks for doing this!

Title: Those Who Were Given Another Yesterday
Genre(s): Fantasy, Urban, Drama
How many chapters you want me to read: If possible, all the ones that are unlocked? There's 7 out right now I think.
Story synopsis:
Nine characters are trapped in a time loop. Yesterday they were friends, tomorrow they will be enemies. Today...they can only live in the present.
With memories being constantly wiped and identities exchanged with every reset, can the nine of them work together to break the loop? Or will they be forced to relive these few months of their lives forever?
Critical hit required: Goldilocks, please.
Story link: https://tapas.io/series/Those-Who-Were-Given-Another-Yesterday/info

[Kuma]

I love me some feedback

Title:
Centris

Genre(s):
Fantasy, Political Intrigue, Action.

How many chapters you want me to read: The series has 12 chapters so far, but read as many as you like

Story synopsis:
The Kingdom of Via is in the midst of a silent war between factions of noblemen. Novus, a young Arcanist from a lowborn family (The first ever) and Callis, a knight from a noble clan who is discriminated for his bloodline, will end up being unwitting pawns in the conspiracy slowly closing its grip around the whole nation.

Critical hit required
Goldilocks to Harsh

Story link:

Centris | Tapas

[lumisullivan]

I would love some feedback!

Title: A Fool's Wish

Genre(s): Fantasy (main), action, drama

How many chapters you want me to read: Idk as much as you feel like you need to get a proper grip on the story and be able to give feedback on, so maybe 10-ish chapters.

Story synopsis: Akilah, a 17-year-old girl is broken when she finds the headless corpse of her childhood best friend Adara. Adara had been wrongfully accused of cheating on her soon-to-be husband, the King of their nation, a man who had been blinded by deceiving people. The perpetrators behind Adara’s wrongful death were many but none of them were exposed or held accountable for it.

Life is unfair - those are the first words uttered by Akilah after burying the headless corpse of her best friend, Adara. Desperate and on the brink of insanity she decides to make a deal with the devil in order to gain power and rewind back time. Will the deal workout in Akilah favor; will she be able to save Adara from the monsters that killed her or will history repeat itself?

Critical hit required: Idk maybe somewhere in-between, so goldilocks I guess?

Story link:

A Fool's Wish | Tapas

[DWaM22]

Given how quickly people are bound to swarm this thread in want for reviews, I can only wish you good luck with the inevitable backlog, haha.

Well, I can't say I'm any less desperate, so here goes:

Title: Aleph Null

Genre(s): Light Fantasy, Comedy, Drama, Supernatural

Number of Chapters to Read: 8 should probably be enough. If memory serves me right, that should add up to 12k words or so, which should make it an hour's read. I'd obviously like it if you read more, but I feel like with the amount of requests you've already got, it'd be unfair of me to really push for anything further.

Synopsis: Two friends go on a road trip to find a murderer. To survive, they rob gas stations along the way. They also may or may not have kidnapped a hamster. Oh -- and one of them is a walking corpse.

Critique Type: I'm fine with whatever. If you really don't like the story, getting harsh critique is fine. Overall, I'm more interested in the general impression you got from reading the chapters, not specific things to change or fix, since the story is complete at this point.

Link:

Aleph Null | Tapas

Thanks for the opportunity and good luck!

[jenessamdsilva]

Thank you for this opportunity!!
Title: The Love She Wanted
Genre: Romance, Drama, Mystery
How many chapters you want me to read (It can be the complete story too, but then you would have to wait for a week at least): The whole thing if possible.
Story synopsis: Annalise Smith drives around town, upset that she hasn’t made any progress with her neighbour and crush Nicholas Fisher. She soon runs into an upset Benjamin MacLerie who seems to be going through a heartbreak as well. As she decides to help him, what develops is an unlikely friendship, a blooming romance and an investigation concerning someone’s ex-wife.
Critical hit required [gentle, goldilocks, or harsh criticism as mentioned above]: I think somewhere between goldilocks and harsh criticism would be great.
Story link:

The Love She Wanted | Tapas

[roguemonte]

Title: In Midsummer's Rain
Genre: Romance, Fantasy, Drama
Status: Ongoing
Age rating: 18 above
Details:
Elizia arrives to Lumeria to visit the house her grandfather bestowed on her. There she meets a mysterious dashing young man of her age named Luke. Through her stay, Elizia observed Luke from afar and uncovers the secret the young man hides.
Link: https://tapas.io/series/In-Midsummers-Rain/info

There are currently 5 chapters (including the prologue) but it depends on you how far you'll go. I'd want your frank opinion about it, and see if I detail sentences too literally or not. It's my first time writing a romance story since I mostly write action stories, so I'd help if I get a frank opinion about someone so I'd know which points need improvement.

[Eliteone]

Title - A Demon Gives an Entrance Exam

Genre - Psychological, reverse reincarnation, school, drama

Chapters- I would suggest reading till episode 14. (The first chapter 1-14 episode)

Synopsis - Asura, a demon, infamous for his intimidating powers and cruel tactics is betrayed by his only friend on his journey to becoming the demon king. Reincarnated as a 16-year-old human with the purpose to crack an entrance exam which is supposedly the most difficult task in the universe, Asura has a second chance to prove his worth.

Correcting his past mistakes, Asura has now decided to lead this life as a loner and not to trust anyone. Underneath the peaceful and simple life of the human world, he discovers the dark nature of humans, which is not very different from the demons.

Even after being a very hard worker, Asura finds himself struggling with his studies. Using his demon tactics, he tackles the challenges that fall upon him and his classmates.

I don't know what 'Goldilocks' criticism means, medium harsh maybe.

Halfway between gentle and harsh would be great.

Here is my web novel. - A Demon Gives an Entrance Exam.

Check out A Demon Gives an Entrance Exam on Tapas https://tapas.io/series/A-Demon-Gives-an-Entrance-Exam

[avenice]

Title: Vestimortis
Genre(s): Fantasy
How many chapters you want me to read (It can be the complete story too, but then you would have to wait for a week at least): I got like 8 chapters up so you can read how many you want
Story synopsis:
The Vestimortis has begun. Ira Eralis and Damian Arkathe, two discriminated faeries—one for her disability and the other for his parentage—are chosen to fulfill seven tasks assigned to them or risk being exiled by their own kin. As they race towards the obstacles that await them, their choices would thread deeper around their already-entangled fates.

However, things aren't what they seem. A death threat runs high. Deadly illusions morph into cruel reality. And a battle they've waited for millenia is approaching their territories. As the pair embark on a journey of conspiracies and closed doors, they discover secrets left unquestioned and prophecies left unanswered.

Will Ira be able to accomplish her dream of having a seat in the Council of the Devils or will she be exiled before she even makes it back?
Critical hit required [gentle, goldilocks, or harsh criticism as mentioned above): Harsh (but also a little bit of Goldilocks, because I really want to know what I did right)
Story link:

Vestimortis | Tapas

[milkae]

Okay so here it is after I've read the first 50 chapters:

Cover/thumbnail/banner :
The cover looks really good in a simple way and is really my style. Though, I think that the 'I' looks like a 'J' so maybe you could work with the font work, but it still looks good. Would click on the story based on the book. Rating: 7.5/10

Synopsis: Intriguing. I'll rate it a 7/10.

Story: So since I have read only the first 50 chapters and not up to 83, I'd like to say that this storyline is a real wow factor. Not kidding, buddy. It all goes in a flow but yes, there are some boring parts in it but which story doesn't have boring parts? I would certainly keep reading the story and I'd like to rate it a 7.5/10

Now, for the criticism: While writing a story, we have a subtle rule that we usually write numbers in worded form instead of the actual numbers and I have noticed that there are many instances where there are numbers instead of words, so I think you can work on that part. For example, instead of writing 1 second, 2 seconds, you can write one second, two seconds. On the other hand, we can't write 573948579345 in word format so that's an exception.
Other than that, I think you can remove the extra line between paragraphs because as someone who read the initial chapters from the mobile app, it was quite tiresome to unnecessarily scroll.

Total rating: 7.5/10

[Daisy]

Title: Elijah's Soulmate
Genre(s): Romance, BL, Drama
How many chapters: All of the chapters, if that's possible in your schedule.
Story synopsis:
Only a few can escape the string. Elijah was hoping he’d be part of the statistics.

The red string tied on the pinky of his left hand, ends up as a decoration he’d rather remove than to be reminded for a sought-after reality. So, to rebel against it. Elijah Ocampo married a woman he met at college, had a kid together named Matteo, and hopefully lived a simple life.

Almost.

Lisa Cruz found her soulmate, a man named Adam Salazar. Going against her belief, she divorces Elijah to be with her soulmate while hoping to kindle a friendship from their broken marriage. Elijah couldn’t exactly be okay with her ideas but forcibly tries to move on with his life, focusing on his son who began to take up his entire world.

It would’ve been a fine life to continuously lick his wounds until his very end. If it weren’t for the fact, his soulmate, Lorenzo Reyes, enter his shop and asked for a bouquet he could buy at the very last minute.

Critical hit required: harsh criticism
Story link:

Elijah's Soulmate | Tapas

I wanna improve my writing and that is from reviews or criticisms from others concerning my work

[chestnutriceeee]

Oh! Thank you so much for checking it out!

I'll fix the number thing soon. Thanks a lot for pointing it out!

It seems I am not doing as bad as I thought. I am glad you liked it! Thanks again!

[Arkwardrose]

Title: More Than Her Friend
Genre(s):Romance, Gl, mystery, crime
How many chapters: All the chapters, if it's doable
Story synopsis:
Jessie's parents send her to an all-girl boarding school, to travel and get away from her. But what happens when Jessie meets her roomie? And starts feeling things she hasn't before. Will she go with the flow and be more than her friend?

Meet Jessie, a quiet girl who hides away from the world, but what happens when the fiery redhead with a temper ignites something in her?

Meet Cherry, a girl with a fiery temper that has no intention of loving anyone, with new girls in her bed every day. But what happens when she befriends the quiet girl, that's always alone?
Could she give up her old ways or just burn alone? As it always has been
Critical hit required: harsh criticism**

Story link:

More Than Her Friend | Tapas

I want to have a review/criticism of my work, to make the improvements and grow.

[Shazic]

ooo okay i take this please review though im a little scared of im up for it

Please read all my chapters if you could

Also the title is called The Drifter Era

Its a sci fi, pycholgical, drama

The Drifter Era | Tapas

[MShadowlawn]

Title: Urban Wolf: On The Run
Genre(s): Action, Psychological, Mystery, Urban Fantasy(Supernatural/low fantasy)
How many chapters you want me to read: As many or as few as you'd like. If my work can't hold your attention, I don't want to be too much of a bother. It's still not fully released but should be about 56 chapters in total (not counting multi-parters to work with Tapas's systems) upon releasing the last chapter.
Story synopsis(You can evaluate this too if you like):
June had cursed her bad luck for nearly all her life. One dark night, she set foot on the train platform to escape her past… But it seems whatever dark cloud’s been hanging over her followed her.

The train ticket took her to Halych, the illustrious city that thrives in the daylight and hides great darkness in its shadows. It’s just her luck, then, that she ends up in an underground gang war against a drug cartel.

It’s just her luck, then, that the swordmaster can’t seem to escape the blood, the danger, and all the choices she didn’t want to have to make.

But worst of all is how—despite all her soul-searching—she can’t even escape her own shadow.
Critical hit required: Whatever you feel is the best fit for my work. I just want a fair and honest evaluation, and understanding the good as well as the bad would be pretty nice..
Story link:

Urban Wolf: On The Run | Tapas

Let me know if you're down to clown.

[vholdfield]

Title: Broken Hearts
Genre(s): Romance, LGBTQ+
How many chapters: All the chapters, if possible
Story synopsis:
Nazar and Ante's lives are totally different. Different life style, different pasts and experiences. Their paths cross when Ante begins to work for Mr. Andrews where they are instantly drawn to each other. How someone so different than you could understand you so well? Together, they end up deciding to run away from their lives and explore the country looking for a fresh start.

But what do you do when your past comes back and that you have to fight your own demons and problems? Is friendship and love stronger than blood relationships?

Time will put them through many different hardships, from their past and current life, and they will have to resolve their unfinished businesses in order to live the life they always dreamed of.
Critical hit required: I would be great to hear the good and the bad things of my novel
Story link:

Broken Hearts | Tapas

[fragmented]

hey, thank you for doing this in advance.

title: learning to fly

genres: fantasy, lgbt

chapters to read: as much as you want (there's not a lot of chapters up really as of now)

story synopsis:
This is how Mason day’s goes ever since their boyfriend broke up with them a month ago:

They wake up, run, shower, eat, go to work, come back from work, shower again, eat again, watch TV until they fall asleep, wake up, and repeat the whole day again and again and again.

Sarafeyette is an angel. He is supposed to deliver a message to a temple on Earth and return back to Heaven. A very simple task. However, during his journey something strange and unexpected happens. He falls. And when he tries to fly again, he can’t.

What happens when these two collide path in the most unlikely of circumstances?

critical hit required: goldilocks, ig(???), maybe with a tad bit of harshness

story link: https://tapas.io/series/Learning-To-Fly-/info

Learning To Fly | Tapas