I'll Review your Novels

[milkae]

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[chestnutriceeee]

I think I really need a harsh critique on mine. Thank you for doing this!

Genre(s): Fantasy, Comedy, Action

How many chapters you want me to read: As many as you like.

Story synopsis:

Summary

Magic is the very core of the world. Floating lands, moving trees, rising waterfalls, and beasts of unimaginable strength. Magic flourishes! Magic proliferates! Magic creates! Nothing in the world is impervious to magic. Nothing but a boy.

When Ivan, a mere thief, finds a pocket watch with the power of “Trial Run” the world changes.

With just the watch and his wits, Ivan embarks on a conquest to rid the world of Magic. The filthy magic that steals, the filthy magic that deprives, and the filthy magic that kills.

Using everything in his path, Ivan will plunge this developing world into chaos to achieve what he wants.

This is the story of betrayals, schemes, and trickery.

This is the story of friendship, trust, and destiny.

This is the story of a villain. Who only god knows is right or wrong.

Critical hit required [gentle, goldilocks, or harsh criticism as mentioned above): As harsh as you can. Rip it apart please, thank you.

Story link: https://tapas.io/series/Trial-Run/info

[BlunderingAlbatross]

Hi! Always looking for feedback, so I'd love it if you could take a look

Title: The End of All Things

Genre(s): Fantasy, Action, and a bit of GL

How many chapters you want me to read: As much as you want. It's currently at over 170k words, so I understand if you don't want to do that much

Story synopsis:

Summary

Three years after the world ended, a group of survivors is eking out a living on an island far from the destruction of the mainland, only returning to that cursed place to pick through the ruins of civilisation.

However, one day this all changes as an old power emerges to threatening everything one young woman holds dear, forcing her to fight tooth and nail with (or in spite of) the help of capricious gods.

Critical hit required: Goldilocks? I want to know what I'm doing wrong but it's also nice to know what I'm doing right!

Story link:

The End of All Things | Tapas

[Lahin]

Thank you for the opportunity! It has indeed been a while since I've gotten some feedback on my work. It'd be a great help if you choose to do so!

Title: Jinsei: Resonate
Genre: Slice of Life(main), Comedy, Romance

You can choose to read the whole story up to now and I'm good with waiting. But if you wish to read partially, Around chapter 12 should be a good place to stop. Then again, it's a lot, so I'll wait. Take your time.

Story synopsis:

Summary

The value in our encounters, the ones around us and the foundation for our dreams.

"They say humans change as they meet new people. Isn't that almost like resonance?"

Matsumoto Isamu, a high school junior, is obsessed with his ambition to be remembered. To become someone great or doing something of significant impact. With strengths that he can't use properly and weaknesses that bind him, he lives his life constantly in doubt. He has also been troubled due to a mysterious silhouette appearing in the park near his home at times.

What will happen when he unravels the silhouette's identity?

Told mostly through dialogue and comedy, this is a story of a group of individuals, each on their own journey and how much they influence each other without realizing it.

Do humans really resonate? Or is it just fiction?

Critical hit required: Harsh!

Link: https://tapas.io/series/Jinsei-Resonate/info

[Sethstiel]

Hi hiii~ Sethstiel here ^^
First of all thank you for the opportunity!!

Title: Knights & Mages Online
Genre(s): Fantasy, LGBTQ+ , Action
How many chapters you want me to read (It can be the complete story too, but then you would have to wait for a week at least) You can read the whole thing, it's still not that much anyways ^^
Story synopsis: When 61 million of the world population gets trapped in a Multiplayer Virtual Reality game; KMO, and the Creator goes all Villain, turns everything into a Death-Game, what would you do?
Seth Kiah, the Winner of the Beta Test, has been exiled. What is the possibility of surviving?
Critical hit required: I'll take a Goldilocks criticism, thank you
Story link:

Knights & Mages Online; The Lightnovel | Tapas

[Lirina]

I always appreciate feedback!

Title: The Millionaire's heir
Genre(s): BL, Romance, Drama, Mystery
Story synopsis:
hen Ryvan, sole heir to a large corporate group, enters Fairlight University, he quickly falls in love with Taren, an ex-gang leader who is handsome, strong, and intimidating.

But what Ryvan doesn't know is no one at Fairlight is ordinary and everyone has secrets darker than his own.

Without warning, he becomes a target of Taren's gang friends, finds himself in the centre of his friend's revenge plot, and uncovers Taren's grim connection to his lost brother.

Can Ryvan find the path to Taren’s long sealed-off heart despite all these obstacles?

Critical hit required: Mix it all together?
Story link:

The Millionaire's Heir | Tapas

[irislm]

Hi, I think I really need some feedback on my work. I have recently uploaded 5 chapters only. If possible read them all. Thanks in advance.

Title: can Love Happen to us
Genre: BL, LGBTQ+

Can Love Happen to Us? | Tapas

[ivanskilling]

Thanks for the opportunity! I would love feedback on my short story collection if you don't mind.

Title: Dark Bytes
Genre(s): Scifi, Action, Thriller
How many chapters you want me to read: The full thing, if possible! If not, then maybe the first 26 episodes?
Critical hit required: Goldilocks critic!

Dark Bytes | Tapas

[EchoMan]

Hi, I'd really appreciate some feedback on my novel if possible .

Title: N3on Noir
Genre(s): Scifi, Crime, Action
How many chapters: All if possible
Critical hit required: Goldilocks. I'm just starting out so I need to know what's good and what needs work

N3on Noir | Tapas

[Freemints30]

Despite its warning so far the NSFW parts I believe is not too much now, since. Especially in the 1st arc. which is just more slow and causal (non-existant except violance). But really I tends to mark every thing that happens when its more mature than usual with specific warnings so you can gloss over if the violence is too much.

Title: Smoke and Murders
Genre: Mystery, LGBTQ+, Drama

How many?: Im up to 73 chapters but If you don't want to that I'll say just the 1st Act which is 50 but you can skip all the extra artwork, collab, joke chapters and world builiding notes as the are not necessary.

Story synopsis: As the smoke and smog spill into the sky, many have accepted it as just the way things are. Even while the Ildens get's colder and colder with each passing year, and no one seems to care.

Three people who shouldn't be close find themselves forced to work with each other. But will their efforts only help to make things worse?

At this point does it actually matter how much worse it can get?

Critical hit: I guess a mixture of goldilocks and a dash of harsh. I know my English is poor and Im planning to go back and edit it out. But really I want to know how my story if fully going especially with 1/3 of it done

Smoke and Murders | Tapas

[LinYang]

Thanks for doing this!

Title: Those Who Were Given Another Yesterday
Genre(s): Fantasy, Urban, Drama
How many chapters you want me to read: If possible, all the ones that are unlocked? There's 7 out right now I think.
Story synopsis:
Nine characters are trapped in a time loop. Yesterday they were friends, tomorrow they will be enemies. Today...they can only live in the present.
With memories being constantly wiped and identities exchanged with every reset, can the nine of them work together to break the loop? Or will they be forced to relive these few months of their lives forever?
Critical hit required: Goldilocks, please.
Story link: https://tapas.io/series/Those-Who-Were-Given-Another-Yesterday/info

[Kuma]

I love me some feedback

Title:
Centris

Genre(s):
Fantasy, Political Intrigue, Action.

How many chapters you want me to read: The series has 12 chapters so far, but read as many as you like

Story synopsis:
The Kingdom of Via is in the midst of a silent war between factions of noblemen. Novus, a young Arcanist from a lowborn family (The first ever) and Callis, a knight from a noble clan who is discriminated for his bloodline, will end up being unwitting pawns in the conspiracy slowly closing its grip around the whole nation.

Critical hit required
Goldilocks to Harsh

Story link:

Centris | Tapas

[lumisullivan]

I would love some feedback!

Title: A Fool's Wish

Genre(s): Fantasy (main), action, drama

How many chapters you want me to read: Idk as much as you feel like you need to get a proper grip on the story and be able to give feedback on, so maybe 10-ish chapters.

Story synopsis: Akilah, a 17-year-old girl is broken when she finds the headless corpse of her childhood best friend Adara. Adara had been wrongfully accused of cheating on her soon-to-be husband, the King of their nation, a man who had been blinded by deceiving people. The perpetrators behind Adara’s wrongful death were many but none of them were exposed or held accountable for it.

Life is unfair - those are the first words uttered by Akilah after burying the headless corpse of her best friend, Adara. Desperate and on the brink of insanity she decides to make a deal with the devil in order to gain power and rewind back time. Will the deal workout in Akilah favor; will she be able to save Adara from the monsters that killed her or will history repeat itself?

Critical hit required: Idk maybe somewhere in-between, so goldilocks I guess?

Story link:

A Fool's Wish | Tapas

[DWaM22]

Given how quickly people are bound to swarm this thread in want for reviews, I can only wish you good luck with the inevitable backlog, haha.

Well, I can't say I'm any less desperate, so here goes:

Title: Aleph Null

Genre(s): Light Fantasy, Comedy, Drama, Supernatural

Number of Chapters to Read: 8 should probably be enough. If memory serves me right, that should add up to 12k words or so, which should make it an hour's read. I'd obviously like it if you read more, but I feel like with the amount of requests you've already got, it'd be unfair of me to really push for anything further.

Synopsis: Two friends go on a road trip to find a murderer. To survive, they rob gas stations along the way. They also may or may not have kidnapped a hamster. Oh -- and one of them is a walking corpse.

Critique Type: I'm fine with whatever. If you really don't like the story, getting harsh critique is fine. Overall, I'm more interested in the general impression you got from reading the chapters, not specific things to change or fix, since the story is complete at this point.

Link:

Aleph Null | Tapas

Thanks for the opportunity and good luck!

[jenessamdsilva]

Thank you for this opportunity!!
Title: The Love She Wanted
Genre: Romance, Drama, Mystery
How many chapters you want me to read (It can be the complete story too, but then you would have to wait for a week at least): The whole thing if possible.
Story synopsis: Annalise Smith drives around town, upset that she hasn’t made any progress with her neighbour and crush Nicholas Fisher. She soon runs into an upset Benjamin MacLerie who seems to be going through a heartbreak as well. As she decides to help him, what develops is an unlikely friendship, a blooming romance and an investigation concerning someone’s ex-wife.
Critical hit required [gentle, goldilocks, or harsh criticism as mentioned above]: I think somewhere between goldilocks and harsh criticism would be great.
Story link:

The Love She Wanted | Tapas

[roguemonte]

Title: In Midsummer's Rain
Genre: Romance, Fantasy, Drama
Status: Ongoing
Age rating: 18 above
Details:
Elizia arrives to Lumeria to visit the house her grandfather bestowed on her. There she meets a mysterious dashing young man of her age named Luke. Through her stay, Elizia observed Luke from afar and uncovers the secret the young man hides.
Link: https://tapas.io/series/In-Midsummers-Rain/info

There are currently 5 chapters (including the prologue) but it depends on you how far you'll go. I'd want your frank opinion about it, and see if I detail sentences too literally or not. It's my first time writing a romance story since I mostly write action stories, so I'd help if I get a frank opinion about someone so I'd know which points need improvement.

[Eliteone]

Title - A Demon Gives an Entrance Exam

Genre - Psychological, reverse reincarnation, school, drama

Chapters- I would suggest reading till episode 14. (The first chapter 1-14 episode)

Synopsis - Asura, a demon, infamous for his intimidating powers and cruel tactics is betrayed by his only friend on his journey to becoming the demon king. Reincarnated as a 16-year-old human with the purpose to crack an entrance exam which is supposedly the most difficult task in the universe, Asura has a second chance to prove his worth.

Correcting his past mistakes, Asura has now decided to lead this life as a loner and not to trust anyone. Underneath the peaceful and simple life of the human world, he discovers the dark nature of humans, which is not very different from the demons.

Even after being a very hard worker, Asura finds himself struggling with his studies. Using his demon tactics, he tackles the challenges that fall upon him and his classmates.

I don't know what 'Goldilocks' criticism means, medium harsh maybe.

Halfway between gentle and harsh would be great.

Here is my web novel. - A Demon Gives an Entrance Exam.

Check out A Demon Gives an Entrance Exam on Tapas https://tapas.io/series/A-Demon-Gives-an-Entrance-Exam

[avenice]

Title: Vestimortis
Genre(s): Fantasy
How many chapters you want me to read (It can be the complete story too, but then you would have to wait for a week at least): I got like 8 chapters up so you can read how many you want
Story synopsis:
The Vestimortis has begun. Ira Eralis and Damian Arkathe, two discriminated faeries—one for her disability and the other for his parentage—are chosen to fulfill seven tasks assigned to them or risk being exiled by their own kin. As they race towards the obstacles that await them, their choices would thread deeper around their already-entangled fates.

However, things aren't what they seem. A death threat runs high. Deadly illusions morph into cruel reality. And a battle they've waited for millenia is approaching their territories. As the pair embark on a journey of conspiracies and closed doors, they discover secrets left unquestioned and prophecies left unanswered.

Will Ira be able to accomplish her dream of having a seat in the Council of the Devils or will she be exiled before she even makes it back?
Critical hit required [gentle, goldilocks, or harsh criticism as mentioned above): Harsh (but also a little bit of Goldilocks, because I really want to know what I did right)
Story link:

Vestimortis | Tapas

[milkae]

Okay so here it is after I've read the first 50 chapters:

Cover/thumbnail/banner :
The cover looks really good in a simple way and is really my style. Though, I think that the 'I' looks like a 'J' so maybe you could work with the font work, but it still looks good. Would click on the story based on the book. Rating: 7.5/10

Synopsis: Intriguing. I'll rate it a 7/10.

Story: So since I have read only the first 50 chapters and not up to 83, I'd like to say that this storyline is a real wow factor. Not kidding, buddy. It all goes in a flow but yes, there are some boring parts in it but which story doesn't have boring parts? I would certainly keep reading the story and I'd like to rate it a 7.5/10

Now, for the criticism: While writing a story, we have a subtle rule that we usually write numbers in worded form instead of the actual numbers and I have noticed that there are many instances where there are numbers instead of words, so I think you can work on that part. For example, instead of writing 1 second, 2 seconds, you can write one second, two seconds. On the other hand, we can't write 573948579345 in word format so that's an exception.
Other than that, I think you can remove the extra line between paragraphs because as someone who read the initial chapters from the mobile app, it was quite tiresome to unnecessarily scroll.

Total rating: 7.5/10

[Daisy]

Title: Elijah's Soulmate
Genre(s): Romance, BL, Drama
How many chapters: All of the chapters, if that's possible in your schedule.
Story synopsis:
Only a few can escape the string. Elijah was hoping he’d be part of the statistics.

The red string tied on the pinky of his left hand, ends up as a decoration he’d rather remove than to be reminded for a sought-after reality. So, to rebel against it. Elijah Ocampo married a woman he met at college, had a kid together named Matteo, and hopefully lived a simple life.

Almost.

Lisa Cruz found her soulmate, a man named Adam Salazar. Going against her belief, she divorces Elijah to be with her soulmate while hoping to kindle a friendship from their broken marriage. Elijah couldn’t exactly be okay with her ideas but forcibly tries to move on with his life, focusing on his son who began to take up his entire world.

It would’ve been a fine life to continuously lick his wounds until his very end. If it weren’t for the fact, his soulmate, Lorenzo Reyes, enter his shop and asked for a bouquet he could buy at the very last minute.

Critical hit required: harsh criticism
Story link:

Elijah's Soulmate | Tapas

I wanna improve my writing and that is from reviews or criticisms from others concerning my work