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Oct 2021

Hi, everyone!

I'm looking for honest comments about my opening chapters of my story Chewing Gum.

You can read the opening chapters (prologue - chapter one) here:

Thank you for your time :heart:

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Hi,

I read your story. It's pretty well written considering that you describe a lot of things going on to the reader. I do like your use of quotes especially about music.

I don't have really much to say grammar wise. I think you are off to a pretty good start.

I'm not a fan of this genre of writing, but I can say I particularly loved this one. Maybe because I'm a musician and music has been a part of my life since I was very little, idk, I just find the plot very interesting and I want to read more. So, please send me the next chapters whenever they're ready cause I'm very curious about it! Plus, I just find it hilarious that the bassist writes the songs since we always mock them for being forgotten in every band hahah. Good luck with your novel!

Thank you so much for your honest comments. :two_hearts: I'm happy about your comments and appreciate the time you gave to read and comment about Chewing Gum. :slight_smile:

Thank you so much :two_hearts: I'm happy you love the story so far. I'm happy to know a music lover and musician like you enjoyed reading the story. :slight_smile:
I appreciate your feedback so much.

11 days later

Hi, everyone :sparkling_heart: still looking for honest reviews/comments for my opening chapters. Thank you so much for your time :two_hearts::slight_smile: